First I want to thank you for even taking the time to open my selfish thread.
My last WSO sold hundreds.
And the copy was CRAP.
It converted at some terrible number I don't remember exactly.
But it did about 5-7% worse than my last launch (conversion ratio).
I know it's because I suck at writing copy.
I made another attempt to write the sales-letter again. It's better than the last time, but it doesn't scream BUY ME.
What am I missing?
Did I target the wrong hook maybe?
Is the story line talking too much about myself?
Also there will be a few subtle supporting images added, but I wanted to at least get someone with some skill to look at it and tell me if it sucks or not.
Thanks again for your time. I know a copywriters time is very valuable, and I thank you very much for any input you can provide,
p.s. I almost forgot the link: http://www.warriorforum.com/test-forum/432280-test.html