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Can help to give feedback to my landing page

by chocobo244
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Hi Warriors,

It would be good if Warriors here cna give feedback to my landing page on what they feel, and how to improve conversion of the landing page

WHITESMOKE

Appreciate your feedback and input to build conversion on this.

Thanks.
#feedback #give #landing #page
  • Profile picture of the author Drez
    Yikes ... there's a lot going on here.

    I wasn't sure what to do first. You may have too much text decoration (bold, highlighted)

    Plus there's a type / grammar error in the headline: Microsoft Word (lose the "s") I only point it out because this is a grammar product.

    The page is a bit confusing. If your goal is for the free download - focus on that.
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    • Profile picture of the author chocobo244
      Thanks a lot for feedback.

      I am focusing on the free download first. How do I can improve my words there?

      Originally Posted by Drez View Post

      Yikes ... there's a lot going on here.

      I wasn't sure what to do first. You may have too much text decoration (bold, highlighted)

      Plus there's a type / grammar error in the headline: Microsoft Word (lose the "s") I only point it out because this is a grammar product.

      The page is a bit confusing. If your goal is for the free download - focus on that.
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  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    Not sure what you're trying to accomplish here. Essentially, you've got an optin page that doesn't require any contact info for the prize. Why bother to give random, unknown folks your download without capturing their contact info? That's what optin pages are for.

    You've also got a lot of stuff on the page that makes it hard to tell what the purpose of everything is. Maybe you should decide on a specific strategy and design the page based on that. On the bright side, the page is colorful and friendly to the eye, despite the clutter. Good luck.
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    • Profile picture of the author chocobo244
      Thanks for the insight. I have done some simplication of the page.

      Originally Posted by travlinguy View Post

      Not sure what you're trying to accomplish here. Essentially, you've got an optin page that doesn't require any contact info for the prize. Why bother to give random, unknown folks your download without capturing their contact info? That's what optin pages are for.

      You've also got a lot of stuff on the page that makes it hard to tell what the purpose of everything is. Maybe you should decide on a specific strategy and design the page based on that. On the bright side, the page is colorful and friendly to the eye, despite the clutter. Good luck.
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      • Profile picture of the author groggi42
        It took me a while to realize what it was that you are selling.
        I'd start with the MS Word detected and White Smoke Detected sections. They made things clear to me.
        It's also a little tricky to know what you're expected to do. There are just too many things on the page (despite the flashing arrow that somehow makes me doubt the product is spam free). If it is as high a quality product as it seems, than a simple, classy landing page might do the trick.
        My two cents anyway...
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        • Profile picture of the author chocobo244
          Thanks for the input.

          How does the flashing arrow make you doubt the product is spam free?

          Originally Posted by groggi42 View Post

          It took me a while to realize what it was that you are selling.
          I'd start with the MS Word detected and White Smoke Detected sections. They made things clear to me.
          It's also a little tricky to know what you're expected to do. There are just too many things on the page (despite the flashing arrow that somehow makes me doubt the product is spam free). If it is as high a quality product as it seems, than a simple, classy landing page might do the trick.
          My two cents anyway...
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