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I'm in the college dating niche and here is my copy:


If you are in college, looking to meet women and improve your social life I literally cannot stress how awesome it is that you found this.

College Campus domination
Another year has passed and now its time for school. This year can be different.
You can get girls this year. You've seen the movies. Road Trip, Animal House, and American Pie. Could you imagine if you were the star of college sex rump movie? Throughout the year you have some bumps in the road, some embarrasing moments, but at the end of the film you always get to bang your hot female co-star.

This could be your real life. Minus the stunt doubles.
It's now possible because of this new ground-breaking book. Campus Domination.
As you read on you are starting to feel the excitement because you know a breakthough is coming...

Whether you want to wake up in your dorm under cozy blankets with your body pressed against the soft strawberry scented skin of a different chick every day. Or
if you want to start a relationship that's built on having kinky college sex with the babe of your dreams. I'll teach you all you need to know.

This isn't a book written by some 35 year old guy trying to teach you wierd tactics to talk to women.
And this isn't some pick-up guide with over-used pick up lines either. This book is written by a real college aged guy, sharing with you the secrets that he learned in school to pick up women.

I've spent years in trial and error banging my head against the wall in fustration but after all of this stress I finally found what works in college and weeded out what doesnt. You can use my experience as your shortcut to mastering college game.

This book is stuffed with real life ways to get hot girls on your college campus. I'll teach you how to build an amazing social circle out of thin air.
Which relieves you of the stress of being alone and scared on your first few weeks.

This book doesn't just teach you how to be a womanizer, it teaches you how to develop a social life that continues to blossom even after college.
If you have already read about how to pick up women, reading this is like putting jet engines and wings on what you already know and blasting off to mars! Because it's packed with so much explosive info.

Litterally I thought I knew alot about women going into college then I found out it's a totally different playing field than high school or bars. You MUST know these secrets in order to win in college.

If not, buy an expensive video game to keep you company while your alone in your dorm.

You are beggining to see how important this is...

here is a list of the chapters:
ch.1 7 ways to attract any college girl you want
ch.2 Be a Lucky S.O.B! (this proven technique will make you irresistable garaunteed)
ch.3 Really simple ways to build a circle of friends FAST
ch.4 2 things that mess with your game
ch.5 How to be popular at your school
ch.6 How to bone your hot teacher
ch.7 3 things that can make you a sexy go getter, that you can do right now
ch.8 How to get college girls while staying in your comfort zone (anxiety free)
ch.9 8 New college-dating truths you must learn

Dating around in college is as big of a past time as MLB. It's Down Right American. You have to live up to that call. It's about having your own adventure.
Take a minute to imagine your perfect college adventure. I bet a HUGE chunk of it is your dating life.
It's time to master college dating now.

My College Experience
I had to go through being a loner in college. I was misserable. Sitting alone every lunch. I couldn't find a girl to save my life so I went my whole first semester not going on a single date, I sat in my expensive dorm playing Madden.
It's sad to pay so much for a college education, but not have any fun. I was so deppressed that my grades started to slip. That was the final straw. I began getting up and going out. Taking notes on what works with the women on my campus and tossing what doesn't.
I put in blood sweat tears and my every ounce of energy I had to come up with this guide. But I didn't stop there. After I was done I bounced my ideas off of dating experts the world over. What came out of it was the most important guide ever written on college dating!
These rules made me go from a common campus peasant to a well known stud! Other People witnessed and were shocked by my sudden come up. I knew with all of the effort, and trial in error would make the guide potent, but
even I was AMAZED by the FAST results.
The more you read the more you see the potential in this once in a life time opportunity...

Now I'm giving you the torch. It's time to stop making excuses. It's time to learn how to date the college women you have dreamed about right now.
If you don't then you never will. It's now or never. Don't become that campus guy who is scared ****less, who get's his degree but regrets that he never even had a real date in college.

The fact is college is a really competitive dating arena, the guy's who don't know what they are doing get their sex life starved out by guys who do. It's like a parrasite feeding off its victim until it shrivels away. Don't be the guy who shrivels away. The competitive edge you need is right here.

So buy it now read it and start dominating your campus dating scene. Or you'll become that guy who still has that party animal in him. That party animal that never will get out, because you swallowed
the key when you didn't take this offer.

You are one step above alot of people in the work force because you have invested in your education. It's time to be one step above in your college dating life by investing in this book. A small 27$ dollar investment and you are set.

If you went through college had the perfect adventure you imagined earlier, graduated with your degree and got that a special woman, how much would that be worth? Certainly more than $27 dollars.
97$ value is truly the all in one guide if you want to pick up college girls, find the one for you on your campus, learn how to be popular in school, or just make some cool college friends.

I garrauntee that you will have eye popping results or your money back garaunteed. No questions asked. That's how confident I am that this book will transform your life. Now you have nothing to lose, I've taken all of the risk out of this.

It's now time to buy. And for a limited time only if you buy now I'll give you two free bonuses! The bonuses are worth 57$ dollars each. So basically I'm giving you 100$ to make your decision now.
Still aren't sure if you want to buy? Get the first 2 chapters free!