I bought an amazing book on copywriting and studied it thoroughly. It took me many months of research and hard work to complete my first sales copy.
I sell voip phones to the South African market and the main focus of my copy is to persuade people who still uses analogue telephones to switch to voip phones...and ultimately buy my product.
I would appreciate any advice, and please don't be gentle with me. Although English is not my native language, it is not an excuse not to deliver a copy of high language and grammatical quality.
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I also need some help with writing an attention grabbing title and description for the search engines.
Title: Discover Vox And South Africa's Fastest Selling Voip Phone
Description: Dramatically Reduce Your Phone Bill While You Try The Vox Voip Phone For Up To 60 Days Risk Free Guaranteed
My main keywords are: Vox, voip and voip phone
In my opinion my copy lacks power words. I am a final year engineering student and I am more comfortable with numbers than words!
Thank you very much for your help and time!