Brand Spanking New Sales Page Needs Review!

Hi,

Here are a few thoughts.

One, your headlines are quite ho-hum. I like the use of a different color, but they simply don't make me want to dive right into your text.

Two, your header... I would take the "How you can use...." and make that into a headline. It's much more compelling and deserves to be more prominent than it is now. And why a woman in your header? Don't you think men would like to respond to your offer? I'd consider some other kind of image that conveys your message, imho.

You start an early paragrahp with "If you're anything like me..." That is a personal turn-off for me. I mentally say, No, I am me, thank you very much - and click off the site. Instead, I'd consider a scenario where you demonstrate the problem that your problem solves.

You need to make the problem real to your reader, then to present why your product is the answer.

Then you go on to "why trust me" - and again, I turn off instantly. This comes too early - and needs to be presented better. Perhaps some testimonials in a sidebar would be much more effective?

That's enough for now.

Hope it helps,
Dot