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Men are very simple creatures.

I was watching some guys fishing off the back of their yacht this morning whilst sunning myself luxuriously on the upper deck.

They were doing all sorts of strange things trying to lure their fish in. They first tried one bait, then another and then yet another, all with little success.

Why do men have to make the world so complicated?

One guy, I quite fancy him actually, a great body on him. A couple of nights ago at the bar on board, I thought to myself, I want this guy in my bed so he can make hot passionate love to me. (I was bored.)

Sidling up to him, I smiled sweetly at him and watched him intently. My eyes not leaving his. Putty in my hands I thought. And I was correct.

With a few simple ploys only a woman can know, I lured him in on my reel with just enough flesh showing. His greed and hunger there for the whole world to see.

He didn't know it but I had him on my hook within 5 seconds. Sold, hook, line and sinker.

Why are women better copywriters than men?

Why do women intuitively understand emotion better than their male counterparts?

If you were to write a sales letter, as a guy for a lady client in the how to attract women niche, how would you pitch?

What emotional baits would you use to lure her prospects in?

Whats on the end of your hook?



~ Sally
#luring #men
  • Profile picture of the author sparckyz
    If a women's hot she already has an unfair advantage lol
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  • Profile picture of the author ewenmack
    Originally Posted by 247Copywriter View Post

    One guy, I quite fancy him actually, a great body on him. A couple of nights ago at the bar on board, I thought to myself, I want this guy in my bed so he can make hot passionate love to me. (I was bored.)

    sally
    Well us hot blooded guys want to know did you get your wish in the bedroom?

    Or are you just toying with us guys?

    Ewen
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    • Profile picture of the author Phantomwriter
      Interesting angle but remember there is always an exception to the rule.. Men are like lions on the hunt.. if they have had their 'meal' they might not be too interested for the next couple of days...
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  • Profile picture of the author Michael Newman
    Is it the law of attraction at work?I was just thinking about the fact that there are very few female copywriters...happened on your post.Interesting question.I gotta think (have to complicate the issue first,seeing as I am a guy).Interesting.

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  • Profile picture of the author Dean Jackson
    "Why do women intuitively understand emotion better than their male counterparts?"

    Well, you wouldn't find a man too attractive if he was crying over a soap, now would you?

    Let's call that the Yin-Yang principle before this turns into a big ass discussion lol.

    I've written for a few different focuses in the dating/pick up niche. Also with the real player stuff. Not PUA. That stuff gives me the creeps. Anyway...

    Give some more details because the question is a bit too broad.

    At the moment you might want to consider...

    - Facing rejection
    - Jealousy from another guy getting their girl
    - Getting cheated on... then wanting revenge and showing them how
    - Think about what type of guys would come to the internet looking for "secret" tips on how to pick up chicks?
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    • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
      If you were to write a sales letter, as a guy for a lady client in the how to attract women niche, how would you pitch?

      What emotional baits would you use to lure her prospects in?
      No need to reinvent the wheel. Read through the excellent sales letters at the Double Your Dating site:

      Official Double Your Dating | David DeAngelo's Double Your Dating

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  • Profile picture of the author Jack Bastide
    Originally Posted by 247Copywriter View Post

    Men are very simple creatures.

    Sidling up to him, I smiled sweetly at him and watched him intently. My eyes not leaving his. Putty in my hands I thought. And I was correct.

    With a few simple ploys only a woman can know, I lured him in on my reel with just enough flesh showing. His greed and hunger there for the whole world to see.

    ~ Sally
    I need a cold shower

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    • Profile picture of the author Alex Barboza
      Me too (message too short)

      Originally Posted by Jack Bastide View Post

      I need a cold shower

      Jack
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  • Profile picture of the author ericthered
    I hate to burst your bubble Sally , but all Human Beings are simple creature - from
    a persuasion point of view.

    Regarding the sex thing, well that's just biology baby - plain and simple.

    Are not millions of "complex" women manipulated every year by the cosmetics
    and weight loss industries.

    To the tune of BILLIONS?

    Who do you think writes most of those ads? Women?

    but what do I know,

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  • Profile picture of the author BrianMcLeod
    Originally Posted by 247Copywriter View Post

    I was watching some guys fishing off the back of their yacht this morning whilst sunning myself luxuriously on the upper deck.

    Whats on the end of your hook?
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    • Profile picture of the author pickthat apple
      I always knew it is women who makes in general life more complicated than men. Men are quite straightforward but women are more devious in their thoughts and they show a different face sometimes than what they really are.
      But of course there's all sorts and plenty of fish in the sea!
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  • Profile picture of the author RickDuris
    Originally Posted by 247Copywriter View Post

    With a few simple ploys only a woman can know, I lured him in on my reel with just enough flesh showing. His greed and hunger there for the whole world to see.
    Cocky, aren't we?

    1. If you were a fly on the wall with conversations I have with marketers, you'd know I encourage them to "show a little leg." In other words, share a bit of what they know.

    The strategy is not reserved for women.

    2. Be clear, the whole world didn't just see him--they saw you too. Just like we all are seeing you now. This is exactly why daughters are encouraged by Mothers to protect their reputation, because it's so easy to unintentionally cross the line.

    I'd be ultra-careful with a thread like this.

    Sally, your slip is showing. (Pun intended. )

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  • Profile picture of the author CDarklock
    Originally Posted by 247Copywriter View Post

    Men are very simple creatures.
    So are women. But explaining why and giving examples would be small-minded, offensive, and sexist.
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  • Profile picture of the author Paul Hancox
    Haha... nice bit of provocative copy there

    Of course, I don't necessarily subscribe to your premises, but now we're getting all primal, here's the way I ultimately see it...

    Men want sex. But they also want the chase, the victory, the conquest, the risk, the bragging rights to their friends, etc etc.

    Women want sex, too. But they also want security, safety, connection, feelings, approval, yadda yadda.

    Men chase, women are chased. Far fewer are chaste

    Sure, that's stereotypical. But we only have to step into the real world to see that's closer to the truth than not.

    Men and women are not the same.

    I think nature gave women a better intuitive understanding of emotion, because women produce offspring directly, men just provide the seed. To raise a child takes a lot of sensitivity and emotion. To provide seed requires... well, to show up

    But then, good copywriting is a combination of THREE essential elements:

    (a) emotion, (b) logic, (c) imagination.

    A good copywriter should know how to employ all three, whether male or female.

    And yes, you "hooked" me into this thread. Based on the replies, you definitely know how to tap into (a), and you got a dash of (c) from me as I imagined the scenario.

    Genius.
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    • Profile picture of the author MontelloMarketing
      She's a man baby!

      Either that or well... let's just say she's not the writer she thinks she is.

      Totally written like a guy would write a woman.
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      • Profile picture of the author CDarklock
        Originally Posted by MontelloMarketing View Post

        Totally written like a guy would write a woman.
        Well enough to fool a machine. Ken Thompson sent me this nifty tool the other day:

        The Gender Genie

        Female Score: 318
        Male Score: 241

        The Gender Genie thinks the author of this passage is: female!
        When I tested the last email I sent my list, I got:

        Female Score: 584
        Male Score: 918

        The Gender Genie thinks the author of this passage is: male!
        But let's do it percentagewise. Gender score / total score = percent for that gender. I come out 61% male, 39% female... the OP comes out 43% male, 57% female.

        I'd say that's too close to call, unless I'm a woman and don't know it.
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    • Profile picture of the author 247Copywriter
      Originally Posted by Paul Hancox View Post

      Haha... nice bit of provocative copy there

      Of course, I don't necessarily subscribe to your premises, but now we're getting all primal, here's the way I ultimately see it...

      Men want sex. But they also want the chase, the victory, the conquest, the risk, the bragging rights to their friends, etc etc.

      Women want sex, too. But they also want security, safety, connection, feelings, approval, yadda yadda.

      Men chase, women are chased. Far fewer are chaste

      Sure, that's stereotypical. But we only have to step into the real world to see that's closer to the truth than not.

      Men and women are not the same.

      I think nature gave women a better intuitive understanding of emotion, because women produce offspring directly, men just provide the seed. To raise a child takes a lot of sensitivity and emotion. To provide seed requires... well, to show up

      But then, good copywriting is a combination of THREE essential elements:

      (a) emotion, (b) logic, (c) imagination.

      A good copywriter should know how to employ all three, whether male or female.

      And yes, you "hooked" me into this thread. Based on the replies, you definitely know how to tap into (a), and you got a dash of (c) from me as I imagined the scenario.

      Genius.
      Thank you Paul.

      At least one gentleman here recognises good talent.
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    • Profile picture of the author Greg guitar
      Originally Posted by Paul Hancox View Post

      Men want sex.
      That's it.

      Anybody remember that Frasier episode where Frasier complains to Daphne about his attractive female boss who is using her "feminine wiles" as he puts it, to manipulate him?

      Daphne: "Well you men use sex to get what you want from women too."

      Frasier: "How can we use sex to get what we want? Sex is what we want!"
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  • Profile picture of the author Stephen Dean
    Was just about to say what Vin said. Sounds like a guy writing his fantasy and sending it to a listserv.

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  • Profile picture of the author Daniel Scott
    Reminiscent of those 13-year-old kids who pretend to be "hot tweenz" on gaming forums.

    That aside... I have seen the "I'm a hot chick who loves sex" thing work quite well in the seduction and dating niches.

    Basically the hook is "once you know these insider secrets, hot women like me will throw themselves at you and want you to do them right on the bar".

    It's written a little more subtly, but that's the essential take-away.

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  • Profile picture of the author 247Copywriter
    Some of you guys here are very strange.

    If you really must know, I have 6 brothers and fancy myself as a bit of a tomboy, always have.

    I'm also a lesbian (bisexual), do you have problems with this too? :rolleyes:
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  • Profile picture of the author J. Barry Mandel
    Sally if it took you as much as 5 seconds you're probably doing something wrong


    Originally Posted by 247Copywriter View Post


    I had him on my hook within 5 seconds. Sold, hook, line and sinker.
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  • Profile picture of the author Omar Khafagy
    Interesting thread. It appears its sole purpose was to sneer at a stereotype of men as being horny *******s, while simultaneously providing ample opportunity for the OP to beat her own chest (which would, in turn, result in a ripple of wonderful, irrelevantly bisexual cleavage) and proclaim: "I'm a liberated woman! A sleek, feminine creature, emotionally aware and intelligent. You puny males with your brain-penises are no match for my sensitive estrogen-charged wiles."

    'Cept, here's the thing... your story shows no salesmanship. I don't mean it failed to sell me. I mean that within the story itself, you didn't sell.

    You went up to a guy whose Johnson was getting tired of Mr. Left Hand. He didn't even need to try to flirt with you. He didn't need to hit on you at all. He just waited around. You went to him.

    Here's how his story probably went to the other guys, the next day:

    "Yo guys, check this out. So remember how we were fishing the other day? Remember the chick that kept looking at us? No, not the blonde. God, she was fugly. I mean the brunette. Yeahhh that's the one. Remember how I said I wanted to bang her? Well guess what..."

    His friends gape at him. Finally, one says, "Bull."

    "I s--- you not, man. And get this. She came up to ME! I didn't even have to buy her a drink. Cheapest lay of my life."
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    Hm... I'd say that the guy came out on top (Or I guess it could have been you, I wasn't there that night).

    Just Sayin,
    Omar

    P.S.
    With a few simple ploys only a woman can know, I lured him in on my reel with just enough flesh showing.
    Gay guys know these ploys too. Seeing as how you're a member of the LGBT community, I'd have thought you would have acknowledged that. Or do gay men not figure into your evaluation of masculinity?
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  • Profile picture of the author Bruce Wedding
    Its not just a man, but a man that can't write his way out of a wet paper bag.
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  • Profile picture of the author Dean Jackson
    Sally, you don't happen to be writing for someone who has got a 3000 word transcript he wants you to model as well as transcripts of about 6-7 DVDs do you?

    Just checking...
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  • Profile picture of the author AdilAmarsi
    Easiest Answer to that question... Read the art of seduction by robert greene.

    Has examples for men and women on how to seduce (not take to bed) but use language and other devices to get someone to be invested in you to hire you.

    It's something I use to get someone to buy me.

    Also having confidence in ones self has massive impact on the end result
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  • Profile picture of the author BrianMcLeod
    Originally Posted by 247Copywriter View Post

    I'm also a lesbian (bisexual)
    What a coincidence!

    I'm also a bisexual lesbian.

    Bisexual lesbians are the best lesbians...

    ...especially when they're guys.
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    • Profile picture of the author Hagbard Jones
      Bait is not a strange way to try to lure fish. Indeed, i'd struggle to think of a more common one.
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      • Profile picture of the author RickDuris
        Originally Posted by Hagbard Jones View Post

        Bait is not a strange way to try to lure fish. Indeed, i'd struggle to think of a more common one.
        When fishing, there is a difference between bait and lure.

        Bait means live bait. Minnows, nightcrawlers, frogs, crawdads, etc.

        Lures are fake. Rubber, plastic and steel. Pretending to be live bait or some other appealing, shiny object.

        You can draw your own conclusions about what the bisexual lesbian $247 copywriter was trying to accomplish. "What's on the end of her hook?" (I am using her words intentionally.)

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        • Profile picture of the author wayne60618
          I thought this was going to be a Penthouse Forum letter...What a disappointment.

          I don't believe that it ever been important to be a woman to sell anything to anyone - no matter the sex of the prospect. Success stories abound of male copywriters selling products to women very successfully. The question really is more about whether you can intuit what your high probability prospects, and that is neither a male or a female trait.
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  • Profile picture of the author Dean Jackson
    Figures...

    "She" never came back LMAO. It's probably the guy I just mentioned up above. Tight ass.

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    • Profile picture of the author Ken Strong
      Originally Posted by Dean Jackson View Post

      Figures...

      "She" never came back LMAO. It's probably the guy I just mentioned up above. Tight ass.

      - Dean
      "She" also has more than one Warrior account... so take everything "she" says with a grain of salt anyway.
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      • Profile picture of the author oneplusone
        Originally Posted by KenStrong View Post

        "She" also has more than one Warrior account... so take everything "she" says with a grain of salt anyway.
        What a surprise lol...

        Sounded like a guy to me, trying hard to sound like a woman...
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  • Profile picture of the author Gary Pettit
    I think the whole point here has been missed; true, it was intentionally misled, but still...
    We're talking about fishing, bait, hooks, and that is where you will find the secret:
    "Give a man a fish and he'll eat for a day.
    But teach a man to fish, and he'll sit in a boat and drink beer all day."
    This is one of the secrets of the Mars-Venus, Yin-Yang mystery. ;-)
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  • Profile picture of the author Matt MacPherson
    Men are mostly attracted to physical beauty. This is how we have evolved over millions of years.

    Women are attracted to the way a man behaves. The way he carries himself. All those subtle things we men don't care about. They mean a great deal to women.

    If I were to pitch a product in the seduction niche, I would use a logical approach. I would explain to my reader that as men, they actually have an advantage over women. They can actively learn the "right" way to behave that will result in female attraction. While a man's value can increase with knowledge, a woman's value can only diminish as she ages.

    It's a logical pitch and it will appeal to a male audience.

    Cheers,
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    • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
      Originally Posted by Matt MacPherson View Post


      If I were to pitch a product in the seduction niche, I would use a logical approach. I would explain to my reader that as men, they actually have an advantage over women. They can actively learn the "right" way to behave that will result in female attraction. While a man's value can increase with knowledge, a woman's value can only diminish as she ages.

      It's a logical pitch and it will appeal to a male audience.

      Cheers,
      Matt
      You'd make MANY more sales if instead you 1) talked about the prospect's inability to get dates with women and 2) created a mental image of success in his mind.

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  • Profile picture of the author Vyliss
    This thread has been entertaining to read Men are WAY more simple than women! Just give a man: lots of great sex, tell him he is the best at all masculine things (ego boost) and make sure you always look good and sexy. Once you get them excited, they can't "think" clearly about anything else.

    I love teasing my man when he is trying to work or concentrate on something... funniest thing ever. Oh and also telling a man you get turned on by watching him do the dishes or clean the toilet works really well too.

    OP definitely sounds like she is writing for the male audience (and the fact she is a tom boy with 6 brothers explain it). I also find it sus that she has not responded anymore.

    Women are also better with emotions because it is more socially acceptable for a woman to express her feelings than for a man to. Showing emotions for a man usually signals some kind of weakness.

    And I don't believe women are better copywriters than men. Copywriting is a task that is learned and mastered. Just like any other job out there. And I also feel this job appeals to more men because it's about winning people over. This is a skill more men are interested in than women usually.

    Hence why you don't see many how to pick up a guy books! You don't pick up a guy, you get a guy to chase you.
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    • Profile picture of the author Gary Pettit
      [QUOTE=Vyliss;2722460]This thread has been entertaining to read Men are WAY more simple than women! Just give a man: lots of great sex, tell him he is the best at all masculine things (ego boost) and make sure you always look good and sexy. Once you get them excited, they can't "think" clearly about anything else.
      /QUOTE]

      Truth. Men are simple. It's true. We are.
      It's really not so hard. (So quit complaining. Please.)

      For anyone who hasn't read them, I suggest the following:

      Dr. Laura, "The Proper Care and Feeding of Husbands," and,
      Ellen Fein/Sherrie Schneider, "The Rules"

      Invaluable. If you really care about your relationship.
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  • Profile picture of the author Sardent
    Barnard's Law - The attractiveness of a woman will be in direct proportion to how much she is not interested in you.
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  • Profile picture of the author gjabiz
    Two young sailors. Same age, same background.

    They just got in from an extended trip. Both men horny as hell.

    But, one of they young sailors spent his free time at sea reading the Wall Street Journal.

    The other, spent his free time at the poker table learning the tells of his shipmates and pocketing thousands of dollars (he was, after all, a student of Frank Wallace and had mastered NeoCheating).

    Into port they pulled. Young, virile, well built and good looking swabbies.

    They headed to the nearest watering hole where the nubile and the willing were known to hang.

    The Wall Street Journal reader had invested his money in a China EFT (precious metals). He only had a few dollars left over. He found a pretty girl and bought her an expensive dinner and took her to a theater. She went back to his motel room and told him her life story. She cried. They kissed. She left. He was left with only his blue balls and empty wallet.

    The Gambler, who knew when to hold them, knew when to fold them...found a 20 dollar hooker in the corner of the nightclub and released his pent up time at sea.

    Then he found a good poker game, bought a good cigar, some Chivas Regal and returned to the ship a few days later a broke and tired, but extremely happy man.

    In the meantime, the China gov't suspended trading on precious metals, the WSJ sailor was wiped out, caught herpes from merely kissing the pretty girl he wined and dined and stumbled over the gang plank a broken, diseased and unhappy man.

    MORAL?

    That dumb ass sailor should have ignored that great Conroy promotion when he got it and saved his subscription money and put it into cigars, alcohol and nightclubs. Sin sells. And those selling it prosper.

    OH, and so as to be somewhat relevant to OP, my dear, we men are not as created as equal as you seem to think. Consider this. I've never given a gal like yourself a second glance. Never needed to.

    Why? Was it due to having mastered some sleazy NLP pick-up technique?

    Certainly wasn't due to good looks, great body or hair. In fact, I've always been puzzled as to why I've had a bevy of beauties surrounding me...all I ever do is enter a place, look around, catch a pretty girls eye...and then out of nervousness, simply lick my eyebrows.

    Which I wish I could somehow translate that to copywriting, cause, for some reason, it worked pretty dang well.

    gjabiz

    PS. I'm not buying "Pat's" story either.

    Raises glass of Chivas, toasts, "Here's to Naval memories."
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    • Profile picture of the author DanielleLynnCopy
      As a female copywriter myself, I wasn't sure what to expect from this thread.

      I understand what OP is trying to say... but I strongly disagree with the notion that "women make better copywriters than men".

      It may be true that it takes all types of writers to write all types of copy, but there's no one superior gender for writing... or for most other jobs for that matter. (I suppose men are superior at impregnating and women are superior at giving birth but I don't suppose most people would argue with me there.)

      I don't think a woman needs to sexualize herself to sell, anymore than a man needs to assert dominance over another man to sell.

      However, I do appreciate this topic because it has opened up a riveting discussion
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      • Profile picture of the author Hank Rearden
        Just want to touch on two quick things:

        1) Pretty sure OP doesn't speak English natively.

        2) You actually do need to dominate someone - to an extent - to make them buy your product.

        Essentially, you're guiding them to a choice. You're leading them. You're persuading them to make a decision. And all of this has to be done from a place of power.

        So you're dominating them in the same way a leader dominates his followers, employees, troops.

        You're dominating him with his best interests in mind... but... at the end of the day... You're telling him "Look. Here's what you need to do. Now do it. And don't wait, or you'll be sorry."

        - HR
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        • Profile picture of the author DanielleLynnCopy
          Originally Posted by Hank Rearden View Post

          Just want to touch on two quick things:

          1) Pretty sure OP doesn't speak English natively.

          2) You actually do need to dominate someone - to an extent - to make them buy your product.

          Essentially, you're guiding them to a choice. You're leading them. You're persuading them to make a decision. And all of this has to be done from a place of power.

          So you're dominating them in the same way a leader dominates his followers, employees, troops.

          You're dominating him with his best interests in mind... but... at the end of the day... You're telling him "Look. Here's what you need to do. Now do it. And don't wait, or you'll be sorry."

          - HR
          I had a thought that someone might bring this up!

          It's true- in the art of copy persuasion, there's a strong undercurrent of setting yourself as a 'leader of men' to guide your potential customers through their decision making process right to the end result: purchase.

          The dominance I was referring to was more 'raw'- like threatening to punch someone in the face if they don't buy your product.
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          • Profile picture of the author Greg guitar
            Originally Posted by DanielleLynnCopy View Post

            threatening to punch someone in the face if they don't buy your product.
            Why didn't I think of that-brilliant. Now I know how to finish up that sales letter I've been working on!

            The OTO can be accompanied by a threat to kick them you-know-where, and the email follow-up will top it all off with a promise to "Dexterize" them if they fail to act now!

            I can see it now; the biggest selling WSO ever:

            "How I Had My First Six Figure Month Using My Revolutionary "Violence Marketing System", And How You Can Too-Let The Bloodletting Begin!"

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  • Profile picture of the author Greg guitar
    Originally Posted by 247Copywriter View Post

    If you were to write a sales letter, as a guy for a lady client in the how to attract women niche, how would you pitch?

    What emotional baits would you use to lure her prospects in?

    Whats on the end of your hook?



    ~ Sally
    I would start by admitting that I know nothing about the subject, then ask her what she thinks, and then listen. That usually shocks and delights them.
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  • Profile picture of the author Greg guitar
    I am in the market for a "sales copy enforcer" Must be at least 6foot 5 inches and weigh in at at least 280#. Physical violence involved. Any takers?
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  • Profile picture of the author mrdomains
    Bah, she took the bait in your story, not him

    Perhaps you meant "How to lure men", but you hit the nail with your title "luring men"

    "Luring Men" manage to play the game deeper than just a single move...

    Good copywriting is similar in that it influences you in a desired direction by focusing on something else.
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  • Profile picture of the author Rigmonkey
    At least it's been fun.....

    From my own perspective, what we have here is a bunch of fishermen using base techniques and catching nothing. In turn, they're being watched by a different type of fisherman (or woman) who's also using base techniques and catching nothing as well.

    Or something like that!
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  • Profile picture of the author ashokpobox
    I feel that Male and Female gender does play a major part in writing great copy, in these two ways. The person who can embody both of these traits knows how to sell are true copywriters:

    1. The greatest copywriters I know are empathic. We are energetically sensitive and can tune into the needs & feeling of an audience at a kind of psychic kind of level.

    2. Hormones & Energy, Yes, it’s about hormones and energy. People with a good dose of masculine energy find it easier to write in a masculine style than people without.

    If someone needs a specific gender-bias in your copy, does the writer have the empathic ability and the right ENERGY "masculine or feminine" to easily relate to the kind of copy that needs to be written.
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  • Profile picture of the author Paul Hancox
    Some great reads for males (and particularly male copywriters):

    1. What Women Want Men To Know, by Barbara DeAngelis.

    An excellent book which explains why women do what they do, and their thought processes. (Yes, they DO think in a different way to men... at least, according to the author.)

    2. Dangerous Men And Adventurous Women, edited by Jayne Ann Krentz.

    Romance novels sell by the truckload, and make Stephen King look like a struggling, small time author. This book contains a series of essays discussing the thought processes behind one of the biggest writing markets ever, and in doing so, gives us an intelligent "sneak peek" behind the veil of the female fantasy.

    Of course, I should point out that, just as copywriters don't rely entirely on the opinions of prospects to decide what works or not (if they did, sales letters would be a page long, have no scarcity whatsoever, and have the price right at the top of the page in big bright lights), and the same is true of women on the subject of women.

    But the above two books are genuinely helpful, and approach the subject in a very enlightening and thoughtful manner useful to a copywriter desiring to gain insight into the female mind (even though they are not about copywriting).
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  • Profile picture of the author Dean Jackson
    Hahahaha, whatever you guys do...

    Do NOT look up "My Secret Garden" by Nancy Friday.

    Under ANY circumstance...!

    - Dean
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  • Profile picture of the author John Durham
    I got a hundred bucks that says 247 copywriter is a man! lol
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  • Profile picture of the author HeySal
    Luring men? For this one all you needed to do is walk up and say "I want you."
    That's all there is to say or do - kinda like you're writing........

    Not all men are so simple.

    I saw him at the end of the bar talking with is friends. His body the hard, smooth replica of vibrant masculinity, but hard bodies and good looks were a dime a dozen in a place like this. What caught me was the promise.

    The glint of his eyes when spoke, the reckless free laughter in his responses, the energy in his gestures, and his smile. Auh, that smile. That was a smile that promised to lead you to realms of excitement you'd never dare fantasize.

    One look and I knew that this guy was not the average well wrapped, self-animated tool to be used for the night and tossed aside with the morning sun. This guy was the promise of fun and adventure...........and my backpack was in the car. All I had to do to embark on that adventure is to return that promise to him.................

    1. Lesson 1 - keep em wanting more. If you are going to write seduction - why write something that leaves nothing much to be said after a couple of paragraphs? If the sex is as cold, dry, and denigrating as the description given in the OP, we can skip the details.

    2. Seduction isn't "Hey, wanna do it?" It's an art. Seduction is the game in itself - you are writing cheap whore crap that promises nothing but a lifeless act of fornication that most people get sick of and walk away from very fast after the thrill and newness of having sexual organs wears off.

    3. If it's for a website, write in mind of serial - to keep them coming back for more. I'm afraid the OP just lost return clicks. Why change from the palm to a different toy when what you are searching for is warm life?
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    • Profile picture of the author KenThompson
      Originally Posted by HeySal View Post

      Not all men are so simple.
      A woman with brains.

      To the OP... you're full of it.

      Seriously.


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    • Profile picture of the author John Durham
      Originally Posted by DougBarger View Post

      Sal, I think I love you just in case I haven't told you in awhile.

      Me too. I second that.
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  • Profile picture of the author HeySal



    Wow.

    If that's the reaction I got out of that, I'm scared to think what would have happened if I'd edited it.


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  • Profile picture of the author seasoned
    247Copywriter,

    If you ARE a woman, enjoy it while it lasts. There ARE other components also. HECK, I stopped what I was seeing to see what this one girl looked like at my office. Her laugh basically excited me. She has a nice body too, but otherwise doesn't look that nice. But she didn't have to say ANYTHING to get my attention, just laugh.

    As for the gender genie? One post I just made, that was OBVIOUSLY written by a male, returned

    Words: 294

    Female Score: 169
    Male Score: 349
    MALE

    THIS post, so far:
    83 words
    Female Score: 128
    Male Score: 198
    MALE

    The OPs said:

    words 256
    female 322
    male 241
    FEMALE

    But that "gender genie" is a GIMIC! I mean WOMEN don't say MORE or AROUND or WHAT or ARE or AS? Those are the top four keywords that make a text MASCULINE!

    ME WANT BEER=3,4,0, FEMALE!
    SHOULD ME WANT BEER=4,11,9, FEMALE!
    SHOULD ME WANT MORE BEER=5,11,34, MALE!

    SO remember ladies, DON'T ask for more, or what or who, or you will be branded as MALE!

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  • Profile picture of the author HeySal
    The most gender revealing aspect of writing is the use of description - adjectives, adverbs, and phrases.

    Whoever said it is right that women use more description in writing (and speaking). Throughout human evolution men have been the brute force of the family and community systems. Their speech necessities were more operative than descriptive. Women have done the socializing, most of the shopping, cleaning, home decorating, cooking, sewing, etc - all which take descriptive communication skills to teach, to acquire the correct supplies, or convey necessary imagery to others.

    If you look at the descriptive terms in the OP - they are contrived and archaic. There is not much in the way of originality or any subjective quality. It all seems to be regurgitated from low quality romance novels.

    "make hot passionate love" - might have been a term that would have steamed someone in the early 1900', but not something that's going to make a person's blood boil in these years. I can't imagine a woman actually even saying this other than in humor. I can't even really imagine a man saying it with any real depth of seriousness. It gets the point across, but there's no real imagery drawn from it. Canned and cliched. Out of date. There are several other points at which the OP hits cliche with no real imagery derived. Successful writing for seduction requires vast amounts of imagery to be conveyed.

    Gay men -- are often more flamboyant than the average women when writing/speaking, but they tend not to use as wide a variety of descriptive terms as women, a person's hairstyle, for instance may be "fabulous" or "gorgeous" - but not very often "with feathery wisps and gentle half-curls"

    I'm not sure what the heck the OP's purpose was in this post. Was s/he trying to show prowess with seduction because of the size of the niche in hopes to land some assignments? A troll just rattling the forum up a tad?
    My guess is that it was a straight man who wrote this. If it was a gay guy - he needs to start being a gay guy instead trying to be a female clone, because he's not "getting" it. If it was a woman, it is an uneducated woman who is hoping to break into the writing field and has no sense of writing, time, purpose, nor place. Being that this is a copy writing forum - I can't imagine what a couple of paragraphs of low quality smut was supposed to prove.

    As far as the gender machine - thumbs down.
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  • Profile picture of the author seasoned
    BTW if the OP believes what it wrote, it is STUPID, pure and simple. I guess either way, but ESPECIALLY if it is not male, it is SEXIST!

    And you'll note that I said male! I use that type of terminology when age is unknown or not meaningful. In this case, WHO KNOWS how old the OP is. I used the term IT because the gender is in doubt. I COULD have assumed, or used the passive voice, but I figured this had a better feel for the circumstance!

    BTW women that hold such little regard for males are suddenly less attractive to me. I imagine women lose interest with men that have such little regard for females ALSO.

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  • Profile picture of the author seasoned
    Heysal,

    For the record, I have a certain set of words I KNOW but I will NEVER use. "fabulous" and "gorgeous" are words in that group. I will try to describe around them. WHY? Perhaps it is because of homosexuals using them so much, who knows... Most such flowery speech from males was, to say the least, frowned on in my day.

    As for homosexual males having all these feminine attributes? FORGET IT! It is like some cheap notalent impersonator. That is one thing I will trust only a woman to pull off. 8-)

    BTW I HATE using male in that context, but would prefer using gay for what it historically has been used for. In 10 years, people may start to believe that the flintstones was about homosexuality because of the flintstones theme!

    Flintstones... Meet the Flintstones,
    They're a modern stoneage family.
    From the town of Bedrock,
    They're a page right out of history.

    Let's ride with the family down the street.
    Thru the courtesy of Fred's two feet.

    When you're with the Flintstones,
    have a yabba dabba doo time,
    a dabba doo time,
    we'll have a gay old time.
    HELL, that stupid urban dictionary ALREADY says:

    What Fred Flintstone and Barney Rubble were having when Wilma and Betty were out
    And let's not even think about the christmas carols that say things like "don we now our gay apparel".

    OK, consider it a joke, but things like that have a habit of hitting common usage and that has really already started.


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  • Profile picture of the author HeySal
    Not much you can do about language evolution, Steve. There are language purists in every language group who fight evolution something furious....but it's not going to stop. Language and sociology can't be separated. When the society changes, so does the language and visa-versa. After all, language is just a means of conveying our ideology. "Gay" is a term that developed because of the flamboyancy of some of the homosexual community. Some are not flamboyant, and those guys, nobody knows are gay by means of observance. Those who are flamboyant and were easy to spot had attributes of general gaiety, thus the term "gay" ended up migrating its connotation - once the connotation migrates, the denotation will follow.
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    • Profile picture of the author seasoned
      Originally Posted by HeySal View Post

      once the connotation migrates, the denotation will follow.
      AND the deterioration! I guess we can use the term probably to mean a type of walrus now! Afer all, we don't need the word since it has been replaced by prolly! Let's make flamboyant mean sad, since it is so RARELY used.

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      • Profile picture of the author Karen Blundell
        The OP accomplished what she or he? wanted, I think. Attention.
        Some people will go to any lengths to get it, I guess.
        Other than that I see no other purpose of this thread, but I did read all the interesting responses, which, imho, were far more entertaining.

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      • Profile picture of the author HeySal
        Originally Posted by seasoned View Post

        AND the deterioration! I guess we can use the term probably to mean a type of walrus now! Afer all, we don't need the word since it has been replaced by prolly! Let's make flamboyant mean sad, since it is so RARELY used.

        Steve
        Sure it deteriorates it -- for awhile anyhow. A word in transition's connotation needs to become understood by a majority of demographic pockets for it to ever become a standard part of speech, and that takes time. It takes more than one word transition to mess up a whole society's communication systems. Regulation against certain word usages can cause a lot of chaos as people adjust their mental files - at that point, adjust their social order as well. But the transition of "ain't" out of standard language base didn't and isn't going to cause any major headaches for anyone.

        But some changes also run toward standardization. Look at dreamed/drempt (dreampt?)(I can't even run my spell check on that now because it's archaic enough to not show up) -- What did you say as a kid? We always drempt. Here we are decades later and we dreamed. It standardized in form (mostly thanks to crap education, but, well, you know).

        We speak much differently than we did even 100 years ago. People got peeved then when words changed then, too. Congress is getting real good at getting words struck down as politically incorrect, harassment, yadda-yadda. I'm thinking if you are pissed off enough and have a lot of money, you could always pay someone off to get "gay" listed as a derogatory term. It'll never get rid of the derogatory part, though, so you might as well just find another way to describe "airily happy".
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  • Profile picture of the author John Durham
    Amazing Sal.

    Every now and then a warrior will bust out and show you what they are made of and "Woop"... you got served!

    We have been officially served ladies and gentlemen.

    Word ^ up!
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    • Profile picture of the author HeySal
      Originally Posted by John Durham View Post

      Amazing Sal.

      Every now and then a warrior will bust out and show you what they are made of and "Woop"... you got served!

      We have been officially served ladies and gentlemen.

      Word ^ up!
      LOL - it's about time the sheepskin was useful for something other than a wall decoration, eh?
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  • Profile picture of the author darrin_kuykendall
    Originally Posted by 247Copywriter View Post


    Why do men have to make the world so complicated?

    He didn't know it but I had him on my hook within 5 seconds. Sold, hook, line and sinker.

    Why are women better copywriters than men?

    Why do women intuitively understand emotion better than their male counterparts?

    If you were to write a sales letter, as a guy for a lady client in the how to attract women niche, how would you pitch?

    What emotional baits would you use to lure her prospects in?

    Whats on the end of your hook?

    ~ Sally
    Just to answer your questions Sally,

    1.Why do men have to make the world so complicated?

    We like the challenge.

    2. Hook line & sinker?
    Are you sure about that? Remember the answer to question number 1.
    Don't believe me? Send a single guy (sometimes even a married guy) down to Miami for 2 weeks.

    3. Women better copywriters than men?
    Yackity, Yackity, Yackity --lol. J/K. -- I guess there's always something to complain about.

    4. Why do women intuitively understand emotion better than their male counterparts?
    I disagree with this one. Men are more emotional. Guys, you know how it feels when that chick breaks up with you.....so that's why we rush to do it first!

    5. If you were to write a sales letter, as a guy for a lady client in the how to attract women niche, how would you pitch?


    6. What emotional baits would you use to lure her prospects in?
    See # 5.

    7. Whats on the end of your hook?

    Miami -- Benjamins
    Hollywood -- A movie script
    New York -- Front of the Line @ the club
    Boston - Tickets (to any game or theater event possible)
    Wherever I go, where ever I be, I catch'em, reel'em & release'em.

    How'd I do?
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