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want to bump up my conversions...thanks
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  • I did not see your original but I think that the page is far too long before you get down to the section where you actually place your order.

    Also by just quoting the price in sterling and mentioning Royal Mail delivery makes it seem as if you are limiting yourself to sales in the UK. If that is what you want OK but have you thought of trying to sell to the US (in particular) as well?
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    • I'm not sure if you want to use the word "Danger"ously in your headline.

      Might kinda give people the wrong idea...
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    i posted my website a few days ago and i received alot of help full advice ...so thank you too all who help is this better? Learn To Massage DVD Box Set | Indian Head Massage | Full Body Massage | Luxury Facial Massage