I was reading another thread requesting copy critique, and I wasn't impressed with what I read... but then I realized that this guy was making an infinite amount more than I was because he had something and I had nothing. In the spirit of "do something.... now!" I slapped together my first sales letter. I think I should add a few additional benefits and defeat another objection, but I wanted to know what everything thought of the message. The layout and lack of graphics can (and will) be dealt with before I launch.
Second Draft Sales Letter
Any advice (public or private) would be extremely helpful. I look forward to getting ripped
Thanks,
MJ
P.S. The URL isn't permanent, either, I just wanted to stick it somewhere so everyone could see. Training material for this exam runs at 200-300 and with class can be 400-500. I am looking to sell this report for ~30.
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