Can I get some feedback on my website/sales copy PLEASE?

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Hey everyone, I'm new to the forum and internet marketing. I've been doing a lot of studying and I think I've refined my sales letter quite a bit. I'm not sure if it's enough yet though. Could you take a look at it and give me any constructive criticism you might have? I've been trying to drive traffic to it which is working, but haven't made any sales. I'm not sure if it's the traffic not being pinpointed enough, or if it's the sales letter. See what you think. Anything is appreciated. Thanks in advance. getgroupies dot com
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  • Profile picture of the author Topgunb
    The headline is not a headline...

    the sales letter is not a sales letter

    sent you an email from the site.
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  • Profile picture of the author JasonParker
    Shouldn't the angle really be about getting attractive groupies who will ... you know?
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    • Profile picture of the author jwenberg
      Yeah that should kind of be implied that you could take it there. I really don't want to be another "dating" guy putting out the same old tired stuff just like everyone else is doing.
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      • Profile picture of the author JasonParker
        Originally Posted by jwenberg View Post

        Yeah that should kind of be implied that you could take it there. I really don't want to be another "dating" guy putting out the same old tired stuff just like everyone else is doing.
        That's cool... I just think you'd sell more units with that angle... and make your "reason why" be that the groupies can help you get gigs and what not. No guarantees.

        Right now you don't really have anything that's emotionally hard hitting that jumps out at you on the page.
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