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I'm not a copywriter but I'm giving it my best [Critiques Please]

by Mad Dawg
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Hey warriors!

I've been working on the copy bit by bit on my seduction website and I was looking for a gauge to see how I'm doing.

I'm in the process of putting together a lot of video proof and testimonials to add to the site to increase its credibility, but I'm wondering how my copy is otherwise?

I've seen a few sales, but not nearly as many as I'd have liked to given my traffic.

Please let me know any comments or ideas that come to mind when reading the copy. I'm open to all suggestions!

Thanks warriors!

By the way the website is LearnHowToSeduceWomen.com or click the link in my sig
#copywriter #critiques #giving
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    • Profile picture of the author Mad Dawg
      Thanks a lot for the critique chief, I agree with all your points.

      Sometimes I guess its hard to remember those days when you were a frustrated chump after being so long removed from it...no ego intended. I've got to appeal more to what a sexually frustrated guy is actually after.

      Oh, and I plan on changing my graphics too.

      Thanks again brother let me know if anything else comes to mind.
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      • Profile picture of the author Mad Dawg
        Hey if I could get a few more critiques of my sales page I'd really appreciate it! If any professional copy writers, or just people who are great with copy want to PM me an in depth critique I'd gladly return it with a favor (review a product, write an article, whatever)

        Thanks warriors!
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      thanks again for your thoughts chief. I'm about to convert some of my bonus reports to bonus videos. I think until I do that I'm going to try leaving the front end down and then move it up after I add video. Thanks a lot though for the tip, it's an interesting opinion that I've never heard before.
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