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Which headline would you use...

by bertuseng
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Hi there,

I am busy testing a few headlines for a new product of mine and would appreciate any input that you may have. I have a few choices that I am playing around with currently. My target market is Internet Marketers, more specific Article Marketers and backlinks creators, especially those who use article automation software and spinners.

Which choice would you choose...

Choice nr.1:

ATTENTION: Article Marketers, Article Spinners, Content Creators and ALL Warriors who need MORE Backlinks and Traffic....


"YOU Can Be One Of 50 LUCKY Warriors To Get A Weekly Pack Of 5 BRAND NEW Quality IM Articles in SPIN-FORMAT, To Promote Your Business EASIER Than EVER Before."


With The Click Of A Button, YOU Can Use These Spin-Ready Articles To Generate 1000's Of UNIQUE Articles For HORDES Of Backlinks and Tons Of Traffic...



CHOICE nr. 2:

ATTENTION: Article Marketers, Article Spinners, Content Creators and ALL Warriors who need MORE Backlinks and Traffic....

"How Would YOU Like To Get 1000's Of Backlinks And Tons Of Traffic Using Super Spinnable Articles To Generate UNLIMITED amounts of Articles with the click of a button?"

Read on to discover how you can use our weekly spin-ready articles to promote your business easier and Faster than ever before...



Choice nr. 3:

ATTENTION: Article Marketers, Article Spinners and LAZY writers...

"Kiss YOUR Article Researching, Writing, Rewriting And Spinning Nightmares Goodbye With *BRAND NEW* Weekly Spin-Ready Articles That YOU Can Plug In For UNLIMITED Unique Articles!"

Use our spinnable articles to build boatloads of backlinks and tons of traffic FASTER and EASIER than ever before...


I am also playing around with different combos of the 3 parts of the headlines.

Please let me know what you think about these and which ones you think I should go with.

Thanks a lot.
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  • Profile picture of the author davemiz
    who cares what ppl think, they aren't the ones buying.

    why aren't you testing them?

    google website optimizer dude. its free.

    or run some adwords ads and see which one gets the most clicks.
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  • Profile picture of the author copycashvalve
    Hey bert,

    Glad to see your still going hard brother.

    I like the third one out of all of them, they still need tweaking. I came up with a third person headline for you to try if you'd like.

    "How a completely green Internet Marketer pointed 1000's of laser targeted backlinks from Unique Spinnable Articles that went to generate him wads of cash practically on auto-pilot."

    Not the best, as it could be a little more specific but it does leave you a little curious I hope

    Cheers!

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  • Profile picture of the author copycashvalve
    "Kiss YOUR Article Researching, Writing, Rewriting And Spinning Nightmares Goodbye With *BRAND NEW* Weekly Spin-Ready Articles That YOU Can Plug In For UNLIMITED Unique Articles!"
    --- that completely green internet marketers are using, practically on auto-pilot.



    You need to end the headline with something like what is shown above. I.e How it's so easy, a one legged old geezer could do it.
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    • Profile picture of the author bertuseng
      Originally Posted by copycashvalve View Post

      "Kiss YOUR Article Researching, Writing, Rewriting And Spinning Nightmares Goodbye With *BRAND NEW* Weekly Spin-Ready Articles That YOU Can Plug In For UNLIMITED Unique Articles!"
      --- that completely green internet marketers are using, practically on auto-pilot.



      You need to end the headline with something like what is shown above. I.e How it's so easy, a one legged old geezer could do it.
      Thanks for the input, I will see how I can make something like that work...
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  • Profile picture of the author ELVISTHEPELVIS
    I will go with number 3

    ATTENTION: Article Marketers, Article Spinners and LAZY writers...

    "Kiss YOUR Article Researching, Writing, Rewriting And Spinning Nightmares Goodbye With *BRAND NEW* Weekly Spin-Ready Articles That YOU Can Plug In For UNLIMITED Unique Articles!"

    Use our spinnable articles to build boatloads of backlinks and tons of traffic FASTER and EASIER than ever before...
    Brian
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  • Profile picture of the author copycashvalve
    Bert to see what I am talking about visit http://www.ohpdirect.com/product.php

    Most of those ads are from John Carlton when he wrote ads in golf magazines, model your headline after them and you will be fine.

    Obviously still tweak like miz pointed out.

    Good luck
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  • Profile picture of the author MarkWidawer
    Bert,

    Why don't you just do what DaveMiz suggested and test them? Frankly, I think they're all too similar, and not very good. They sound very hypey to me.

    But again, don't believe a word I say...or that anyone else here says either, for that matter. TEST THEM.

    --Mark

    p.s. One thing, though...

    If you're going to use a word like "horde", make sure it's the right word.
    Hoard vs Horde - Education Bug
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  • Profile picture of the author oda
    My 2 cents

    If your targetting Newbies most wont know what "spinnable articles" are. You need to dumb it down and use very common words.

    Selection 3 the first sentence is great, then it gets a little weak.
    I would generalise a little:
    Brand new 100% original Articles that will create thousands of free backlinks and create a constant stream of targeted traffic to your website, if you use them correctly.

    Sub:
    Not only do we supply the Content, we show you exactly how to turn 1 of our Top rating articles into Hundreds maybe even thousands of backlinks. ALL pointing directly to your website, product or offer. Laser Targeted Free Traffic anyone?

    I know that looks bulky but it may create some curiosity and thus more clicks.

    Good luck mate I for one think coming here was a good idea, tons of great advice above, some of which i have taken on board too.

    Thanks all

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    • Profile picture of the author EamonnTurley
      Too much red for my taste and use of caps
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  • Profile picture of the author JumpInMyCar
    Number 3 for sure, loved the "LAZY writers" in your attention, speaks to me
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    • Profile picture of the author andy230
      Originally Posted by JumpInMyCar View Post

      Number 3 for sure, loved the "LAZY writers" in your attention, speaks to me
      As for me:
      Also like this variant - it sounds less boring than the first two, which are kinda standard. And the third one - at least it makes the reader read to the end)
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  • Profile picture of the author jushuaburnham
    You got me Bertus, I'll go with number 1.
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