Another Newbie on board

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Hey Warriors,

Wanted to say HI to everyone and yes its another NEWBIE on board.

I would like to ask you warriors if anyone would like to review my writing skills for marketing and see if they're up to par. Good or bad like to know your thoughts on it and how to improve on it. Thanks in advance.


Single Cup Coffee Machines

Do you have a single cup coffee machine? No, because most coffee makers are designed to make ten to twelve cups of coffee, which presents a problem if you just wanted one cup of coffee. It is fine for the office or at a dinner party but the average home coffee drinker will not drink that much coffee at one time.

There is a solution for this; it is the single cup coffee machine that is designed to produce the best one cup of coffee you could drink. This type of coffee maker was well thought out so it could produce a quality cup of coffee each time it is used.

You may be wondering why single cup coffee machines are so popular. The easy answer is that you get just one cup of coffee at a time with it. This will save you some money, as you want have any wasted coffee.

It is perfect for those mornings you are running late, just turn it one and by the time you are ready to leave the house your coffee is ready too. One other reason that it is popular is it is just the in-thing to do. Hey, you can't let your buddies out do you.

This sounds good but you may be wondering is this type of coffee machine complicated to use. No, these coffee machines are made with the consumer in mind. So it is easy to operate and to program

Now some of these single cup coffee makers are expensive but they can brew other products like several varieties of coffee, tea and even hot chocolate. This is great because you don't always have to make coffee or if you have company over they may not like coffee and you will have a machine that will make something else warm to drink.

Here are a few benefits of having a single cup coffee machine.

  • Does not waste coffee like the other brewers do, where you have to make at least four cups of coffee.
  • Adjustable brewing temperatures.
  • Automatic programming
  • Brew a variety of different coffee's and some can brew tea and hot chocolate.
  • Very easy to operate.

By now you are probably wondering what's the best single cup coffee machines available on the market. Well they are several and the price ranges from $25 to $395. The two cheaper versions used ordinary coffee while the other two had to have special packaged coffees you had to use.

Now if you just want a coffee maker for the house, you could go with the middle price range brewer and have a great cup of coffee. These days just drinking a cup of coffee has turned into an art form with many different varieties available. One thing about it though, you and your friends will love it.
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  • Profile picture of the author Summer1
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  • Profile picture of the author Andrew Gould
    Hey Freebird,

    It'll be easier to offer valid feedback if we know the purpose of your writing - what are are you trying to achieve with it?

    But here's some general comments for you:

    You want to start with a "yes" question instead, get the reader nodding his head in agreement with you.

    Your writing seems very stilted and unnatural with some overly long and awkward sentences. The more you try to SEO it, the more your conversion will drop. Try to make it as conversational as possible.

    The benefits you list are really just features of the machine, you need to explain how these would benefit the reader.

    Break up your paragraphs a bit more, try to make it more visually appealing.

    Hope some of this helps.
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    • Profile picture of the author freebird1959
      Thanks for the comments. The purpose of this article is I'm wanting to start a PLR site.
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      • Profile picture of the author Oxbloom
        Originally Posted by freebird1959 View Post

        Thanks for the comments. The purpose of this article is I'm wanting to start a PLR site.
        For that, it's probably adequate. Assuming you package together enough similar articles and don't charge too much for a pack, it'll serve as grist for the PLR blog mill.


        If you're looking for advice that'll better poke your audience into action, I'd say start by learning the difference between "features" and "benefits." Things like "adjustable brewing temperature," and "automatic programming," aren't benefits. They're features.

        Every time you mention a feature...actually, let's say every time you feel like you might possibly WANT to mention a feature...stop, and imagine the reader saying, "So what? What's in it for me?"

        Nobody's glad their machine features adjustable brewing temperature. They're glad they can start enjoying their coffee at its most fresh-brewed, flavor-packed instant, without scalding themselves. They're glad they can brew up a cup of hot chocolate without scorching the milk or putting the delicate lips of their four year old at risk.

        Nobody's glad their machine features automatic programming. They're glad they can roll out of bed each morning to find a hot, aromatic cup of their favorite fancy-schmancy, imported, gourmet dark roast waiting for them.

        Like one of those famous marketer types once said, "People don't buy drill bits; they buy holes."
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  • Profile picture of the author Stephen Bray
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