Please Review my Squeeze Pages

Hi there Harrel,

I took one look at the copy and my eyes started to blur. The headline is as generic as possible: "If You Don't Know the Techniques in These FREE Reports, Chances are You Won't Get One Step Forward . . ."

That could mean anything... and nothing. I don't know where these people are being directed from, but I stand by my assertion that the headline is weak and non-descriptive.

The copy is not compelling and tends to have "a whole lot of nothing."

(taken from the page)
"Once, you've applied these techniques in your life, and took a positive action that has an optimal outcome, you are ready to get started to persue higher levels of personal growth which'll make a massive difference in your life"

I could sum up that sentence here: "Follow these techniques to change your life. Really!"
As I said, a whole lot of nothing.

The grammar is also 'off' and contains misspellings.

To fix this:
Start by figuring out what you're actually trying to say to your leads, then say it.

Don't use puffery and adjectives to fill in words when there's nothing to say. For opt-ins, create an attention-grabbing headline, find your main benefits, build up the intrigue and value of what you're offering, tell them what to do to get it (enter their email).

I would go with bullets over a small paragraph like you have there.

Check for spelling and grammar mistakes

For the other link - I'm getting directed to a blank page.

If you need a little extra direction, feel free to PM me — there's too much to go over in just one sitting.

Okay, deep breaths: It takes guts to post your copy here The criticism is only meant to help you refine it. Good luck!