CALLING ALL FELLOW WARRIORS!!! What Would You Do Differently On My Flippa Listing?

Fix your headline. I saw the rest but I'm not going to read it until you fix this headline.

Right now it says you'll make $18.95 per month without any effort if you buy this thing, whatever it is. Wooooow. I'm impressed.

My sneak peak down into your copy says it's actually **75** X $18.95 per month which is $1500-something. But if your headline duds out like this one does, I'm never going to get that far.

Hey, I'm going to give you a rundown of what I think of this listing.

Pros

- The writing is pretty good. I mean, you obviously know how to craft readable sentences that make people want to read further.

- You use bold typeface for some key terms, which is a good idea.

- You include some bonuses that look legit and valuable. That is a good move.

Cons

- The headline doesn't tell you what the niche is, it just says how much money you can make. Now, for some buyers, that's going to be enough, but there is a huge segment of buyers who don't want to own a site unless they are actually interested in the niche.

- Your headline contradicts the body copy. You say the site will make them $18.50 per month with no work required, but then you go on to say that you've only made 2 sales like that, and then you really focus more on a traffic building strategy that they can use to get 75 sales and make $1500. Readers will find this confusing.

- You mention in the body that you got some freelancer to write you persuasive content for the site. That is actually a very good strategy and I think it is smart of you to have said that. The only problem is, when you go on the site and actually read the content on it, you see that the articles are not very well written or persuasive. I mean, your sales pitch is fairly well written, but the content on your site isn't. This will turn some of the higher end buyers off.

All in all I would say use a change the headline, use a little more formatting and re-write the content on the website itself.

where are the screenshots of the woftware you are sellling?
why don't you make a video showing how that piece of software works?

Isn't a site with the word 'iphone' in its name in danger of being pounced on by Apple?

Thanks again.. :-)