Sales Page Feedback Request - Discover The Key Techniques To Grow & Build A Successful Business

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Hi team,

Would love to get your thoughts on the following sales page for a $895 two day course for under 35 entrepreneurs.

http://www.the-entourage.com.au/test.htm

Many thanks in advance for the insightful feedback!
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  • You need a lot of work here.

    It's not clear what your offer is... what your promise is...

    ...and most important, who are you and why should anyone listen to you.

    And what were the results of people that did take this course.
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    • Yeah, your sales page still needs a lot of work, but one thing
      you should focus on much more is who what where when and why.

      Who are you
      What are people going to learn (you need much more features and benefits)
      Where is the training taking place
      when " " " "
      Why you're doing this, why should people be interested, why
      should people do this and why should they do it NOW
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  • There is no "might" about it, this program IS the solution... If you aren't confident in your copy then there is no chance people are going to buy from you.

    When writing it's always when not if, it's always is not might, be stronger with your copy.

    Mark
  • There's not a lot of selling going on here. And for $900, you need to do some serious selling.

    I just finished hanging out at the ClickBank event here in NYC. They put their event on for $697, though it may have risen to $997 later on.

    You're charging a lot more than them and you have far less credibility.

    Plus... the site's amateur hour. The design's awful... the copy stinks... and there's absolutely no compelling reason for me to sign up with you guys.

    When I read it, the first thing I thought was...

    "If these guys are so successful... why aren't they able to pay for professional design work and compelling copy?"

    If you want to sell a high-ticket item, you gotta get serious about your marketing. Half-baked won't cut it.

    -Daniel
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