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Could someone review my site?

by nij756
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My pages are Debt Relief Toolkit - Free Budgeting Spreadsheets and Lerin Roberts Toolkit - Budgeting Worksheets. Any positive feedback and critiquing would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks,

Nancy
#review #site
  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    I'll start. You really don't have a headline explaining what you're all about. You're offering 7 free budgeting spreadsheets, but why? What are they going to do for me? Think in terms of problem/solution. Try something like:

    Is Your Personal Finance and Budgeting Situation A Mess? Do You Need To Consult A Psychic To Get Your Own Checkbook Balance?

    Something like this (the problem or issue) should come before offering solutions such as you freebies. Good luck.
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  • Profile picture of the author Andrew Gould
    You're missing an 'n' in 'financial' on both your headers.

    I think you'll lose people with your sales funnel, get them the free stuff first, or at least get their email address first before you try to sell.

    Who is Lerin?? If her name's in the headline then I'm going to want to know as soon as possible, probably in the deck copy. And get a photo of her (you?).

    The copy in-between the first two order buttons can be massively cut down. You want to quickly get to the story.

    Go into more detail on the offer: What exactly is the customer getting? Why is it only $27?

    You all-bold bullets are a little tricky to read.

    For a more professional and highly tested order form try this:

    The UBB Ultimate Belcher Button Wizard | TroyNotes

    Hope some of this helps.
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  • Profile picture of the author impulsell
    I think the headline fonts a bit dull. Could try verdana or tahoma. Just a suggestion.
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  • Profile picture of the author AnneE
    I agree with Travelin Guy, you need to talk in terms of what you are offering people -- a hand getting a grip on their finances. Frankly I don't know if I'd even use the term 'WORKsheets' it's pretty damn unappealing if you ask me.

    What is appealing that reflects what you are offering?

    simple step-by-step instructions for getting a handle on where your money is going

    and how you can afford more with the same old paycheck

    or

    x easy-steps for avoiding bankruptcy or avoiding poor credit ratings

    or

    reduce your financial stress

    or

    help straightening out your finances... stop being afraid to get your mail or answer your phone!

    hmmm..... maybe how much I relate to folks with financial messes is a bit telling. Just my 2 cents of ideas.
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  • Profile picture of the author janisv
    I agree with Travilinguy. To give solutions you have to name the problems first. Also be aware with the typo.
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    • Profile picture of the author dsf
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  • Profile picture of the author nij756
    Thank you!! Thank you!! I will make these changes as soon as possible!! I am learning. Thanks again.

    Lerin is my pen name.. Nancy Smith is rather common.. Lerin Roberts is not.
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    • Profile picture of the author mktgpro21202
      Sell the benefits. Ask yourself 'what will this do for ME' then use the answer as a selling point. Selling is about solving problems. If you can show the visitor that you have the solution to whatever problem they are trying to fix, you'll have a good chance at selling them the product (or getting them to opt in).

      The design and layout looks good. I'd take the advice of some of the others and fix up the headlines though.

      nice job.
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