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Please Critique These Headlines... Thank you

by PsychoProfits
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Which of these Dirty Dozen headlines work for you? They are to advertise a sales copy writing course to internet marketers and aspiring copywriters.

HOW THE POWER OF PSYCHOLOGY MADE An ORDINARY COPYWRITER INTO A MILLION DOLLAR SALES LETTER WRITING MACHINE

YOU CAN LAUGH AT MONEY WORRIES - IF YOU FOLLOW THIS SIMPLE COPY WRITING FORMULA

WHY SOME PEOPLE ALMOST ALWAYS MAKE MONEY ONLINE

HOW I CHANGED MY FORTUNE WITH ONE SIMPLE DISCOVERY

EVERYWHERE MARKETERS ARE RAVING ABOUT THIS AMAZING NEW COPYWRITING FORMULA!

TO PEOPLE WHO WANT TO WRITE SALES COPY - BUT CAN'T GET STARTED

ONLY FOR PEOPLE WHO WANT TO QUIT WORK SOMEDAY

IT'S A SHAME FOR YOU NOT TO MAKE GOOD MONEY - WHEN THESE MARKETERS DO IT SO EASILY

ANNOUNCING... THE NEW COPYWRITING FORMULA THAT MAKES IT FUN TO MAKE MONEY

WHAT EVERY MARKETER OUGHT TO KNOW... ABOUT THIS COPYWRITING BUSINESS

GREATEST GOLD-MINE OF EASY "HOW-TO-WRITE-SALES-COPY" EVER CRAMMED INTO ONE COURSE

FORMER CHINMEY SWEEP EARNS $36,450 IN 4 MONTHS AS A SALES COPY WRITER
#critique #headlines
  • Profile picture of the author The Marketeer
    I might be biased but I like the 1st one.

    The words "Power of Psychology" are attractive.

    Also makes you curious. Hmmm ?
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  • Profile picture of the author doshmachine
    All of these would have more impact and grab attention quicker if you moved the subject to the beginning of the sentence - not the end.

    e.g. Making Money Online: Why some people always succeed!
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  • Profile picture of the author max5ty
    All the headlines you've listed...with the exception of the first, which I'm not sure, but don't like because of the word psychology, which I think is a mind twister...have all been used in the past with a couple twists...

    ...so they've been proven to work.

    The best thing would be to split test.
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  • Profile picture of the author max5ty
    Another thing to remember is that most of the headlines you've mentioned were also used with strong sub headlines.

    What I'm saying is the headlines are good...but the real punch was often delivered by the sub headline.
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  • Profile picture of the author coolash
    Tried, Tested and Proven.... Way to Go!
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