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Need Feedback on First Time ebook Website

by kusumo
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I've noticed that some of you are really good at writing a sales copy and it's one skill I really need to work on. Could you guys take a look at my website and give me some feedback? Thanks!

Website: Obtain Fame & Fortune as an Unsigned Recording Artist
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  • Profile picture of the author Rob Canyon
    kusumo,

    love the 3 mystery video concept. my recommendation is to make it more
    readable ie fonts and layouts, but killer man... killer.

    I'd also tend to get your headline out of the header graphic. Don't get me
    wrong... the graphic is awesome, but probably needs to be reduced to half
    its current height.

    The graphic is the dream... my recommendation is to get the words out of
    the way someone trying to see themselves on stage. Then you can
    describe the dream in your copy.

    cheers,

    Rob
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  • Profile picture of the author Leanne King
    Hi, I really love your copy and layout for this you have done a fantastic job. The only thing is that Rob is right the top graphic is great but on most computers it will cause the visitor just to see the graphic straight away and have to do a lot of scrolling, also with the black background it can be a little difficult to read. I love what you have done

    Leanne
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  • Profile picture of the author kusumo
    Thanks guys! I was thinking I'd get some harsher criticism than that, but it wasn't so bad.

    This forum and its members have been a blessing. I could have never done this without you guys.

    Anyone else have any suggestions?
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    • Profile picture of the author stoica
      I don't like the color of the headlines, green and red... are to strident for my eyes, but this is only my opinion
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      • Profile picture of the author Jassa
        I thought by and large it's pretty powerful!

        I'd prefer the text in dark colour on lighter background though - encourages more reading.
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