Is this a good Sales Page?

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Hi,

I'm getting ready to launch my ebook. This is the Sales Page that I've come up with along with testimonials.

I can't post a link yet. So please google "Saigon Secrets". It will be that domain name.

Any opinions or suggestions on making it better as far as the copywriting, page layout, and overall feel ?

It would be greatly appreciated. This will be my first sales page & product launch.

-Lennox

MOD EDIT: Saigon Secrets
#copywriting #good #page #sales
  • Just to be helpful

    Saigon Secrets
  • The text for the site is a bit too big.

    What software are you using for testing?
    • [1] reply
    • Agree too big font size

      Used some audios or videos to have a more appealing look.
  • My first post here

    - Information about you is missing

    - this reads like a scam (not saying it is, but it reads like)

    hope this isn´t harsh, but as somebody travelling a lot (and ppl who go to saigon aren´t your standard tourist), this sounds not like there´s great value. most of the stuff you can get on wikitravel etc... so give them some reason why they should pay for something.
    i know that´s irrelevant, you´re interested if it sells.
    • [1] reply
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  • My first thought was "where are all the pictures of everything you're describing?"
  • Its true, a picture is worth a thousand words.......
  • Thank you All,

    I have accepted this project as a high possibility of failure. It was launched in order
    for me to internalize the process of bringing a product live.

    I just launched the site yesterday. I just hope that it will bring me a little joy of
    success by producing one sale. That I will be happy with. But I have learned
    much from the process while accepting the sad outcome.

    Although feeling a little down, and overwhelmed by this new realm of internet
    marketing that I'm entering, I'll be heading back to the lab now to come up with
    something more solid.

    Thank you so much. I appreciate all of your inputs.
    • [1] reply
    • seriously think about getting rid of the optin box on page load.

      there's absolutely no reason why your customers
      will give their name & email address for nothing?
  • Banned
    Yes...that opt-in needs to go. "Jaw-Dropping Secrets"??? I very much doubt that claim. Then I get to the third para and I cancel all thoughts of visiting Saigon after reading this - Then you compound the negativity further with this juicy quote - So...so far you're telling me the place is dangerous and most of the women I'm likely to meet will be whores. Terrific. Then you keep driving the nail into the coffin by telling me the taxi-drivers will rip me off - And the hotel will rip me off on VAT and service charges. But wait! It gets better. You're throwing in food-poisoning as well! And I have no idea what this is but I'm sure I don't want any - You need a name change methinks. From "The Essential Saigon Guidebook" to "See Saigon & Die" - pitch it to adventure travellers ,extreme-sports fans or masochists.
  • And--

    I would suggest a different word than "mating."

    I don't think many prospects are up to have a kid with a Saigon whore... though to be fair, I have not done any market research in this field-- so I don't want to say for sure.
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