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HILFE!

by goindeep
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Ahhh yeah.....


Sorry couldnt think of a better headline

But ummm yeaaah.. anyway.

Im writing an ad which im going to place in local newspaper.

The end goal is to get a few paying small business's for my seo services.

Here is what i got so far:

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Is your website on the first page of Google?
If you answered 'no'.
Then you need to call the number below for your FREE online website audit and report valued at $149.00
Spots are strictly limited to the first 30 people that call.

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Whats do you think?
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  • Profile picture of the author jimbo13
    Perhaps this is being English but mentally I would be saying to myself:

    Is your website on the first page of Google?

    No

    Then you need

    I don't need to do anything thankyou very much

    That was a truly unhelpful reply wasn't it?

    I have only ever wanted to know two things from anyone who ever had something to sell to me.

    1.What will I get from your product/service after I have bought it
    2.Prove it

    If I were to write a small ad it would address both of these concerns.

    Why don't you change the title of your thread to '$50 to whoever can write me the best ad in 50 words or less'

    That should get you a higher response than HILFE! and could be the best $50 you spent.

    Dan
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    • Profile picture of the author goindeep
      Originally Posted by jimbo13 View Post

      Perhaps this is being English but mentally I would be saying to myself:

      Is your website on the first page of Google?

      No

      Then you need

      I don't need to do anything thankyou very much

      That was a truly unhelpful reply wasn't it?

      I have only ever wanted to know two things from anyone who ever had something to sell to me.

      1.What will I get from your product/service after I have bought it
      2.Prove it

      If I were to write a small ad it would address both of these concerns.

      Why don't you change the title of your thread to '$50 to whoever can write me the best ad in 50 words or less'

      That should get you a higher response than HILFE! and could be the best $50 you spent.

      Dan

      Am i allowed to do that in here? I thought that was for the contests page only?

      p.s. im Australian, i just like the word kekeke
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  • Profile picture of the author CloptonCapital
    I would ditch the only available to the first 30 people part. Business owners are usually smarter than to buy into that logic. By the way are pictures allowed in your ad? If so I would use a zoomed in screen shot of one of your best SERPS
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