Critique My Sales Letter ... Part 2
Hello,
I posted a letter a couple of days ago and got some great feedback.
Here's the second round for my letter.
DISCLAIMER: This is NOT laid out yet, nor does it contain an images (like the product cover)... this is simply the copy I intend to use. Images etc. will be inserted later.
Thanks in Advance for your feedback!
Travis O.
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THREAD TITLE:
SUBHEADING:
Dear Warrior,
If you're interested in learning how I built my list and made my first money online with less than two hours of work, then you should read every word of this letter...
My name is Travis Oertle and I wasted over a year of my life trying to make a living online. That was until a total accident allowed me to build an email list and make money... all with less than 2 hours of work!
If you've been on the forum or working in Internet Marketing for awhile, then you know that "the money is in the list." The average is $1 per month, per subscriber. It's common knowledge... the foundation to every online business is creating a great list!
But where do you start? There are a million products out there talking about it but few (if any!) actually show you step-by-step what to do. I know, I own most of them.
At least I did, until the day I discovered a dead-simple way to build a list and make money online. The great thing about this method is that the entire set up and promotion took me less than TWO hours to complete following the simple steps I've outlined in Newbie List Building...
PRODUCT COVER HERE
BUY BUTTON
The biggest names in Internet Marketing ALL have huge lists of followers. They have the ability to create cash literally on demand by sending out one simple email.
With the right sequence of steps to follow, which are highlighted in Newbie List Building, you can't fail to start building you very own list of highly targeted subscribers.
Check out some of the following benefits of list building:
• More Traffic. (Send people to whatever offer or webpage you choose, whenever you choose)
• More Sales. (Once someone joins your list, you can continue to market to them for months, even years into the future.)
• More Repeat Customers. (It's a proven fact that the majority of people who buy once, will buy again and again!)
• More Targeted Marketing. (These prospects want more information from you and have shown an interest in purchasing what you have to offer.)
• More Cooperation and Teamwork. (If you think of your list more as a community than just prospects or numbers, you can build good relationships with your subscribers. This can create a sense of teamwork and cooperation where all parties benefit in the long run.)
There is no doubt that list building is one of the fastest ways to make a great income on the Internet...
However if you fail to follow a proven step by step system, then your efforts can easily fall flat and all you will have is wasted time, effort and money.
If you don't know how to successfully accomplish the following tasks your list building campaigns will "fail miserably":
• Create a free giveaway to offer your subscribers
• Create professional squeeze pages that compel visitors to enter their email address
• Drive traffic to your offers and squeeze pages
• Set up the download page where users can go to get their gift
• Convert visitors and subscribers into buyers for life.
Like you, I've spent my share of money on WSO's, "push button" software and many of the latest gimmicks to making "easy" money online.
You know what I'm talking about: the latest and greatest "super-amazing-totally-NINJA-way-to-make-big-bucks-fast!"
Talk about information overload!
Everywhere you turn, everyone is saying how EASY it is, right? Build a list, create a product, sell the product, rinse and repeat!
I wasted over a year of my life trying anything and everything...
Newbie List Building documents how I finally discovered a way to build a list and make money online... with less than 2 hours of work!
It's all documented over eight videos, so you can easily follow along.
You get to watch over my shoulder and see EXACTLY what I did to build my list from absolutely zero, with only a couple of hours effort.
I reveal EVERYTHING:
• How to set up an autoresponder.
• How to set up a squeeze page.
• How to set up a download page.
• How to set up a confirmation page.
• How to Drive traffic to your offer.
• How to Create a product.
• And More...
Don't have a product? Neither did I! I show you exactly what I did, what websites I went to and how I "created" my first product - live, and on camera!
Just follow me step-by-step.
Click what I click... do what I do.
In less than two hours you too will have a campaign live.
This is the only program I have found that will walk you through the ENTIRE process, complete with videos of the EXACT steps I take.
I even show you how to mask your affiliate links so no one can game the system and go around you if you promote products.
You'll even watch as I log into my Clickbank account and see my first sales, EVER, online.
That's right, be there with me when I discover that I just made my first money online. You'll be surprised at how easy it actually was!
Did I become an instant millionaire? No. But after thousands of dollars down the drain trying everything under the sun, finally seeing money coming IN was like being a part of the Los Angeles Lakers when they won their third NBA championship in a row!
Since I know Newbie List Building can help you create your list, I want to sweeten the pot and give you every possible reason to say YES today!
If you respond immediately, you'll also receive the following:
Bonus 1:
My Best Resources, part 1: The best tool for creating squeeze pages, download pages, sales letters and more. This tool will allow you to create a high converting squeeze page in less than five minutes!
Bonus 2:
My Best Resources, part 2: Forget Aweber or GetResponse... how about an autoresponder that can do everything the top dogs do, but for only $7/month for UNLIMITED subscribers?
Bonus 3:
My Best Resources, part 3: A TOTAL system - autoresponder with UNLIMITED subscribers, FULL shopping cart, FULL affiliate manager program -- all for LESS than $10 a month! I've been using it for years and NO ONE else is talking about it on this forum. This service alone is worth more than 15 times the cost of this WSO!
How much is your time worth?
Are you like I was, "lurking" and buying WSO after WSO, trying to "find" the perfect solution to making money online?
STOP reading and START doing! Believe me, just one small step forward and you'll break the chain forever: from a money spender... to a money MAKER.
That's why at only $7, this is a steal.
But don't wait long... this is on a dime sale. Yes, a REAL dime sale - the price will go up ten cents for every purchase, so lock in your cheap rate right NOW.
Stop sitting on the sidelines and get in there and play!
INSERT BUY BUTTON HERE
100%, no-questions-asked, iron-clad money back guarantee. If for any reason, you aren't thrilled and satisfied with Newbie List Building, just contact me within 30 days and I'll refund 100% of your purchase price. No hard feelings.
Not convinced? Read what other customers had to say:
(Insert quoted testimonials)
BUY BUTTON
To Your Success,
P.S. This really is a dime sale. I'm increasing the price 10 cents every sale - grab yours now before the price goes up!
P.P.S. Yes, this really is step-by-step video showing you exactly what to do. You can't lose. Start building your list today!
Copyright 2012 by Lucky Roll Media, LLC. - All Rights Reserved
I posted a letter a couple of days ago and got some great feedback.
Here's the second round for my letter.
DISCLAIMER: This is NOT laid out yet, nor does it contain an images (like the product cover)... this is simply the copy I intend to use. Images etc. will be inserted later.
Thanks in Advance for your feedback!
Travis O.
**********************
THREAD TITLE:
WARNING: Clicking here may result in you making your first $$$$$'s online...
SUBHEADING:
FINALLY: Step-by-Step videos reveal how to build a list and make money online... with less than two hours of work!
Dear Warrior,
If you're interested in learning how I built my list and made my first money online with less than two hours of work, then you should read every word of this letter...
My name is Travis Oertle and I wasted over a year of my life trying to make a living online. That was until a total accident allowed me to build an email list and make money... all with less than 2 hours of work!
If you've been on the forum or working in Internet Marketing for awhile, then you know that "the money is in the list." The average is $1 per month, per subscriber. It's common knowledge... the foundation to every online business is creating a great list!
But where do you start? There are a million products out there talking about it but few (if any!) actually show you step-by-step what to do. I know, I own most of them.
At least I did, until the day I discovered a dead-simple way to build a list and make money online. The great thing about this method is that the entire set up and promotion took me less than TWO hours to complete following the simple steps I've outlined in Newbie List Building...
PRODUCT COVER HERE
BUY BUTTON
Building a list is Quick AND Easy if you know how...
The biggest names in Internet Marketing ALL have huge lists of followers. They have the ability to create cash literally on demand by sending out one simple email.
With the right sequence of steps to follow, which are highlighted in Newbie List Building, you can't fail to start building you very own list of highly targeted subscribers.
Check out some of the following benefits of list building:
• More Traffic. (Send people to whatever offer or webpage you choose, whenever you choose)
• More Sales. (Once someone joins your list, you can continue to market to them for months, even years into the future.)
• More Repeat Customers. (It's a proven fact that the majority of people who buy once, will buy again and again!)
• More Targeted Marketing. (These prospects want more information from you and have shown an interest in purchasing what you have to offer.)
• More Cooperation and Teamwork. (If you think of your list more as a community than just prospects or numbers, you can build good relationships with your subscribers. This can create a sense of teamwork and cooperation where all parties benefit in the long run.)
Most Newbie list builders fail because they don't follow a proven system...
There is no doubt that list building is one of the fastest ways to make a great income on the Internet...
However if you fail to follow a proven step by step system, then your efforts can easily fall flat and all you will have is wasted time, effort and money.
If you don't know how to successfully accomplish the following tasks your list building campaigns will "fail miserably":
• Create a free giveaway to offer your subscribers
• Create professional squeeze pages that compel visitors to enter their email address
• Drive traffic to your offers and squeeze pages
• Set up the download page where users can go to get their gift
• Convert visitors and subscribers into buyers for life.
I can help you avoid these mistakes...
Like you, I've spent my share of money on WSO's, "push button" software and many of the latest gimmicks to making "easy" money online.
You know what I'm talking about: the latest and greatest "super-amazing-totally-NINJA-way-to-make-big-bucks-fast!"
Talk about information overload!
Everywhere you turn, everyone is saying how EASY it is, right? Build a list, create a product, sell the product, rinse and repeat!
I wasted over a year of my life trying anything and everything...
Newbie List Building documents how I finally discovered a way to build a list and make money online... with less than 2 hours of work!
It's all documented over eight videos, so you can easily follow along.
You get to watch over my shoulder and see EXACTLY what I did to build my list from absolutely zero, with only a couple of hours effort.
I reveal EVERYTHING:
• How to set up an autoresponder.
• How to set up a squeeze page.
• How to set up a download page.
• How to set up a confirmation page.
• How to Drive traffic to your offer.
• How to Create a product.
• And More...
Don't have a product? Neither did I! I show you exactly what I did, what websites I went to and how I "created" my first product - live, and on camera!
Just follow me step-by-step.
Click what I click... do what I do.
In less than two hours you too will have a campaign live.
This is the only program I have found that will walk you through the ENTIRE process, complete with videos of the EXACT steps I take.
I even show you how to mask your affiliate links so no one can game the system and go around you if you promote products.
You'll even watch as I log into my Clickbank account and see my first sales, EVER, online.
That's right, be there with me when I discover that I just made my first money online. You'll be surprised at how easy it actually was!
Did I become an instant millionaire? No. But after thousands of dollars down the drain trying everything under the sun, finally seeing money coming IN was like being a part of the Los Angeles Lakers when they won their third NBA championship in a row!
It Gets Even Better...
Since I know Newbie List Building can help you create your list, I want to sweeten the pot and give you every possible reason to say YES today!
If you respond immediately, you'll also receive the following:
Bonus 1:
My Best Resources, part 1: The best tool for creating squeeze pages, download pages, sales letters and more. This tool will allow you to create a high converting squeeze page in less than five minutes!
Bonus 2:
My Best Resources, part 2: Forget Aweber or GetResponse... how about an autoresponder that can do everything the top dogs do, but for only $7/month for UNLIMITED subscribers?
Bonus 3:
My Best Resources, part 3: A TOTAL system - autoresponder with UNLIMITED subscribers, FULL shopping cart, FULL affiliate manager program -- all for LESS than $10 a month! I've been using it for years and NO ONE else is talking about it on this forum. This service alone is worth more than 15 times the cost of this WSO!
You get at least 10 times your money's worth!
How much is your time worth?
Are you like I was, "lurking" and buying WSO after WSO, trying to "find" the perfect solution to making money online?
STOP reading and START doing! Believe me, just one small step forward and you'll break the chain forever: from a money spender... to a money MAKER.
That's why at only $7, this is a steal.
But don't wait long... this is on a dime sale. Yes, a REAL dime sale - the price will go up ten cents for every purchase, so lock in your cheap rate right NOW.
Stop sitting on the sidelines and get in there and play!
INSERT BUY BUTTON HERE
You can't lose with my 100%,
ironclad, money back guarantee
ironclad, money back guarantee
100%, no-questions-asked, iron-clad money back guarantee. If for any reason, you aren't thrilled and satisfied with Newbie List Building, just contact me within 30 days and I'll refund 100% of your purchase price. No hard feelings.
Not convinced? Read what other customers had to say:
(Insert quoted testimonials)
BUY BUTTON
To Your Success,
P.S. This really is a dime sale. I'm increasing the price 10 cents every sale - grab yours now before the price goes up!
P.P.S. Yes, this really is step-by-step video showing you exactly what to do. You can't lose. Start building your list today!
Copyright 2012 by Lucky Roll Media, LLC. - All Rights Reserved
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