Sales Page Reviews please

by djleon1

Posted: 18 years ago 3 replies

COPY WRITING

My first sales page is up and lookng for some constructive feedaback.

booksellingguide.com

I need an ebook cover to add and I do not like the payment buttons. Let me know your thoughts please

Thanks

Dave

#page #reviews #sales

ic7 18 years ago

Couple typos:

A Insider's Guide = An Insider's Guide

Y es = Yes

Also, I'd put the table with the expensive books you sold right near the top of the page. It would be good if you explained more benefits right away. Such as the benefits of being your own boss, etc.

And you don't need four guarantee medals, just put one and center it. Hope this helps.

Paul
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Norma Holt 18 years ago

Hi Dave, This is a fair attempt but your English is a little rough. I would also not over emphasise the money making side of it. When you say something like that once it is remembered. Otherwise people become bored.

It needs tidying up before oyu go to air.
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- djleon1 18 years ago
  
  Working with xsite and trying to learn to build websites and write copy has been a fun challenge. Making suggested changes and rearranging some copy and removing some things.
  
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