Page crit: would appreciate your feedback

by nixn

Posted: 12 years ago 4 replies

COPY WRITING

Hi all,

We would be really grateful to all of you for any comments you may have with regards to a promo page we've done (see below). We're going to be promoting via Google Adwords.

My partner has written a Sudoku Methodology Guide book which is doing quite well on Amazon at the moment (we also have our own website where sales are going very slowly, hence the need to try a promo).

The target market: Sudoku beginners/fans/sufferers

>>> Please see attached .txt file for the website address. <<<
(As I'm still quite new to this forum having only posted twice and not the necessary 15 posts I'm not able to include the site address in the post, so please forgive the inconvenience.)

#crit #feedback #page

Mark Andrews Banned 12 years ago

Lets make it easier for others Niki to chirp in with their opinion...

Solve all levels of Sudoku easily without maths or experience
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- simplycastguy 12 years ago
  
  Looks good. Not that cluttered. Did you mean to refer to it as "Maths" in the main title?
  
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  Mark Andrews Banned 12 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by simplycastguy
  
  Did you mean to refer to it as "Maths" in the main title?
  
  Correct me if I'm wrong. South Africa uses British English not American English, therefore 'maths' is perfectly correct.
  
  We do not refer to the subject of mathematics as 'math' in the United Kingdom. 'Maths' in the plural is the correct spelling in this case.
  
  The only exception to this might be when we tell someone, "Go do the math," but even then the more likely to use expression would be, "Do your maths," not the math.
  
  Best,
  
  Mark Andrews
  
  PS I know where Nova Scotia is.
  
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nixn 12 years ago

Thank you everyone for your comments. Yes, 'Maths' is the term I intended. However, I do understand that 'Math' is also another terminology.

Having said that, would it be preferable to use 'Math' in the heading rather?
Our market is predominantly USA; UK coming in at second place very closely.

Possibly altering the heading altogether?

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