Can you write an effective sales letter without proof or testimonials?

by NickN
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I'm new to the copywriting business. I write copy for supermarkets, and I'm currently writing a sales letter to grocery store marketing directors to promote my copywriting services.

I've read a lot of literature on what makes for effective sales letter, and I think I have all of the key elements in my letter...except proof and testimonials.

Back before I knew what made a good sales letter, I had sent out a one-page "sales" letter to various retail and grocery stores. Somehow, this letter snagged me a steady client who has come back to me numerous times. She really likes my work, so I sent her an email a couple weeks ago to ask if she'd write me a testimonial at her convenience.

I got bupkis. Not even an email saying, "Sure, I'll get to it at some point."

The thing is, she's hired me for more work since I've sent that email. So I know she's read it. I don't want to keep asking her, though, because I don't want to be pesky.

So here's my Q: Since I can't get a testimonial, and most of the projects I've done for this client have yet to be implemented (which means no proof), can I still craft a sales letter that's going to get responses? I think what I have right now is strong, though not perfect.

Thanks!
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  • Profile picture of the author marciayudkin
    So here's my Q: Since I can't get a testimonial, and most of the projects I've done for this client have yet to be implemented (which means no proof), can I still craft a sales letter that's going to get responses?
    You already answered your own question. In your post you said a letter you sent snagged you a client. At that point you had no testimonials or proof.

    So obviously the answer is yes. If it worked for you before you studied copywriting, it should work again for you now.

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    • Profile picture of the author NickN
      Originally Posted by marciayudkin View Post

      You already answered your own question. In your post you said a letter you sent snagged you a client. At that point you had no testimonials or proof.

      So obviously the answer is yes. If it worked for you before you studied copywriting, it should work again for you now.

      Marcia Yudkin
      I think I landed my client partially because of a "right place, right time" thing. She always seems slightly frazzled because of her workload, so I was able to come in and relieve some that burden.

      I know it's possible to make a sales letter convert without P & T (I somehow managed to do it). But a sales letter is a hell of a lot stronger with them. I'll just ask her for a testimonial again -- this time over the phone, so she'll have a harder time ignoring me.
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      • Profile picture of the author amo992
        Originally Posted by NickN View Post

        I think I landed my client partially because of a "right place, right time" thing. She always seems slightly frazzled because of her workload, so I was able to come in and relieve some that burden.

        I know it's possible to make a sales letter convert without P & T (I somehow managed to do it). But a sales letter is a hell of a lot stronger with them. I'll just ask her for a testimonial again -- this time over the phone, so she'll have a harder time ignoring me.
        I was about to suggest that you either ask her in person or over a phone. If, by chance, you will see her in person, have pen and paper in hand and ask her to write something nice about your work as you give the two items to her.
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  • Profile picture of the author JRCarson
    I think the testimonial is VERY important. I'll just put it in terms of what I know best....

    Let's say someone goes to Amazon and looks at a product. It looks good, but there are absolutely no reviews. The product 2 next to it has 2 reviews of 4 stars and 5 stars. Which are you going to buy? 90% (or more?) of people will naturally be drawn to the product with the social proof (reviews).

    It's human nature.

    Are you going to go into the restaurant that has 1 person in it sitting at the bar eating, or the one next to it with 20 people eating in it? Again...

    If this girl has hired you again, I think you should be able to keep asking her for a testimonial! She likes your work. Hound her!!!
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    • Profile picture of the author JRCarson
      ...I should have added, but just keep moving forward of course! I would say don't let it stop you from launching the page.
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  • Profile picture of the author Drez
    Why not just call your client on the phone ...

    Ask them:

    - What they liked most about working with you.
    - How your copy performed
    - Would they work with you again?
    - How you were better than other copywriters they worked with
    - Etc,

    THEN ...

    Write their comments and thoughts into a testimonial and run it by them for approval.

    Done!
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