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14 years ago

Hey guys, I know the membership offer is lame, but I want to give back something for your help.

Will also throw in a solo spot for one of your products to the list I create from the cbTagClouds sales after it runs a couple months to build it up.

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malarky 14 years ago

passive is a very weak word to use in a headline. what about something like

Profit From a Blog More Than Ever, and Claim Capital You Never New You Had: Earn From Your Blog or Website In Your Sleep...

that was weak, more later.
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- ocmnet 14 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by malarky
  
  passive is a very weak word to use in a headline.
  
  Maybe this is better?? New Simple but Powerful Method to Monetize Your Blog
  
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Andrew Gould

14 years ago

A better way for you to look at it might be that passive income is income with NO extra work. I'm not an instant headline machine like some of the others here but that should give you some ideas.

Use a pic of yourself.

I wouldn't have your examples right at the top, use at least a little introductory copy about who you are and what these cloud thingies are.

And be very cautious about making the links clickable, you don't want your reader to go and not come back.

You say it's a fact that visitors click on clouds and that they definitely will do. You need to have some sort of proof of this or it's just unsubstantiated hype.

There doesn't seem to be any real structure to your sales argument, it's all over the place. The bit about Clickbank at the very bottom seemed completely out of place.

Get a signature.

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dorothydot 14 years ago

Hi,

You have
New Simple but Powerful Method
to Earn Ongoing Passive Income
from Your Website or Blog

I think I'd make it much more direct and less wordy. Maybe something like, How Your Website or Blog Can Send You Money While You Relax With a Good Movie

or

Turn Your Website or Blog Into A Golden Egg-Laying Money Machine

or

Make Your Website or Blog Start Paying For Itself - and Then Some!
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ocmnet 14 years ago

Thank you for your feedback, Andrew. Much appreciated

Originally Posted by Andrew Gould

Use a pic of yourself.
Get a signature.

Did both. Picture at the Top or Bottom?

Originally Posted by Andrew Gould

And be very cautious about making the links clickable, you don't want your reader to go and not come back.

Understand, but in this case it is part of the demo of the product - AND it demonstrates the "opens in a new window" feature

Originally Posted by Andrew Gould

The bit about Clickbank at the very bottom seemed completely out of place.

Agree. I removed it.
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- DA 14 years ago
  
  good idea
  
  But to be honest I don't like colors of your tag clouds, they don't match each other, complete mess
  I wouldn't buy your product with it's current color selection - looks a bit cheap, pure advertising.
  Your sales page design looks nice and clean, but cb cloud tags ruin it (sorry for honest opinion).
  
  Choose no more than 3-5 colors and your tag clouds will look 'cleaner'.
  If possible - offer your buyers a choice of colors (offer at least 3-4 combinations to chose from). Some people prefer clean black and white design, others migh like more colorful clouds.
  
  Not everyone is an Internet Marketer; some people have blogs about arts, photography and care about design of their blog, and designers will never place clouds like that to their blogs because of poor color choice.
  
  I love the idea of having cb tag clouds on my blogs, and I would buy your product if offered suitable color choice.
  
  Check kuler.adobe.com for color ideas
  
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- Andrew Gould 14 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by ocmnet
  
  Did both. Picture at the Top or Bottom?
  
  Picture at the top, usually on the left and making sure you're looking into the page.
  
  Also, it's worth testing having your signature above the fold, just underneath and to the right of the headline as well as at the bottom.
  
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  Ross Bowring 14 years ago
  
  New "Clickbank Tag Clouds" Unleash A Windshield Smashing Hailstorm Of Unexpected Blog-Profits...
  
  Maybe alongside a stockphoto of a silhouetted someone... arms raised in celebration in the rain... think Tim Robbins in Shawshank Redemption...
  
  --- Ross
  
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  ocmnet 14 years ago
  
  OK, DA. I added some Color Themes as you suggested, and "None" means they will be same color as the default for all the other tags on your site. So if your site has red tags, cbTagClouds will also be red.
  
  Ross, I like your ideas for the title best so far. I might shorten it to something like "Unleash a Hailstorm of Easy Blog Profits". Need to live with it for a while.
  
  Andrew, I moved my pic to the top.
  
  Thank you to everyone for your thoughts.
  
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  Zero 14 years ago
  
  Its not much but i only see your guarantee once in the entire copy. You need to make sure its easily noticeable. It'd be nice to actually see the price your charging on the main copy. Make it clear you'll be charging $x quarterly/annually.
  
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  DA 14 years ago
  
  Good change, some color choices are really nice.
  Photo at the top - looks much better now.
  
  Have you got an eCover for your product? I just noticed that you have ecover for a bonus, not product itself.
  
  Agree with others - make sure they see price of the product, and after that - your bonus offer.
  
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Jo_Shua

14 years ago

Tim,

When I look at your current headline and it does not intrigue me NOR does it spark a curiosity... I am in your target market as I have a few blogs going. This is a neat way to monetize on those blogs.

Then, I take a look at your first sub-headline...
WOW! Why didn't someone think of this before?

That does cause some curiosity. What are you WoWing? What is it that no one else has every thought of? I am hooked, and I want to know more... Yet, you already showed me 'what' no one has thought of right after the first headline.

I would put more curiosity into this letter. I would remove your current headline and use this sub-headline in it's place. Don't show your CB Tag Cloud example so early... work your way up to it AND show why it is 'WoW' and make the reader think: 'Why didn't I think of this before...' After they ask that question in their mind, then, you can show an example...

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ocmnet 14 years ago

Great idea, Joshua!

Why didn't I think of it before!

Made a few mods. You are right, I think it does read much better. Take another look...

CB Tag Clouds

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Richard B Riddick

Banned 14 years ago

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Jo_Shua

14 years ago

Originally Posted by ocmnet

Great idea, Joshua!

Why didn't I think of it before!

Made a few mods. You are right, I think it does read much better. Take another look...

CB Tag Clouds

Thanks!

Well, it is better in the sense that you moved the example down the line and built on the curiosity more.

Now, your problem still lies with that headline. As is, it does not tie into the rest of the letter. Indirectly? Yes, but not directly.

Also, you are asking for the money too early in this particular letter. Remove that first call to action... (later you can test it if you prefer, but I believe it is out of place for now)

Want to try something different? Remove the headline all together. Move your picture down the page some for when you introduce yourself...

Try something like this:

Fellow Affiliate Marketers,

It seems like every once in a blue moon, something comes along, and you just say:

"WOW! Why didn't someone think of this before?"

You know, Hundreds of Thousands of people are promoting products from the Clickbank Marketplace today. YOU might very likely be one of them.
Clickbank makes it easy for you to put ads on your website or blog to promote their products. They are called HopAds, and many affiliate marketers make tremendous amounts of money from them day after day, month after month.

The problem is... they look like ads,
and many people just don't click on them.

Well mark your calendar, because today, Thursday, March 18, I have solved that problem for you, forever!

Introducing - Clickbank Tag Clouds

Take a look at the example cbTagClouds below and modify them yourself:

example here

Put your pic here

Tim Brechbill here, the creator of CB TagClouds, AND about now I bet you're saying...

"WOW! Why didn't I think of this before?"

"Monetize your sites with Clickbank Tag Clouds." What more do I need to say? The idea is so simple and so powerful that it really is a No Brainer.

Literally within minutes, you can generate $Hundreds when someone clicks on your cbTagClouds. You would almost be a fool if you didn't use them.
FACT: Visitors Click on Clouds

Clouds are really common on the Internet. I'm sure you've seen them on many sites. Unlike other methods of monetization, cbTagClouds integrate so seamlessly into your site that visitors have absolutely no fear associated with clicking on them. Of course... More clicks means more profits for you!

so forth so forth...

You will notice that your sub-line will actually act as a headline... and the opener fellow affiliate marketer will be a qualifier... and the opening sentence will be similar to a pre-header.

In this regard it will make for a good opener, and somewhat different than what the norm is... which will catch readers.

Just an idea you can toy with, but you truly need to test out different tweaks and headlines to see what works best for you.

Originally Posted by Richard B Riddick

Are you testing?

Testing is a huge factor... A tweak here and there my seem like a good idea... A certain headline may seem like the BEST... However, is that tweak or headline the most efficient?

Just because it 'looks' good does not mean it will produce results.

Get some testing up for when you go live.

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ocmnet

14 years ago

OK, Joshua. See what you think about the changes you suggested?

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Mr. Enthusiastic

14 years ago

New pitch for you. Cheers, Chris

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CB Tag Clouds
It's Raining Money On Your Blog...
...and all you do is collect a downpour of effortless profits!

Hi, I'm Tim Brechbil. I love blogging, and I love affiliate commissions from Clickbank, the world's largest marketplace for Internet sales affiliates.

Clickbank is easy to get started with, but maddening in the long run. It's easy enough to pick a product, create a Clickbank link and paste the link into a blog. This means that as people visit for articles, news, RSS feeds, videos, podcasts -- whatever type of content you like to put on your blog -- a percentage of visitors will "hop over" to the sales letter. If they like what's for sale, Clickbank and the vendor handle billing, shipping, fulfillment, and give you a commission check every 30 days.

You probably already knew about this. But you've probably also seen the hidden headaches.

It's time consuming to pick products.
The top selling products today might fall out of favor next week.
Changing products requires that manual "hoplink creation and paste" step. It's not hard, but it is tedious and geeky.

It's like trying to win at the stock market by picking the right company, at the right time.

I got sick of the uncertainty. I knew their had to be an easier way. And guess what... there wasn't, so I had to create it. I tested it on my own sites, loved the easy flow of cash, and decided that Clickbank is such a huge opportunity that I might as well let you in on this secret but oh so powerful software.

When you learn how it works, you'll understand why I'm not afraid to share it at an amazingly low investment.

The hottest blogging innovation right now is "tag clouds." These are bundles of key words or phrases, in different sizes to show which "tags" are used the most.

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Every time a visitor arrives at a page with CBTagCloud, a unique combination of fresh, hot selling products are featured in a brand new tag cloud.

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Pick a different category, get a new tag cloud.

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ocmnet 14 years ago

Wow, Chris. You really put a lot into this. Gives me a lot to think about. I guess that's why it is a good idea to do testing.

Thank you for such a thoughtful reply!
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- ocmnet 14 years ago
  
  Still waiting for a few graphic tweaks, but I thought everybody make like to see what this has evolved into with all of your help:
  
  CB Cash Clouds
  
  Tremendous improvement. This is what this forum is all about. There are sooo many helping souls here
  
  BTW, Not 1 single person asked for the free membership I offered, but it was provided anyway
  
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The Copy Nazi

Banned 14 years ago

You don't need to be clever in your headline. Just tell them what you have, what it does and why they should have one too. Like -

Oh Cool! Why didn't someone think of this before?

Monetize Your Site with
CLICKBANK TAG CLOUDS

...make money with the HOTTEST Clickbank keywords

Your page needs rewriting. And I would make the DIY widget the hero. Great product. Why on earth don't you invest in a copywriter? This page could be so much better.

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Jo_Shua 14 years ago

Much better... The graphics are way better than what you had earlier.

Still, the letter overall could use some tweaking.

But, whether you do decide to hire a copywriter or do it yourself make sure that you do get some testing up and going as soon as possible.

JC
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- BusyMum_2010 13 years ago
  
  Hello ocmnet,
  
  You don't have contact address in cbCashClouds sales site. This is the reason I am contacting you here.
  
  I am planning to buy your cbCashClouds to put on my blogs and websites. But, it has "powered by cbCashClouds" after those keywords cloud. That will still give the visitor a hint that it's an ad. Do you have an option to take that out when setting it up?
  
  Also, what's the difference of your free wp plug-in cbtagclouds with cbcashclouds? Do you take out a %age or share of affiliate earnings on cbTagClouds? What's the catch of using cbTagClouds?
  
  Thanks a lot for your help.
  
  Regards.
  
  Maria
  
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backlinkking3

13 years ago

You Don't Have To Reach For The Stars !

$$The Clouds Have A Silver Lining$$

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13 years ago

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