Please Critque my Video Salesletter

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Hi,

I just created this video sales letter to promote an affiliate product that I use personally. I made the video to deliberately be conversational and heartfelt, but I don't know if the lack of professionalism in it hurts me. Also, I'm of course, interested in feedback about headlines, etc.

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All feedback is welcome.
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  • Profile picture of the author Robert_Rand
    Hey Justin,

    The sound is extremely low. I'd re-record and make sure to speak directly into the microphone.

    Cheers,
    Robert
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    • Profile picture of the author Ross Bowring
      Hey Justin...

      Posting videos like this limits your feedback from busy copywriters who might not have time to watch your videos.

      Maybe if you post a transcript of your videos you'll get a better response.

      All the best,

      --- Ross
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      • Profile picture of the author RickDuris
        Hi Justin,

        I hate to be so blunt.

        But the video is a "do over."

        1. Heartfelt is good, but cut out all extraneous comments. The teaching/content element is a yawn. Your market has heard this all before. Tell them something they don't know.

        2. Have a little enthusiasm for your product. But do it in an authentic way.

        - Rick Duris

        PS: Nice effort, but do it again.


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        • Profile picture of the author 4eternity
          The sound is very low. I think your video should be more enthusiastic. At somepoint you get lost because of the sound. You should present the info in a more attractive way. You have to convince your market that they have found what they need, give clues of your unique quality product. Give something to make your market wonder for more!
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  • Profile picture of the author lisaweyn
    It is OK except the sound is a bit low and show some enthusiasm about the product.
    Should you take care of the above two, it should do well.
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  • Profile picture of the author Justinfm
    I finally figured out how to fix the audio... Here's the new video.


    I appreciate all of the good feedback so far.
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  • Profile picture of the author tswartz
    Justin, it's alright now with the sound. The delivery is pretty slow and I'll admit I didn't watch it all...it just takes you too long to get to the point.
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