I'm working on a post card to prospects in the next couple of weeks. I'm using a post card as that has been very effective when sending to current clients, and I want to offer the service to a wider audience. I've tried to keep the formatting true to the actual post card, but of course, some of it doesn't translate onto a web forum. Any suggestions or criticism would be greatly appreciated, as I am not a great writer (though I've learned a lot - I think - by reading these forums.) I've gone through Chris Ramsey's checklist and I think I've covered all the basics (though there's probably a lot I've missed.)
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Are you sick and tired of waiting for your slow computer?Are there days your computer is just so frustrating you want to throw it out the window and go back to pen and paper?
Almost every computer runs much more slowly than it should. Viruses and file corruption cause crashes and errors, old junk files take up space and slow your computer down.
We have the solution to your problem.At [Company Name], we've spent the last 30 years learning all the tricks and tweaks to make your computer run faster and more reliably so you spend less time waiting for it, or worrying that it might crash and lose all your data.
Bring your computer into [Company Names]'s Computer Spa and we'll make it run faster (probably even faster than when it was new).We will clean off any viruses, clean up the hard drive, test all your hardware, make sure all your software is up to date, tweak your computer to make it fly, and install a one-year subscription to the world's best anti-virus. And if you bring in the coupon below, we'll do all this for the special rate we normally reserve for our best clients, just because we hate slow computers just as much as you do.
Coupon Text Bring in this coupon by
and you will receive our Gold Computer Tune Up Service.
1)Remove any infections, 2)clean up file corruption, 3)remove all junk files, 4)thoroughly test all your hardware, 5)make sure Windows and all your software is up to date, 6)apply our UltraPerformance™ tweaks, 7)optimize your hard drive, 8)innoculate your computer to prevent advertising pop-ups, 9)install the best anti-virus on the planet.
All for only $XX.
(A savings of $YY!)
Thanks for any advice.