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almost UNBELIEVABLE but still possible headlines

by Ross James
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"Attract And Sleep With TWO Women By The End Of The Week!"




So I came across this headline, while I know it's not impossible, I'd really appreciate feedback from the more experienced copywriters on this BOLD as heck headline.

What are your thoughts about these almost unbelievable headlines? I'd really like to know because while it's still possible it's more than likely not going to happen.

-Ross

#headlines #unbelievable
  • Profile picture of the author stealthpromo
    Thats not a headline, thats how i finish a sentence.
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    • Profile picture of the author Ross James
      Originally Posted by stealthpromo View Post

      Thats not a headline, thats how i finish a sentence.
      talk is cheap
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  • Profile picture of the author Bruce Wedding
    It is a great headline but your subhead better qualify it or back it up or you'll lose them. I'm doing one similar right now.
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    • Profile picture of the author Ross James
      Originally Posted by Bruce Wedding View Post

      It is a great headline but your subhead better qualify it or back it up or you'll lose them. I'm doing one similar right now.
      Well the thing that really gets me is the product is over 200 pages. How the heck is someone supposed to read, reread, practice and get laid by two females by the end of the week. I'm just wondering what kind of buyers remorse this might trigger.

      -Ross
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      • Profile picture of the author Ross James
        Originally Posted by Ken_Caudill View Post

        Two hundred whole pages? That's a deal breaker, alright.
        Yeah, right? I don't have time for reading anything If I have to get laid by two woman by the end of the week.
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    • Profile picture of the author briancassingena
      Originally Posted by Bruce Wedding View Post

      It is a great headline but your subhead better qualify it or back it up or you'll lose them. I'm doing one similar right now.
      Good point mate, it's like the silly "SEX - now that I have your attention..." headline
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  • Profile picture of the author stealthpromo
    Haha Ross. (drags digitial camera out...calls out to russian models in background)
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    • Profile picture of the author Ross James
      Originally Posted by stealthpromo View Post

      Haha Ross. (drags digitial camera out...calls out to russian models in background)
      I still don't believe you.

      You'll have to show me some proof.

      -Ross
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  • Profile picture of the author ewenmack
    What are your thoughts about these almost unbelievable headlines? I'd really like to know because while it's still possible it's more than likely not going to happen.

    -Ross

    Hey Ross,

    It's perfectly possible, if you are dealing with 1 out of 10 quality women.

    The headline doesn't mention this, so it's wide open to interpretation.

    All the best,
    Ewen
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    • Profile picture of the author Ross James
      Originally Posted by ewenmack View Post

      What are your thoughts about these almost unbelievable headlines? I'd really like to know because while it's still possible it's more than likely not going to happen.

      -Ross

      Hey Ross,

      It's perfectly possible, if you are dealing with 1 out of 10 quality women.

      The headline doesn't mention this, so it's wide open to interpretation.

      All the best,
      Ewen
      that's a good point, thanks ewen
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  • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
    I think this headline would be much more believable ...

    "Who Else Wants To Sleep With TWO Women
    In The Next 72 Hours... Without Taking A Bath,
    Combing Your Hair, Or Brushing Your Teeth?"

    LOL

    Alex
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  • Profile picture of the author Daniel Scott
    LOL, it doesn't say you can't pay for it.

    Hookers are legal in this country... not sure about elsewhere.

    Having said that... we all know jumping into bed with a girl you've just met is pretty easy...

    ...so long as you're willing to be flexible in your standards.

    Three secrets:

    1. Pick someone who is really drunk
    2. Lie a lot
    3. Compliment her a lot

    You do this on someone who's needy and insecure you're bound to hit the jackpot.

    So to me... hardly a bold promise.

    Now if it's two women AT ONCE... that's a little more difficult.

    @Ken: Agreed. It's sad people think this kind of shallow relationship is actually enjoyable... or maybe I'm just not as manly as I should be

    -Daniel
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    Ever heard the saying, "Man the harpoons!" ?
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    • Profile picture of the author sethczerepak
      Honestly, it's not all that ballsy really, considering the niche I mean. I wrote one just last week that's converting like nuts:

      "I cracked the "female language code" for online dating. Now I'm getting laid and you're not."

      A good smack in the ego is like Megan Fox dipped in fondue sauce when it comes to the men's dating/seduction niche. You almost can't overdo it.
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  • Profile picture of the author tpw
    If you are married and have a girlfriend on the side, it should not be a problem at all.
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    • Profile picture of the author Grazina Ajana Szewczyk
      "Attract And Sleep With TWO Women By The End Of The Week!"
      would that include a guy who went broke and has to share his bed with his wife AND a 73 year old, snoring like a jackhammer, mother-in-law?
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      • Profile picture of the author Grazina Ajana Szewczyk
        "Who Else Wants To Sleep With TWO Women
        In The Next 72 Hours... Without Taking A Bath,
        Combing Your Hair, Or Brushing Your Teeth?"

        Alex, I hope that I'm not breaking any copywriting laws here, but I confess I printed out your headline and put it on the board next to my computer. I'll make me laugh for the next three incarnations
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