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Hey everyone,

Putting the finishing touches on my squeeze page, and was looking for some outside perspective.

Take a look and give me your worst!

The 5 Most Common Liver Cleanse Mistakes

Thanks!
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  • Profile picture of the author Rach72
    Ummm, OK I'm going to jump in here - I'm bored before I start reading. The layout, the colors...all scream ADVERT!

    As soon as I start reading it my brain fuzzed up. I know all the things that indicate that I need a liver cleanse, that's why I have got to your site, to find out what I can do to make my cleanse as good as possible.

    But that said, the second half is actually pretty good, so I'd move the 'don't make the same mistakes I did' up and cut out all the stuff before it. It wasn't until I got to this point that I started to feel some empathy with you and felt that you might have some information for me that I wanted.

    Apart from that just add a graphic or two and soften the background color and add another optin further up above the fold.

    I'm sure there's more... but someone else will chime in.....
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  • Profile picture of the author davemiz
    LOL.... is that a squeeze? or a sales letter?

    opt in form above the fold dude.

    split test.
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    • Profile picture of the author 36burrows
      Originally Posted by davemiz View Post

      LOL.... is that a squeeze? or a sales letter?

      opt in form above the fold dude.

      split test.
      Could be both I guess?

      Don't be an ass though
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      • Profile picture of the author Drez
        Are people really searching for liver cleanses?

        Or are they searching to remedy a situation (ailment) where a liver cleanse is the solution?

        Just make sure you're squeeze page creates enough interest and desire that your prospect MUST have your report (and sign up, of course).
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  • Profile picture of the author jgchess
    By the way if you don't know what above the fold means you have to see the sign up form without scrolling down the page. You could put the sign in form on the right side of the copy.

    Good Luck,
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  • Profile picture of the author davemiz
    it can but not if you wanna make money.

    each page has its own 'function' - squeeze is to get emails.

    dont think that page looks like other squeeze pages out there... thats a red flag right away.
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  • Profile picture of the author peteranderson874
    I find your squeeze page too much filled with text and information. And yes, the opt-in page should be above the fold. Why don't you try a video squeeze page to get rid of the text which is quite overwhelming?

    Source: Good Squeeze Page Example
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  • Profile picture of the author Ross Cohen
    I like using OptimizePress for squeeze pages, if you never heard of them, might want to check them out. Could probably (or definitely) increase your opt-ins.
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  • Profile picture of the author max5ty
    You want the worst, so here goes.

    That's not a squeeze page - it's simply a website offering a free report.
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    • Profile picture of the author MRMagMark
      Hi, 36burrows. I think you received some good advice. The page doesn't have any design elements that emphasize the product. Also, your testimonials are great but they're also not featured. (The photo of the woman is a stock photo.)

      Last but certainly not least, you need a powerful headline to grab attention.

      I took a stab at this to show you what I meant. It's a "quick and dirty" but you should get the point:

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      • Profile picture of the author 2stroke
        Originally Posted by MRMagMark View Post

        Hi, 36burrows. I think you received some good advice. The page doesn't have any design elements that emphasize the product. Also, your testimonials are great but they're also not featured. (The photo of the woman is a stock photo.)

        Last but certainly not least, you need a powerful headline to grab attention.

        I took a stab at this to show you what I meant. It's a "quick and dirty" but you should get the point:

        (I can't post images quite yet)
        That's impressive, If I were the OP I would work out a deal with this guy :-)
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  • Profile picture of the author 36burrows
    Thanks so much everyone, I will get back to the drawing board. And BIG thanks to MrMagMark, I like your example!
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    • Profile picture of the author escribe
      My initial thought when I saw the page was too much text. You need a powerful headline that jumps out at the reader. Red, large text like what was suggested... Also, break up the page with subheads. Don't start off with testimonials either -- place those further down in the body of your text. You have some good testimonials that I think you'll want to make them stand out for your reader. How about italicizing those and placing them in a Johnson box... with pale yellow b/g.

      Oh, and your opt-in on the right of your page, fails to entice the visitor. I'd suggest having a more powerful headline above your book that intrigues your visitor and makes them want to sign up. Perhaps something like "Dangerous Liver Cleansing Mistakes You Want to Avoid" or "Dangerous Liver Cleansing Mistakes That Could Hurt Your Health"... Sign Up Now for this Free Report! Have the name and email box listed above the book rather then the way it is now. This will allow your visitor to see it immediately when they arrive at your page.

      You have something really good there. Just needs to be reworked. Also, I think you need to change your b/g color. I think there is too much blue on the page. Perhaps a darker blue??? OR maybe a white background with the shadow effect?

      Hope this helps!
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  • Profile picture of the author StoneWilson
    You're editing your squeeze page right now? Because it looks worse than MrMagMark's screenshot shows.

    Try to use Bold tag, colors and font size carefully.

    Shorten the title.

    Pictures on the top half part.

    Don't add too many offer in single page.
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    • Profile picture of the author 36burrows
      Yeah I've been editing it lol! Lot's of GREAT suggestions here and I'm taking every one of them into consideration

      Originally Posted by StoneWilson View Post

      You're editing your squeeze page right now? Because it looks worse than MrMagMark's screenshot shows.

      Try to use Bold tag, colors and font size carefully.

      Shorten the title.

      Pictures on the top half part.

      Don't add too many offer in single page.
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  • Profile picture of the author Vulk
    For your last optin forum put it in <center></center> tags
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