Desperately Need Some Headline Help!
Basically I'm soon to be releasing a dating e-book for men but am starting to have my doubts about the headline.
Here's the benefits of the book:
Easy to understand, easy to to, step by step strategies to meeting women.
It's a foolproof no nonsense approach to picking up and seducing women.
The promise of having sex with hot women is also another benefit.
Here's what I've been using so far but am having my doubts as to wether its too crude and the product wont be taken seriously:
"Discover Exactly How to Pick Up Any Woman You Want & Have Her Bent Over In Your Bed, Feeling Your Rod the Very Same Night - Guaranteed!"
it then says in small writing 'If this is what you want then..'
and is followed by a second headline:
""Here's a Breakthrough System That Shows You How To Instantly Attract & Seduce Any Woman, Even If You've Got No Game Whatsoever"
Now I like the second headline, its the first one I've got a problem with.
So please guys, I know there's some fantastic copywriters on this forum and I need your help!
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