Can You Please Help Me Fix This Headline?
English is not my first language, but I'm trying my best.
The headline above seems to have a problem that I can't put my finger on. Do I have to include the action that's required by the buyer? Like "Discover How, if you use this service, by this time tomorrow, 100s of Recruiters and Employers Will Have Read Your CV!"
Can you help me fix it please?
Thanks,
After all, you're probably following a few hundred people already that aren't doing squat for you.....
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