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Please Critique:

by Steve Holmes
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Are you looking for a proven and profitable product package that you can take to market today?

You don't want some crappy website with "potential" - You Want Backlink Supremacy - the complete package that is just waiting for you to take it to Clickbank.

This has been proven to sell at up to 8% conversion rates and has testimonials from seasoned internet marketers that will leave you salivating.

EVERYTHING HAS ALREADY BEEN DONE FOR YOU

This is your chance to join the elite and create your very own guru style launch!

This auction contains the following:

Brandable Name

Professional Website

Expert Motion Graphics Video

50 Page PDF ebook written by me personally

The word document for this 50 page ebook - Giving you complete control

A proven product with plenty of testimonials from seasoned internet marketers

Conversion data



This INCLUDES ownership rights to this ebook.

How much would it cost you to have a quality ebook like this made? I don't mean one thrown together - I mean an ebook that took months to plan and create, an ebook that was written by someone who has been an internet marketer for almost 6 years and certainly knows his way around?

How much?

Ok... now how much would it cost for an ebook THAT ALREADY WORKS?

Already packaged and ready to go?

An ebook with exceptional testimonials from respected professionals?

An ebook with a guru style video and a website to match?

Exactly...



"Then why on Earth are you selling?"

I am 23 and have an offline video business that is starting to take off. Be under no confusion that you can make alot of money with this package I have created for you, but also understand it will take you work too.

You still have to put it on Clickbank (which ok is easy but, you still have to manage affiliates). I have never done that before myself and learning is time I do not have. I will be giving my video business every chance I can which means 100% focus on exactly that.


I know I could make good money with this, I have already proven this in the first month alone. The last 2 months though I have barely even looked at it. Rather than let it go to waste I decided to put it up on Flippa.

The first month took in $2000 and I promoted it that month. The next 2 months I left it and still made $200 or so but I paid NO attention to it at all. About 2 months ago I started to get REALLY busy with my offline videos that I have going on, see the correlation?

I have factored those 2 months into the monthly revenue even though I did nothing with the product at that time. Only fair.

If you are willing to work, this product will make you money.

All I had to do was stick it on a forum - that's it. LOL

Easy Money.

This auction is the complete package, how often does something like this come along?

All you need to do now is add it to Clickbank and get yourself affiliates.

With a great looking website, a proven product that converts up to a massive 8% and testimonials that will blow you away - that will be very easy indeed.

Good luck and I welcome any questions.

P.s I have added the WSO Pro tracking data to the right for your viewing, the names and emails have been deleted for obvious reasons.

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Ok warriors - let me have it, don't be gentle as I'm hoping to make any necessary revisions.

Cheers
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  • Profile picture of the author virginiad
    The first thing you should do is set it up as a sales letter.

    Headlines, bullets, etc.

    Proof read it and take out all the spelling and grammar errors.

    That will make it much easier for them to read and critique it.

    Also, don't tell them that they have to work hard.

    Virginia
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  • Profile picture of the author Steve Holmes
    It is a Flippa listing, i wanted to take the honest approach.

    Is that a big no no?
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    • Profile picture of the author virginiad
      You say everything is done for them, and then say "easy money".

      I would take out the sentence about having to work
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  • Profile picture of the author Steve Holmes
    Ok good point, noted.

    Appreciate it.
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  • Profile picture of the author PracticalCopywriting
    The only challenge I see is that you are sounding like everyone else.

    Yes, Flippa is full of biz op seekers but they are getting more sophisticated by the day.

    They may have tried something like this in the past and failed.

    So you need more proof. You need to actually show them how this will work. You need to show them every step, so they don't have to guess anything.

    For how much are you selling it?
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    • Profile picture of the author padre
      If your content has effective keywords you might want to mention where the pages rank in the serp's. Free, targeted traffic from the se's would be a benefit that would improve the copy.

      Let us know how it does, please.

      Cheers
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  • Profile picture of the author Flipfilter
    Hi Steve,

    In my experience, Flippa buyers have become a lot more savvy recently.

    The sites that attract the most bids tend to sell the sausage more than they sell the sizzle - less hype and more facts about the site itself.

    Best of luck

    Justin
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  • Profile picture of the author Steve Holmes
    Hey all,

    I decided to go ahead with it yesterday and it has had 2 bids currently standing at $500, so the copy can't have been that bad.

    I have deleted my sig for this thread.

    Thanks for all of the input ( Justin I did actually go with the less hype so glad to see you agreeing with me! )

    Steve
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    • Profile picture of the author 247Copywriter
      This just looks like spam to me.

      Are you serious about wanting a critique?

      Looks like it was cobbled together in about 15-20 minutes with the intention of grabbing some free advertising / traffic from this forum, perhaps to boost your final sale price?

      You tell me.
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  • Profile picture of the author AnneE
    I felt that your story didn't really ring true. For example, you say,
    All I had to do was stick it on a forum - that's it. LOL

    Easy Money.
    But you also say how you made $2000 the one month and then $200 the next month because you did nothing with it. Now.... come on.... you mean the difference from one month to the next was that you got SO busy with your other business that you could not post to a forum? even though doing so might add another $1800 to the bottom line.

    Also, you are saying they need to sign up for Clickbank and get affiliates... but a few minutes ago, they were going to be able to simply repeat what you did and get to $2000 a month. In that case, Clickbank and affiliates might further increase profits, but are hardly a requirement. Lots of people will buy websites and be happy with $2000 in income a month.

    The inconsistency makes you lose credibility and people are much less likely to buy.
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