Hay fellow Warriors, anyone here review my capture page

13 years ago

Here is just a quick comment: this looks extremely like a pyramid scheme. Even if it's not that's the initial impression people might get.

Plus the video seems to be read by a bot with a female voice, maybe it's an editing problem.

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infinatecashflow 13 years ago

Hay,

The voice is a real person LOL...really it is, it's one our team members...ha ha you called a robot, but seriously, it's not a pyramid scheme technically.

But if you could improve it how would you do that ?

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reww

13 years ago

One suggestion would be to bring the video further up on the page. When i went to the site it started playing and i could not see where it was. Plus im not a fan of things flashing on the screen when im watching the video it a bit distracting. Hope this helps

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travlinguy

13 years ago

Your header is huge, too big. It's taking up space you could have for the video and text. I'd cut it by about half.

The claims are pretty unbelievable. I'm guessing it's a gifting program. Are you making that kind of money with this? It's pretty hypey for my taste. It looks like thousands of other unbelievable offers. But that could be okay depending on who you're targeting.

You have autostart video, which I can't stand. There's a recent thread here about autostart video and the overall opinion slightly favored it. I almost always click away when I come upon it. I at least shut it down until I decide whether I want to know more. You might try testing the whole page out. It could be perfect for people into MLM or gifting. Good luck.

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infinatecashflow 13 years ago

Thanks everyone, i'm taking it all in and will act upon your recomendations, my screen at home is 42" so i guess the header looked small to me lol, i'll sort that out.

As for the money mentioned on the screen it is actually 100% possible and mathamatically proven although i can understand the skeptesism about making that kind of money.

Would you recomend i make the income figure a little less to make it more appealing to people ?

As for the video i made it autostart so people can hear what it's all about, but if that's a bad thing i can sort that out too.

Flashy bits i will stop to stop people getting distracted as you said.

Thanks everyone for the great tips.

Abdul
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- Drez 13 years ago
  
  Just a couple of thoughts.
  
  The flashing "Watch The Movie" is very distracting.
  
  As mentioned before the claims sounds unbelievable. One way to counter that would be with testimonials from people who have been successful.
  
  Have you gotten anything from the YouTube video?
  
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Scott Ames

13 years ago

In addition to all the things already said... why explain everything in the video? It just confuses people... Week 1 get 4 , then they get 4, then ok I'm lost. Say what?

Get their email then explain.

The way it's presented my BS meter went off the charts. It's trying too hard. It's like "Marry me, I'm wonderful.... click here to marry me"

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infinatecashflow 13 years ago

Hay thanks guys,

I think i'm going to go with the suggestion to have just the vid and opt in form and see how that goes.

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- infinatecashflow 13 years ago
  
  Hay Warriors,
  
  Check it out now what do you think, sweet and simple now i think, and i removed the flasing image and chaged the video to something more easily understood.
  
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Scott Ames

13 years ago

Much much better! You did that fast!

You still have some confusion. You have a form for name, etc. and also a Join button below the fold. They go to different places. It's hard to test results that way and it just confuses the reader.

I would also get rid of the graphics on the bottom below the form. They don't really add anything and may take away.

Blinking text $50,000 in 10 weeks: I don't think that helps. I would let the video tell the story. Even if it's true for most of your sign-ups, they won't believe it. Someone making $50,000 a year would have a hard time with that.

I would get all the advise you can here, then get the ultimate advise and do testing. Test one element against the other until you have a response killer, then roll it out.

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Scott Ames

13 years ago

Something to test: Remove the Phone / Skype fields. vs put the words (Optional) below those fields, vs the way you already have them.

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infinatecashflow 13 years ago

Thanks Scott,

I have done as you have mentioned, hope that is alot better now with less distractions, i do all my work in dreamweaver hence the fast work, as i upload from within dreamweaver and have created templates for all pages saves alot of extra unnecessary work.

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- infinatecashflow 13 years ago
  
  I hope this is alot better now.
  
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Kevin Williams

13 years ago

Other than the "fill out the form below" while pointing to the right, this has improved dramatically.

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infinatecashflow 13 years ago

Thanks, i know about the fill out the form below problem, but really don't want to put the form below to be honest i think it stand out better on the right.
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fasteasysuccess

13 years ago

I don't see any copy now on there to review but one quick and profitable tip for you...get rid of the youtube and add your own video or hosting because if you notice now, at the end you are giving people an opportunity to click on more videos which then go's to youtube and or your competition and that's the last thing you want to do.

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infinatecashflow 13 years ago

Hay thanks for that tips, i never though of that, you are so right, appreciate it.
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nigelburke

13 years ago

Originally Posted by fasteasysuccess

I don't see any copy now on there to review but one quick and profitable tip for you...get rid of the youtube and add your own video or hosting because if you notice now, at the end you are giving people an opportunity to click on more videos which then go's to youtube and or your competition and that's the last thing you want to do.

I think if you upload to vimeo this doesn't link to other videos

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infinatecashflow 13 years ago

Thanks Nigel,

I just created my own one and put one up now, i hope that's better now, any other suggestions would be very much appreciated.

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Marvin Johnston

13 years ago

I don't know what the definition of "Infinate" is. If it is a mispelling of "infinite", then I would expect your credibility to be pretty low on that site.

Marvin

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infinatecashflow 13 years ago

Hay Marvin,

To be honest it is a mis-spelling but actually not my fault when i registered the domain i spelt it as infinitecashflow.com but my domain registrar registered it as infinatecashflow, i only realised this after it was too late and could not do anything about it.

Plus i had traffic and people visiting it and on Google etc..so having a new domain would mean redoing all the work, i hope you understand my dilemma.

The domain was registered via email with my current hosting company who deal with my other domains.

Abdul
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- Marvin Johnston 13 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by infinatecashflow
  
  Plus i had traffic and people visiting it and on Google etc..so having a new domain would mean redoing all the work, i hope you understand my dilemma
  
  A new domain would require a 301 redirect from your old domain to the new one ... none of your work would be lost.
  
  The question is what will be the difference in long term success if you don't change the domain.
  
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brianadrian

13 years ago

Ken Caudill nailed it: Lose everything but the video and opt-in.

Asking for a phone number will also hurt your opt-in rates. I've had luck asking for a phone number on the THANK YOU page in exchange for FREE STUFF.

You are in a tough market. If you plan on making such income claims you need some testimonials from people who have actually done it.

I would also make the Headline compelling. My first reaction to being told to "watch the video" was to run (I hate being told what to do, particularly when their are images of MONEY floating around -- HYPE). I only stayed because I wanted to be able to give you some sound advice.

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infinatecashflow 13 years ago

Hay Thanks guys for the advice.

Appreciate it, i'll get on it right away.

Abdul
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