Can anyone feedback to my landing page?

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Dear Warriors,

I have done simple landing page, and looking to enhance the header and call to action. Appreciate if any Warriors who are good in copywriting can help give feedback to landing page?

WHITESMOKE

Regards,
Chocobo
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  • Profile picture of the author OutOfThisWord
    You don't have a headline.

    In fact, some of your bullet points could be put together for the headline.
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    • Profile picture of the author chocobo244
      Thanks for the feedback man, have change to another variation.

      Appreciate if you can feedback to this one in same link, WHITESMOKE

      Originally Posted by OutOfThisWord View Post

      You don't have a headline.

      In fact, some of your bullet points could be put together for the headline.
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  • Profile picture of the author Mike Mendell
    Ok, I don't quite get what you're going for here...

    It looks as if it's some kind of writing tool, but how is it different from spell check or grammar check in Microsoft Word? (Which most people use.)

    Also, why do you have a picture of a woman dressed up as a reindeer blowing snow at the camera? What does that have to do with a piece of software that helps you write?

    I also don't understand why you have a picture of an elephant on your software box.

    The whole page doesn't feel related to "helping me write better" at all.
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    • Profile picture of the author chocobo244
      Thanks for the feedback man, have change to another variation.

      Appreciate if you can feedback to this one in same link, WHITESMOKE


      Originally Posted by Mike Mendell View Post

      Ok, I don't quite get what you're going for here...

      It looks as if it's some kind of writing tool, but how is it different from spell check or grammar check in Microsoft Word? (Which most people use.)

      Also, why do you have a picture of a woman dressed up as a reindeer blowing snow at the camera? What does that have to do with a piece of software that helps you write?

      I also don't understand why you have a picture of an elephant on your software box.

      The whole page doesn't feel related to "helping me write better" at all.
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  • Profile picture of the author Naimath
    The landing page is good. Frankly speaking, it looks great.
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    • Profile picture of the author Shadowflux
      I think it's a little cluttered, there's no visual flow to the over all layout.

      Also, your NBC and CNN quotes are the same, I think you should change that.

      There are also a few typos and stuff which, for a program like this, is rather inexcusable.
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  • Profile picture of the author whoiskb
    I think the call to action link gets a bit lost....
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    • Profile picture of the author JPSimplySites
      I think the header should be a little bit bigger in height otherwise I think it is a very nice landing page. I was very tempted to click on the trial version since English is my second language and I am always so critical of my writing.

      How about the download link in red just to call attention to it right away?

      Anyhow, I think it is a great landing page and I think you will do great with it.

      Good luck!!!


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  • Profile picture of the author problog
    Your landing page could use some work, first your headline is too long. Make it red and catchy, I get that you're trying to put as many benefits into it as you can but sometimes less is more. Maybe you can put: "Discover How You Can Easily Write in Perfect English Each and Every Time" or maybe make it into a question. Scrolling down your content looks a bit disorganized. There's no clear benefits that pop right away when I look at the page. PM me if you need more help.
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