Five Tips For Killer Sales Copy...

27 replies
Hi everyone,

I'd like to start with something that's so fundamentally obvious; and that is to sell benefits NOT features. Any experienced copywriter will know benefits are vital when it comes to selling your prospects on your product or service, and yet for some reason it's still something that many internet business owners seem to forget.

Secondly, focus on crafting an irresistible offer before you even think about sitting down and writing a sales letter. It goes without saying that people hate taking risks - especially in our community - and so anything you can do with your guarantee to eliminate risk on their part is bound to increase sales.

In addition, studies have proven that upgrading your guarantee to a period of eight weeks or more will even reduce your refund rates too. It's obviously important to take into account the nature of your market. The cynical people in the gambling community, for example, tend to jump from one thing to another and so offering an extended guarantee might not be such a good idea.

I'd also stay away from forced continuity. Or at least if you are going to use it, be sure to be completely up front with your customers BEFORE they reach the order form. When I was writing the sales letter for Josh Bartlett's Easy Video Player, we decided it was best to be up front rather than waiting until they forgot to cancel their monthly subscription.

If you are going to offer continuity programs, make sure it compliments your product well. Sure, it's a great business model when implemented ethically and marketed correctly, but a crappy upsell is not only going to decrease profits and increase refund rates - it'll harm your credibility too!

You quite simply MUST have an awesome headline if you want to succeed in this business. I don't know exact figures, but I'd estimate you've got between 3-5 seconds to make an impression and really seize your visitor's attention before they leave your website through that big back button on their browser bar.

You can either choose to use a negative headline, or go with something positive. I like to split-test as I think seperate types of headline compliment different markets in different ways, but more often than not invoking fear into your prospects through a negative outlook will generally increase conversions. Just be careful that you don't come across as morbid in doing so; at the same time as stating your market's fears you want to slide towards the benefits, and get your prospects really thinking about your product/service can help them remove this fear and improve their life.

Once you've salted your customers for what you're about to introduce them to, you need to gain some instant credibility by showing proof that you know what you're talking about as early as possible. Scams are far too common nowadays, and if you can prove beyond all doubt - through screenshots, testimonials or even video proof - that your stuff REALLY does what it says on the tin, you're destined for success right before you've even started.

So many copywriters nowadays will wait until they reach the bottom half of their sales letter before including testimonials. Why? Because that's what everyone else does!

The reality of this situation is that if you're only doing what every other Tom, Dick or Harry is doing then you're going to come across as yet another "guru". And we all know how people feel about them, right? So don't do it! By proving yourself as honest and genuine right from the start, you'll have people literally begging for you to sell them something before they even get towards the bottom of the page...

My final tip is to include a box at the bottom of your sales letter that stops site scrollers! Mike Filsaime did this to good effect with his launch of the original Butterfly Marketing home study course, and it really helped stop people from scrolling through just to see what the price was.

Again, it made his prospects thinks "oh, this is different" and want to go back and read the rest of the letter. Anything you can do to be different will normally gain you credibility, and the bottom line is that credibility sells products.

Talk soon,

Connor
#affiliates #copy #killer #letter #sales #tips
  • Profile picture of the author hjalte81
    Originally Posted by cgallagher93 View Post

    Hi everyone,

    My final tip is to include a box at the bottom of your sales letter that stops site scrollers! Mike Filsaime did this to good effect with his launch of the original Butterfly Marketing home study course, and it really helped stop people from scrolling through just to see what the price was.
    Thanks...

    What kind of "box" are you talkin about?
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1638243].message }}
    • Profile picture of the author cgallagher93
      Originally Posted by hjalte81 View Post

      Thanks...

      What kind of "box" are you talkin about?
      Hey,

      Sorry about that I should have made things a little clearer. I've not slept in hours so please forgive me! If you go to:

      Butterfly Marketing - By Mike Filsaime

      And scroll to about a quarter of the way down the site to near where Adam Ginsberg's testimonial is. Under that there's one for "your future success story" etc...

      Underneath that and down past the product shot, there's a green box stating how "I urge you not to be a site scroller". Have a read through that and you'll see what I mean.

      Regards,

      Connor
      {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1638907].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author Mo Faisal
    Thanks for the tips!!

    I would like to add that throwing in the element of SCARCITY works wonders.

    For eg : Just 4 copies left at $17. After that price will be raised to $37!!
    Signature


    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1638946].message }}
    • Profile picture of the author cgallagher93
      Originally Posted by Bruce_Richards View Post

      Thanks for the tips!!

      I would like to add that throwing in the element of SCARCITY works wonders.

      For eg : Just 4 copies left at $17. After that price will be raised to $37!!
      Hey Bruce,

      Yep you're right! People HATE losing out or the possibility of others "getting ahed of them" and so scarcity works wonders if you're selling a product in demand that people actually want.

      Connor
      {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1638977].message }}
    • Profile picture of the author NBN
      Originally Posted by Bruce_Richards View Post

      Thanks for the tips!!

      I would like to add that throwing in the element of SCARCITY works wonders.

      For eg : Just 4 copies left at $17. After that price will be raised to $37!!

      I forgot about this, it's worked on me, but only if the scarcity is genuine, like how it's done in this forum.
      {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1686012].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author cgallagher93
    I agree.

    I also believe in showing it early; be it in the form of testimonials, screenshots or video proof. I'll never understand why people include their testimonials right at the bottom of their sales pages.

    People HATE hype because it screams "scam" at them. Unless you really have something to back up the hype (a good example here is Brad Callen's Keyword Elite) then people are going to leave your site pretty quickly.
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1656580].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author Jennie Heckel
    Dear Copywriting Kid,

    I would also add research or proof boxes at the top, under the headline area and in key areas of the copy that need a PROOF RESEARCH Statement for people to believe what you are telling them.

    And the NEWEST THing is if you are promoting and you have PROOF elements, like " As Seen In TV Guide, Washington Post, ABC, CBS, Google, AOL etc... use a logo bar for them. See website below.

    Passive Life Income Training - Michael Pieri's Internet Marketing Bootcamp - Web Marketing Workshop

    Putting these elements in a colored box - different color plain edge to box helps to make these items STICK out and have people stop and read them.

    Especially on sites that have an expert /guru/doctor etc as the spokesperson.

    See this sites here:

    Plan My Baby - Baby Gender Selection - Prince or Princess?
    See blue boxes

    Hypno Body Blast - Hypnosis for Weight Loss - Weight Loss MP3
    Blue box

    http://www.creativewebcopywriting.com/
    (Work in progress, see green and yellow boxes here)

    Just so long as the Research can be backed up with the real research, be sure and save copies of your research and if you want copy and paste the full article on a separate page of the website, which can not hurt your keyword density either. If the client desires, I will add a link to the bottom of the sales letter (espeically with medical sales letter sites) which says "Research" and that is a link to the complete research info.

    But please be careful not to link to research articles as that will pull the visitor away from your website.

    Good luck to all in 2010!

    Jennie Heckel
    Sales Copy Secret
    Signature
    ******* WSO & JV ZOO COPYWRITER -- VLS & SALES LETTERS PROVEN TO CONVERT ******* Get Higher Profits From Launches That SELL! Proven Copywriter with 17 Years of Copywriting Experience. Contact Me Via Skype: seoexpertconsulting Copywriting Website: http://www.VideoScriptCopywriter.com

    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1671934].message }}
    • Profile picture of the author The Copy Nazi
      Banned
      Originally Posted by Jennie Heckel View Post

      And the NEWEST THing is if you are promoting and you have PROOF elements, like " As Seen In TV Guide, Washington Post, ABC, CBS, Google, AOL etc... use a logo bar for them.
      The "newest thing"? Hardly. It's been around for ages. But you better be able to prove your claim of "as seen on" or the FTC is going to be on your case. Personally I think using "As seen on" cries "scam".
      {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1673199].message }}
      • Profile picture of the author Jack Bastide
        Take a brief video of you holding the product and
        put it on UStream

        Bingo ... "As See on TV"

        Jack
        Signature

        If you can drive Biz Op Phone Calls .... I'm Buying

        {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1673863].message }}
        • Profile picture of the author HALES!
          Originally Posted by Paul McQuillan View Post

          That's how I started my one man show porn business.
          LOL. I genuinely laughed out loud when I read that.


          ...see, that's what's needed today. People who get inspired, and instead of bite their tongue just say it! Sure he could have thought, "Yah, well I just won't say that." But he didn't. He ran with it, and made my day all the better because of it. Thanks mate.
          {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1675341].message }}
        • Profile picture of the author The Copy Nazi
          Banned
          Originally Posted by Jack Bastide View Post

          Take a brief video of you holding the product and
          put it on UStream

          Bingo ... "As See on TV"

          Jack
          Look up "misrepresentation". UStream is hardly "tv". And it's "As seen on TV".
          {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1675723].message }}
          • Profile picture of the author Jack Bastide
            Originally Posted by Metronicity View Post

            Look up "misrepresentation". UStream is hardly "tv". And it's "As seen on TV".
            I'll look up "misrepresentation" if you look up
            "sense of humour"

            Jack
            Signature

            If you can drive Biz Op Phone Calls .... I'm Buying

            {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1675947].message }}
        • Profile picture of the author Groovy99
          Originally Posted by Paul McQuillan View Post

          That's how I started my one man show porn business.
          NICE

          Do us a favor...DONT SHARE THE LINK
          Signature

          Patrick
          "The business that considers itself immune to the necessity for advertising sooner or later finds itself immune to business."
          connecticut internet marketing - Get in, TAKE OFF!
          business card printing

          {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1676208].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author netsell
    Banned
    [DELETED]
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1673018].message }}
    • Profile picture of the author The Copy Nazi
      Banned
      Originally Posted by netsell View Post

      Hi guys and gals, first post...

      I've recently de-lurked on WF and I'm looking at shortly releasing several products as an experiment in starting IM from scratch (which of course I will fully document on the forums).

      Being at the sales letter stage right now, is there a general rule of thumb folks use in regards to the length of the letter. Thanks to WF, I'm getting clued in on the structure and components of sales letters, but an answer to the length issue eludes me.
      Tests have proved that longer salespages work better. Readers scroll and the perception is that more copy equals better product. So it doesn't really matter if they read it all. So for that reason, don't just use one "Buy Now" button (better to use "Add to Cart") but several throughout the copy. Use bullet points for the main benefits - odd numbers work better - no more than 7 bullets at a time.
      {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1673189].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author Sam Mlambo
    Looks like this thread has gotten a little bit off topic with one man porn businesses and misuse of Ustream lol but here's my 2 cents...

    - Write with emotion. Inject your personality within your copy so your reader can feel like they know you, like you, and trust you.
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1676648].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author AZ
    Great tips- Call to action with a deadline in my experience has helped me with readers. You have to seperate yourself from the crowd- The PS, PPS , at the bottom works magically still -
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1676790].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author writeright
    One more I would like to add to your fave five:

    A tone that sounds personal.... something that tells the reader that the product worked for your benefit and made your life worth living... something of that sort. Everyone like a rags to riches story and if it comes from the horse's mouth - the better.
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1678544].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author Jennie Heckel
    Dear All,

    For the new FTC regulations you can use the same idea "As Seen On - Google, Yahoo, MSN, etc, just make sure you remove the "TV" part.

    If you did have an article on Ezine Articles, you can include Ezine Articles logo too.

    Regards,

    Jennie
    Signature
    ******* WSO & JV ZOO COPYWRITER -- VLS & SALES LETTERS PROVEN TO CONVERT ******* Get Higher Profits From Launches That SELL! Proven Copywriter with 17 Years of Copywriting Experience. Contact Me Via Skype: seoexpertconsulting Copywriting Website: http://www.VideoScriptCopywriter.com

    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1727279].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author lesliecolenden
    I am in total agreement with your tips. I believe one of the biggest problems most writes make is not having a clue what a benefit is. They write on and on about features and think they are benefits. This is a key point you make. I also believe there are three elements that need to be in all copy written to sell.
    Problem, Payoff and Product.
    The writer must define the problem the reader is having and make it hurt so they have to get the Payoff...The payoff is the benefits you offer and of course lastly, the Product is what's going to take away their pain and give them the payoff.
    And of course add in all the other stuff you need to make the copy easy to read and testimonials, and risk reversal and overcoming objections and the call to action.

    Leslie
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1798791].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author Stephen Dean
    The reason testimonials are often way down the sales page is you typically don't introduce them until you've told the reader that something is for sale.

    And sometimes, you don't want to let the reader know there's something for sale until halfway through the letter.

    It depends on what type of traffic you're getting. If it's pre-sold traffic, then it's usually OK to hint that something is for sale (with testimonials and the like).

    But if it's just a prospect surfing the web, it's generally better to hook them before letting them know something is for sale. And then show testimonials.

    Cheers,
    Stephen Dean
    Copywriting Dean|Copywriting And Internet Advertising Tactics By Copywriter Stephen Dean
    Signature
    Free Coaching WSO: How to finish all your 2013 "Goals" in JANUARY with my proven productivity secrets - taken from 9 years working as a freelance copywriter. Click Here

    Occupation: Best Copywriter Ever.
    Clients:
    Matt Bacak, Jim Edwards, Ryan Deiss and more.
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1799256].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author Larryheat
    Recently i came across an ebook my Mr. J eff Gardner called "My Instant Swipe File" It demonstrates through copy examples by famous copywriters how to write copy. It comes with fill in the blank headlines and several companion volumes including word to use and not use, anyone try this if so how do you like it?
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1801560].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author GlengarryLeads
    Good post.

    You're right, you have to split-test and track the results. Good headlines are great but the only way to find that they for-sure work is to test and track them extensively. Of course most people here know this already but it's worth repeating.
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1806246].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author fallencrest
    Very nice tips. I really want to write content for my site but I don't know how to start and what to put in there. Anyways, thanks. I learn something new here.
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1817873].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author CodyTemke
    wow, Thanks for the Info! ill have to put this to work...
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[1833786].message }}

Trending Topics