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Hi

Okay it might be kind of interesting if you started out with a little trivia --- something about the holidays or working in an office.....something that makes people laugh. Or just some interesting bits of trivia. Then give some reasons why people will want to have a trivia party, it is interactive, it will (and this is VERY important for an office party) keeps people from drinking too much -- because MANY offices are worried about drinking and driving because they are liable for a lawsuit or (worse) death, it gets EVERYONE involved from the shy person in the office to the outgoing sociable people -- everyone gets to meet everyone. A chance to show off your smarts. Impress your boss with your useless knowledge. That type of thing.

I think your copy is fine overall but the lighting, oh the LIGHTING. Please considere re-doing the video. I have no idea how these things work or how difficult that is. Is that difficult? Because it just doesn't look as nice as it could. Also you'd look more like you were having "fun" if you were wearing a lively, brightly colored tie. Something with a holiday theme perhaps. The blue suit is too quiet for encouraging people to have fun at holiday parties. Please keep in mind that as I type this, I have no makeup on, hair in a ponytail, bare feet and my oldest pair of yoga pants on (they are the most comfortable after all). So I am like the LAST person to give wardrobe advice! lol. But you become your live and active copy when you place that video. So a holiday themed tie would be ideal and you can easily pick one up now.

Can you get someone who had a holiday party to say something about how much fun it was to have their trivia party with your service? It looks like you've done a lot of parties. A testimonial would be really cool.

I hope that isn't too many ideas. I think your trivia parties sound like a LOT more fun than most office parties I've been too. Much better than trying to disco with the guys in accounts payable! lol

Thanks Abigail. You made some great points there.
Some I already knew, some I didn't.
Your best was the one about starting with some trivia.
Will do exactly that on the next upgrade. Thanks!

Your holiday trivia parties sound very cool! Wishing you great success!

Some backround color and framing of each element would help.

Also - text size and font needs refining.

The video screen size in the middle is great.