almost UNBELIEVABLE but still possible headlines

by Ross James

Posted: 13 years ago 20 replies

COPY WRITING

"Attract And Sleep With TWO Women By The End Of The Week!"

So I came across this headline, while I know it's not impossible, I'd really appreciate feedback from the more experienced copywriters on this BOLD as heck headline.

What are your thoughts about these almost unbelievable headlines? I'd really like to know because while it's still possible it's more than likely not going to happen.

-Ross

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stealthpromo 13 years ago

Thats not a headline, thats how i finish a sentence.
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- Ross James 13 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by stealthpromo
  
  Thats not a headline, thats how i finish a sentence.
  
  talk is cheap
  
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Bruce Wedding 13 years ago

It is a great headline but your subhead better qualify it or back it up or you'll lose them. I'm doing one similar right now.
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- Ross James 13 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by Bruce Wedding
  
  It is a great headline but your subhead better qualify it or back it up or you'll lose them. I'm doing one similar right now.
  
  Well the thing that really gets me is the product is over 200 pages. How the heck is someone supposed to read, reread, practice and get laid by two females by the end of the week. I'm just wondering what kind of buyers remorse this might trigger.
  
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  Ross James 13 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by Ken_Caudill
  
  Two hundred whole pages? That's a deal breaker, alright.
  
  Yeah, right? I don't have time for reading anything If I have to get laid by two woman by the end of the week.
  
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- briancassingena 13 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by Bruce Wedding
  
  It is a great headline but your subhead better qualify it or back it up or you'll lose them. I'm doing one similar right now.
  
  Good point mate, it's like the silly "SEX - now that I have your attention..." headline
  
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stealthpromo 13 years ago

Haha Ross. (drags digitial camera out...calls out to russian models in background)
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- Ross James 13 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by stealthpromo
  
  Haha Ross. (drags digitial camera out...calls out to russian models in background)
  
  I still don't believe you.
  
  You'll have to show me some proof.
  
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ewenmack

13 years ago

What are your thoughts about these almost unbelievable headlines? I'd really like to know because while it's still possible it's more than likely not going to happen.

-Ross

Hey Ross,

It's perfectly possible, if you are dealing with 1 out of 10 quality women.

The headline doesn't mention this, so it's wide open to interpretation.

All the best,
Ewen

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Ross James

13 years ago

Originally Posted by ewenmack

that's a good point, thanks ewen

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Alex Cohen 13 years ago

I think this headline would be much more believable ...

"Who Else Wants To Sleep With TWO Women
In The Next 72 Hours... Without Taking A Bath,
Combing Your Hair, Or Brushing Your Teeth?"

LOL

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Daniel Scott 13 years ago

LOL, it doesn't say you can't pay for it.

Hookers are legal in this country... not sure about elsewhere.

Having said that... we all know jumping into bed with a girl you've just met is pretty easy...

...so long as you're willing to be flexible in your standards.

Three secrets:

1. Pick someone who is really drunk
2. Lie a lot
3. Compliment her a lot

You do this on someone who's needy and insecure you're bound to hit the jackpot.

So to me... hardly a bold promise.

Now if it's two women AT ONCE... that's a little more difficult.

@Ken: Agreed. It's sad people think this kind of shallow relationship is actually enjoyable... or maybe I'm just not as manly as I should be

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Chris Worner 13 years ago

Ever heard the saying, "Man the harpoons!" ?
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- sethczerepak 13 years ago
  
  Honestly, it's not all that ballsy really, considering the niche I mean. I wrote one just last week that's converting like nuts:
  
  "I cracked the "female language code" for online dating. Now I'm getting laid and you're not."
  
  A good smack in the ego is like Megan Fox dipped in fondue sauce when it comes to the men's dating/seduction niche. You almost can't overdo it.
  
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tpw 13 years ago

If you are married and have a girlfriend on the side, it should not be a problem at all.
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- Grazina Ajana Szewczyk 13 years ago
  
  "Attract And Sleep With TWO Women By The End Of The Week!"
  
  would that include a guy who went broke and has to share his bed with his wife AND a 73 year old, snoring like a jackhammer, mother-in-law?
  
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  Grazina Ajana Szewczyk 13 years ago
  
  "Who Else Wants To Sleep With TWO Women
  In The Next 72 Hours... Without Taking A Bath,
  Combing Your Hair, Or Brushing Your Teeth?"
  
  Alex, I hope that I'm not breaking any copywriting laws here, but I confess I printed out your headline and put it on the board next to my computer. I'll make me laugh for the next three incarnations
  
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