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Catchy text for an outdoor game

by Drumdrone
3 replies
Hello, we are starting an outdoor game - people travel, visit and collect wooden medals called Stamps - we need short and descriptive text on the back of each stamp...here is what we have...please let me know if you

- understand what is it about
- if you come with something more attractive and i use it i will send you some money

Thank you
Jan
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www stradivarky cz/gamesa jpg

Capture the Stamp is a real stamp hunting game for everyone.
Players discover Scotland castles, museums, lochs and try to collect
10 Tourist Stamps. They are available at Tourist Stamp Points.
Discover new collectable passion inside of you and create your
collection of Scotland. Find rules of this game at
ww
#catchy #game #outdoor #text
  • Profile picture of the author olavlind
    What is in it for the collector? Except a lot of travel experience and expenses? Where is the hook, the incentive to make someone sitting on the fence decide to do it?

    Save them some money, give them some price, something.

    If there is no advantage in collecting other than owning the wooden things, you may have problems getting people to do this.

    ~Olav
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    • Profile picture of the author SusanLandry
      It's hard to know what the game is all about from your brief description. Who exactly are you targeting? And like Olav pointed out, what is the benefit to the collector ("discover a new collectable passion" is not very compelling). What is the ultimate goal for the player? Are there prizes to be had? Prestige? Excitement? Lots of fresh air?

      Anyone working on descriptive text for your product would need more information than you've provided - an in-depth explanation of how the game works would be a good place to start.
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      • Profile picture of the author angiecolee
        If you haven't heard of geocaching, I recommend you look into it. Their travel bugs are a similar idea to what you have, except the idea is NOT to keep the travel bugs and instead send them around the world via different hiding places.
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