Do You Think I'm A Slut?

by Rezbi
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I'm trying something new on my site.

Do you guys think you could take a look and let me know what you think?

Here's the link: Do You Think I
#slut
  • Profile picture of the author Scott Lambency
    What niche are you in?
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    • Profile picture of the author Rezbi
      Originally Posted by Scott Lambency View Post

      What niche are you in?
      Not in anything specific. I just give advice on marketing and business. And try to make some affiliate sales along the way.

      My main money earners are copywriting and article writing.

      What was your angle anyway?
      No angle, really. I'm just looking to see if this will persuade people to sign up to my list. If it does, good. If not, I'll change it.



      Originally Posted by Scott Lambency View Post

      What niche are you in?
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      • Profile picture of the author Joseph Robinson
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        The way I see things, there are two problems. First:

        Originally Posted by Rezbi View Post

        Not in anything specific.
        Originally Posted by Rezbi View Post

        No angle, really.
        This is saying you either think you're good at everything or good at nothing. Get specific, find your strengths, and play to them.

        Second, your signature:

        Do You Think I'm a Slut?
        Followed right after by
        No sex
        See the problem there? Inconsistent message.
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  • Profile picture of the author RecoveringTeacher
    Well, I'm pretty new to this so take it with a grain of salt.

    I find the approach to be a little tacky and a turn-off. The rest of your content is very good, but the slut part is a little unprofessional. It reminded me of something I read about copywriting where a sales letter was equated with getting someone into bed. Yes, sex sells, but it has to be done right. Yours is too "in your face."
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    • Profile picture of the author KKM017
      Originally Posted by RecoveringTeacher View Post

      Well, I'm pretty new to this so take it with a grain of salt.

      I find the approach to be a little tacky and a turn-off. The rest of your content is very good, but the slut part is a little unprofessional. It reminded me of something I read about copywriting where a sales letter was equated with getting someone into bed. Yes, sex sells, but it has to be done right. Yours is too "in your face."
      I agree with this, although using a very attractive woman to sell your copywriting isn't a bad idea. People would naturally flock to your business
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      • Profile picture of the author Rezbi
        Originally Posted by KKM017 View Post

        I agree with this, although using a very attractive woman to sell your copywriting isn't a bad idea. People would naturally flock to your business
        Hmm. Interesting.

        Any attractive women want to post on my blog and bring people flocking to it?

        (Note: Only attractive women need apply. No men please.)
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  • Profile picture of the author ericbryant
    I like the layout and design. It seems to be calling for something more classy. What was your angle anyway?
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  • Profile picture of the author ThomasOMalley
    I don't get the "slut" approach at all. I went to your site. The "slut" approach degrades your site. Remove it and take the professional approach.
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    does not swing my cat, old out dated crap that does not work.
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  • Profile picture of the author footballbob06
    I don't understand it. Who is your audience with this post? I see your blog looks like a marketing blog but this seems very unprofessional. It is also kind of hard to read. That is probably more of a language thing. Maybe try to make it more positive about what you are.

    Was it to say something funny to use as a hook? I think some will take it the wrong way. This especially may lose you some of your female visitors just for having that on your site. It sounds tacky.
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  • Profile picture of the author hgurudev11
    [quote=Rezbi;6606216]I'm trying something new on my site.

    Do you guys think you could take a look and let me know what you think?


    Maybe...! LoL a marketing trick
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  • Profile picture of the author RickDuris
    Rezbi,

    You have a natural desire to be creative. The piece didn't work. Too hard of a corner to turn.

    Also the link I was supposed to look at 404'd.

    Keep trying.

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  • Profile picture of the author Daniel Scott
    I honestly thought it was terrible.

    It was vague, with no obvious benefits or call to action... and it seemed controversial for controversy's sake (which IMHO doesn't work).

    But good on you for testing it. I could always be wrong.

    -Daniel
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  • Profile picture of the author Bruce Wedding
    It doesn't work at all for me. And I usually like sluts
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  • Profile picture of the author TheWrightWords
    I'm not crazy about the angle or the writing -- I think you can do better!
    Here's why:
    When I read "slut" I think "cheap". $30 per article is not overpriced, but it is not cheap -- after reading the copy, I was expecting to see you charging some crazy figure like $10 a piece (which I don't recommend, just letting you know the expectation established by an objective reader).

    You have some typos and grammatical errors in your page copy, a no-no if you want people to hire you for your writing skills. I think it is difficult to completely proofread your own work. I ended up hiring a freelance editor to review my articles before submitting to a particularly fussy client who insisted upon AP style. My great love of the serial comma is an issue, and I know it!
    I'd also break up the sentence length a bit -- everything is very short and choppy; varying the length of your sentences would help, I think.

    An odd aside:
    For some reason, I am hearing the voice of the "Old Spice" commercial guy when I read your site -- I think it is because of the "look at these articles" "then return here" stuff!
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    • Profile picture of the author Rezbi
      Originally Posted by TheWrightWords View Post

      I'm not crazy about the angle or the writing -- I think you can do better!
      Here's why:
      When I read "slut" I think "cheap". $30 per article is not overpriced, but it is not cheap -- after reading the copy, I was expecting to see you charging some crazy figure like $10 a piece (which I don't recommend, just letting you know the expectation established by an objective reader).

      You have some typos and grammatical errors in your page copy, a no-no if you want people to hire you for your writing skills. I think it is difficult to completely proofread your own work. I ended up hiring a freelance editor to review my articles before submitting to a particularly fussy client who insisted upon AP style. My great love of the serial comma is an issue, and I know it!
      I'd also break up the sentence length a bit -- everything is very short and choppy; varying the length of your sentences would help, I think.

      An odd aside:
      For some reason, I am hearing the voice of the "Old Spice" commercial guy when I read your site -- I think it is because of the "look at these articles" "then return here" stuff!
      Huh?

      What are you referring to - the page for articles?

      If so, I'll have you know I don't do $10 articles. :p
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      • Profile picture of the author TheWrightWords
        I clicked on one of your links, which offered $30 articles--which was higher than I expected to see when I read the "slut" copy
        I agree, charging $10 per is pretty low!
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        • Profile picture of the author Rezbi
          Originally Posted by TheWrightWords View Post

          I clicked on one of your links, which offered $30 articles--which was higher than I expected to see when I read the "slut" copy
          I agree, charging $10 per is pretty low!
          You're right about my copy, though.

          I'm very lazy when it comes to selling myself (I don't mean like a gigolo - that would probably be easier for me. My wife thinks so, anyway. ).
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  • Profile picture of the author Rezbi
    Thanks, all of you, for replying.

    It really was just a test.

    To be honest, I wasn't very comfortable with it, but I wanted to see if anything comes from it.

    I've had a ton of traffic, including from the search engines. I think the word 'slut' might have something to do with that.

    Anyway, I'll be taking that down - no signups. Not surprising. It actually took me all of 15 minutes to write and 'polish'. So you know why it's not all that.

    My real page will have a new report I'm compiling (I might call it something different, though).

    It will have stuff in there I know for certain will be valuable to all types of businesses. Especially copywriters.
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  • Profile picture of the author Loren Woirhaye
    I didn't see it making a point but I did see that you're
    looking to use headlines to get attention and segue
    into saying something.

    One guy in the copywriting market who is real good
    at writing headlines (email subject lines) which make
    you real curious - Ben Settle. If you don't get his
    emails you mind check them out... they may be
    published as blog posts too. I don't subscribe to
    a lot of that sort of thing anymore so I'm sure
    there are many other good writers who have a
    knack for this sort of writing.

    Craig Garber is also pretty good and of course
    Gary Halbert wrote the book, so to speak.
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    • Profile picture of the author Rezbi
      Originally Posted by Loren Woirhaye View Post

      I didn't see it making a point but I did see that you're
      looking to use headlines to get attention and segue
      into saying something.
      That's because I deleted the post.
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  • Profile picture of the author The Copy Warriors
    Sounds interesting!
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    • Profile picture of the author Rezbi
      Originally Posted by Andy Button View Post

      Sounds interesting!
      What does?
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  • Profile picture of the author Loren Woirhaye
    That's funny. I read it a couple of days ago but didn't
    comment.
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  • Profile picture of the author betsyanne
    Your link took me to an SEO blog type website, not to your article, which I think you have deleted. Oh well! I agree with the other posters, perhaps another link would work better. It's a colorful site and you have many posts.

    I think if you filled up the black space in the middle, it would maybe look better. Just an idea. Good luck with your site!
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  • Profile picture of the author CEOArob
    Totally off topic, but I think that I just found a new email subject line...

    This one definitely caught my eye
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