Critique my Sales Letter?
Hi, Just getting ready to release my first WSO. A case study I did over 10 days where I recorded how I built my first list and made my first money online.
This is also my first attempt at a sales letter. Would love for you creative genius's to look it over and give me some feed back!
Thanks,
Travis
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"[Case Study] How a complete Newbie built a list and made his first $$ online! (step-by-step videos)"
Dear Friend,
If you'd like to build your list, have step-by-step instructions on EXACTLY what to do and make your first money online, then this might be the most important letter you'll ever read.
Here's why:
I know what it's like to be stopped by fear, overwhelmed by information and uncertain as to which step should be completed next.
With this WSO, I take you by the hand and let you watch over my shoulder as I build a list and show you EXACTLY what I do to make money online.
Now, I know you're probably skeptical. That's normal and healthy. Let me give you three good reasons why you should listen...
Reason one:
I was just like you. I quietly "lurked" on the forum, spending thousands on WSO's as I tried to understand this whole "internet marketing" thing. But every thing I read or watched always seemed to leave something out, which just added to my confusion and hesitation.
Ultimately, I just didn't know how to get started, and I wasted nearly a year of my life watching others make all the big bucks.
Reason two:
You get to watch over my shoulder and see EXACTLY what I did to build my list from absolutely zero to nearly 150 people in less than ten days, with only a couple of hours effort.
I reveal EVERYTHING: how to set up the autoresponder, how to set up a squeeze page, how to set up a download page, how to set up a confirmation page. I even show you how to mask your affiliate links so no one can game the system and go around you if you promote products.
Reason three:
You get to watch with me as I log into my clickbank account and see my first sales, EVER, online.
That's right, be there with me when I discover that I just made my first money online. You'll be surprised at how easy it actually was!
-- Where do you start?
I show you the EXACT method I used to build my list. Where to go, what to do, how to set everything up.
-- What auto responder should you use?
Forget Aweber and Getresponse! Who has money to spend every month when they are just getting started. I show you 3 different autoresponders that NO ONE is talking about here in the forum that cost less than $10 a month for UNLIMITED subscribers!
-- Create your first autoresponder list.
You'll know how to create your own list in less than five minutes.
-- Create your confirmation page.
Know exactly what to say and where to send your subscribers after they "opt in" to YOUR list.
-- Create your squeeze page.
Forget all the crazy templates! I show you an amazing tool that will help you create as many squeeze pages as you want... in less than two minutes flat!
-- Create your download page.
Finally... know exactly how to create your download page. I even get into my cpanel to show you EXACTLY how to save your reports and files so that your customers can download them after the order. It's so much easier than you think!
-- The money is in the follow up...
See exactly what I do to in my initial follow messages.
-- Yeah... but how do I make money too?!?
I show you the "accident" that allowed me to make my first money online. Duplicate it and you could be making money as well!
-- It's so easy!
With only a couple of hours of work... this is truly "set it and forget it." Rinse and repeat to keep your list growing all year long.
Let me explain a little more about myself...
For years I was completely terrified of actually getting started online. "Who am I?" I thought. "I need to know more information first. I can't sell something until I know exactly how this all works."
Product after product, there was always something NEW to learn. Until finally, I had had enough! After reading a blog and watching someone bring in over $100K in ONE month, I knew that I had to get started. So, I turned on my camera and recorded everything I did from day one.
Listen, after sitting on the fence for over a year, I spent less than two hours time setting up my system and I made my first money online. Now, I didn't make a million bucks... however, I DID make money. And after having spent thousands "learning" it felt GREAT to finally have some money come back this way.
Just follow me as I do it. Start the videos, pause, complete the step, move on. In no time at all you'll have YOUR first campaign live and running. Believe me... it feels AMAZING once you're there.
{Testimonials will go here}
There is a lot of confusion surrounding our field.
I want to give you 4 criteria that sets this WSO apart:
1) This is the only program I have found that will walk you through the ENTIRE process, complete with videos of the EXACT steps I take.
2) Just follow me step-by-step. Click what I click... do what I do. In less than two hours you too will have a campaign live.
3) Nothing is left out: from program start, to product creation, squeeze page set up and more. It's all documented and detailed.
4) Don't have a product? Neither did I! I show you exactly what I did, what websites I went to and how I "created" my first product - live, and on camera!
How much is your time worth? Are you like me, "lurking" and buying WSO after WSO trying to "find" the perfect solution to making money online?
STOP reading and START doing! Believe, just one small step forward and you'll break the chain forever from a product consumer... to a product CREATOR. That's why at only $7, this is a steal.
But don't wait long... this is on a dime sale. Yes, a REAL dime sale - the price will go up ten cents for every purchase, so lock in your cheap rate right NOW.
Stop sitting on the sidelines and get in there and play!
In summary, here's what you get:
-- The EXACT steps I took from beginning to end, all outlined in easy to follow video.
-- How to create a product if you don't have one.
-- How to set up an autoresponder and which services are the cheapest. (This is information found NO WHERE else on the forum and is easily worth more than the price of this WSO alone!)
-- How to set up a squeeze page.
-- How to set up a confirmation page.
-- How to set up a download page, complete with how to install the files on your own server and set up the download links.
-- How to set up an affiliate re-direct link and how to mask those links so that people don't even know they left your website!
-- How to follow up your new subscribers.
-- The best tool to create squeeze pages, download pages, confirmation pages and more. Do in minutes what takes most people hours.
-- The Three TOP autoresponder services. How does $7/month for UNLIMITED subscribers sound? A lot better than Aweber... I can tell you that!
-- FREE Updates. If frequent questions come in, I'll SHOW you the answer live on camera. Never be confused as to what step to take next.
If you respond right away, you pay only $7.
Act immediately and receive the following bonuses
Since I know it's 100% to your benefit to act right away, I want to sweeten the pot and give you every possible reason to say YES today! If you respond immediately, you'll also receive the following:
Bonus 1:
-- My Best Resources, part 1: The best tool for creating squeeze pages, download pages, sales letters and more.
Bonus 2:
--My Best Resources, part 2: Forget Aweber or GetResponse... how about an autoresponder that can do everything the top dogs do, but for only $7/month for UNLIMITED subscribers? Step it up a notch for only $18/month.
Bonus 3:
-- My Best Resources, part 3: A TOTAL system - autoresponder with UNLIMITED subscribers, FULL shopping cart, FULL affiliate manager program -- all for LESS than $10 a month? I've been using this for years and NO ONE else is talking about it on this forum. This service alone is worth more than 15 times the cost of this WSO!
To make it easy, I offer a no risk, you-can't-lose, 100%, no-questions-asked, iron-clad moneyback guarantee. If for any reason, you aren't thrilled and satisfied with our product, just contact me within 30 days and I'll refund 100% of your purchase price. No hard feelings.
{ORDER BUTTON TO GO HERE}
To your success,
Travis Oertle
P.S. p.s. This really is a dime sale. I'm increasing the price 10 cents every sale - grab yours now before the price goes up!
P.P.S. Yes, this really is step-by-step video showing you exactly what to do. You can't lose. Start building your list today!
� Copyright 2003 by Lucky Roll Media, LLC. - All Rights Reserved
This is also my first attempt at a sales letter. Would love for you creative genius's to look it over and give me some feed back!
Thanks,
Travis
************
"[Case Study] How a complete Newbie built a list and made his first $$ online! (step-by-step videos)"
Dear Friend,
If you'd like to build your list, have step-by-step instructions on EXACTLY what to do and make your first money online, then this might be the most important letter you'll ever read.
Here's why:
I know what it's like to be stopped by fear, overwhelmed by information and uncertain as to which step should be completed next.
With this WSO, I take you by the hand and let you watch over my shoulder as I build a list and show you EXACTLY what I do to make money online.
Now, I know you're probably skeptical. That's normal and healthy. Let me give you three good reasons why you should listen...
Three Reasons To Believe What I Say
Reason one:
I was just like you. I quietly "lurked" on the forum, spending thousands on WSO's as I tried to understand this whole "internet marketing" thing. But every thing I read or watched always seemed to leave something out, which just added to my confusion and hesitation.
Ultimately, I just didn't know how to get started, and I wasted nearly a year of my life watching others make all the big bucks.
Reason two:
You get to watch over my shoulder and see EXACTLY what I did to build my list from absolutely zero to nearly 150 people in less than ten days, with only a couple of hours effort.
I reveal EVERYTHING: how to set up the autoresponder, how to set up a squeeze page, how to set up a download page, how to set up a confirmation page. I even show you how to mask your affiliate links so no one can game the system and go around you if you promote products.
Reason three:
You get to watch with me as I log into my clickbank account and see my first sales, EVER, online.
That's right, be there with me when I discover that I just made my first money online. You'll be surprised at how easy it actually was!
Here is a summary of the benefits you receive:
-- Where do you start?
I show you the EXACT method I used to build my list. Where to go, what to do, how to set everything up.
-- What auto responder should you use?
Forget Aweber and Getresponse! Who has money to spend every month when they are just getting started. I show you 3 different autoresponders that NO ONE is talking about here in the forum that cost less than $10 a month for UNLIMITED subscribers!
-- Create your first autoresponder list.
You'll know how to create your own list in less than five minutes.
-- Create your confirmation page.
Know exactly what to say and where to send your subscribers after they "opt in" to YOUR list.
-- Create your squeeze page.
Forget all the crazy templates! I show you an amazing tool that will help you create as many squeeze pages as you want... in less than two minutes flat!
-- Create your download page.
Finally... know exactly how to create your download page. I even get into my cpanel to show you EXACTLY how to save your reports and files so that your customers can download them after the order. It's so much easier than you think!
-- The money is in the follow up...
See exactly what I do to in my initial follow messages.
-- Yeah... but how do I make money too?!?
I show you the "accident" that allowed me to make my first money online. Duplicate it and you could be making money as well!
-- It's so easy!
With only a couple of hours of work... this is truly "set it and forget it." Rinse and repeat to keep your list growing all year long.
Let me explain a little more about myself...
For years I was completely terrified of actually getting started online. "Who am I?" I thought. "I need to know more information first. I can't sell something until I know exactly how this all works."
Product after product, there was always something NEW to learn. Until finally, I had had enough! After reading a blog and watching someone bring in over $100K in ONE month, I knew that I had to get started. So, I turned on my camera and recorded everything I did from day one.
Listen, after sitting on the fence for over a year, I spent less than two hours time setting up my system and I made my first money online. Now, I didn't make a million bucks... however, I DID make money. And after having spent thousands "learning" it felt GREAT to finally have some money come back this way.
Just follow me as I do it. Start the videos, pause, complete the step, move on. In no time at all you'll have YOUR first campaign live and running. Believe me... it feels AMAZING once you're there.
Don't take my word for it.
Listen to what our customers say.
Listen to what our customers say.
{Testimonials will go here}
There is a lot of confusion surrounding our field.
I want to give you 4 criteria that sets this WSO apart:
1) This is the only program I have found that will walk you through the ENTIRE process, complete with videos of the EXACT steps I take.
2) Just follow me step-by-step. Click what I click... do what I do. In less than two hours you too will have a campaign live.
3) Nothing is left out: from program start, to product creation, squeeze page set up and more. It's all documented and detailed.
4) Don't have a product? Neither did I! I show you exactly what I did, what websites I went to and how I "created" my first product - live, and on camera!
You get at least 10 times your money's worth!
How much is your time worth? Are you like me, "lurking" and buying WSO after WSO trying to "find" the perfect solution to making money online?
STOP reading and START doing! Believe, just one small step forward and you'll break the chain forever from a product consumer... to a product CREATOR. That's why at only $7, this is a steal.
But don't wait long... this is on a dime sale. Yes, a REAL dime sale - the price will go up ten cents for every purchase, so lock in your cheap rate right NOW.
Stop sitting on the sidelines and get in there and play!
In summary, here's what you get:
-- The EXACT steps I took from beginning to end, all outlined in easy to follow video.
-- How to create a product if you don't have one.
-- How to set up an autoresponder and which services are the cheapest. (This is information found NO WHERE else on the forum and is easily worth more than the price of this WSO alone!)
-- How to set up a squeeze page.
-- How to set up a confirmation page.
-- How to set up a download page, complete with how to install the files on your own server and set up the download links.
-- How to set up an affiliate re-direct link and how to mask those links so that people don't even know they left your website!
-- How to follow up your new subscribers.
-- The best tool to create squeeze pages, download pages, confirmation pages and more. Do in minutes what takes most people hours.
-- The Three TOP autoresponder services. How does $7/month for UNLIMITED subscribers sound? A lot better than Aweber... I can tell you that!
-- FREE Updates. If frequent questions come in, I'll SHOW you the answer live on camera. Never be confused as to what step to take next.
If you respond right away, you pay only $7.
Act immediately and receive the following bonuses
Since I know it's 100% to your benefit to act right away, I want to sweeten the pot and give you every possible reason to say YES today! If you respond immediately, you'll also receive the following:
Bonus 1:
-- My Best Resources, part 1: The best tool for creating squeeze pages, download pages, sales letters and more.
Bonus 2:
--My Best Resources, part 2: Forget Aweber or GetResponse... how about an autoresponder that can do everything the top dogs do, but for only $7/month for UNLIMITED subscribers? Step it up a notch for only $18/month.
Bonus 3:
-- My Best Resources, part 3: A TOTAL system - autoresponder with UNLIMITED subscribers, FULL shopping cart, FULL affiliate manager program -- all for LESS than $10 a month? I've been using this for years and NO ONE else is talking about it on this forum. This service alone is worth more than 15 times the cost of this WSO!
To make it easy, I offer a no risk, you-can't-lose, 100%, no-questions-asked, iron-clad moneyback guarantee. If for any reason, you aren't thrilled and satisfied with our product, just contact me within 30 days and I'll refund 100% of your purchase price. No hard feelings.
Here's how to order right now!
{ORDER BUTTON TO GO HERE}
To your success,
Travis Oertle
P.S. p.s. This really is a dime sale. I'm increasing the price 10 cents every sale - grab yours now before the price goes up!
P.P.S. Yes, this really is step-by-step video showing you exactly what to do. You can't lose. Start building your list today!
� Copyright 2003 by Lucky Roll Media, LLC. - All Rights Reserved
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