My First Real Squeeze Page. Let me know what you think

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Hey guys. I've just fully set up my first ever squeeze page which I'm ready to bring traffic to (Unless you guys point out some major flaws and help me out)

Let me know how it is and if you think it could use any adjustments. I modeled it after a veryy successful business by eben pagan in the same niche (Seduction Niche)


I modeled it after DoubleYourDating.com (20 million dollar a year business)

Check it out let me know if theres anything I should change, and I'll start split testing


DatingWarriors.com
#good #page #real #squeeze
  • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
    A couple things Steve...

    The headline concerns me. It strikes me as implying that the reader is not a REAL man.

    He may not be, but insulting him is not a good way to start a marketer-prospect relationship.

    The other thing is the bullets. I'm viewing the page at 800X600 resolution, and they're too small. I can only imagine how small the text must be at higher resolutions.

    Usually on a squeeze page, you don't need more than 3 bullets (make them your best ones), so that would be something to test if you don't get a good opt-in rate with 6.

    Alex
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  • Profile picture of the author stevealtman
    This is why I'm glad I posted here, I never really considered the resolution since it looks perfectly fine on my screen. Thanks Alex
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  • Steve...

    At one point I was your target market - I used to buy into tons of this stuff so I know how the ideal prospect feels.

    1.) Your biggest and most fatal flaw on that video...you start talking about YOU!

    You know who cares? No one. Sounds harsh, but it's true. You've got to jump in there, and tell them what's going to happen for THEM.


    2.) This is a great idea to start that video: Get rid of your "Look how awesome I am" bullshit at the start. Replace it with your story. You go into how you struggled to get women until you found PUA stuff, right?

    It's kind of weak right now, but it's a perfect foundation for something like this....

    "I used to be the insecure, nervous 'weirdo' that every girl would avoid at the bar. It felt horrible. In fact, it was so bad this one time, I tried talking to a girl and nearly got beaten up by the bouncer because I freaked out the girls so much/got a drink thrown on me by a girl/some other story.

    It was HORRIBLE. And if you're watching this, I'm pretty sure you've been here too - the anger, the frustration of seeing these stunning beautiful women pass you by, and you just wish you could go up to them, have a fantastic conversation, and be waking up beside them the next day.

    And if you're not angry at this, why the hell not? It's time to for things to change..."


    I dunno, something like that. Throw in an actual failure story, something that your prospects can really relate to. Make it emotional - I'm feeling zero emotion right now.

    3.) You spelt 'destroy' wrong at the top of your page Little detail, but it all counts.


    Start with these and you'll see a huge difference.
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    • Profile picture of the author ewenmack
      Steve, You haven't got the page layout
      the same as Doubleyourdating.com.

      You've got another video on the right of your main one...
      he has bullet points.

      Below the video, Doubleyourdating has sign up box with less bullet points and button within the box...you don't.

      Best,
      Ewen
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  • Profile picture of the author cycler
    I don't see the point of having that picture (NEW ?) as all it does it distracts the viewer from doing what you want them to do.......which is watch the video. Unlike the previous poster, I had no problems with the bullet points.
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  • Profile picture of the author natas105
    pm sent with some tips you could use.
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  • Profile picture of the author stevealtman
    Wow, extremely useful stuff guys. I'm definitely making some huge changes to this page. And woah Charasmatic thanks, you mind if I message you? It would be absolutely amazing if I had someone in the target market giving me a few tips.
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  • Profile picture of the author stevealtman
    Actually, can't message yet. Natas could you give me your email address so I could respond?
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  • Steve, the background serves no purpose other than to distract them from signing up. Plain white would be better. If you dont believe me, test it.

    Center the subscribe box.

    Get rid of the female on the right..Put that pic in your VIDEO so thats what we see before you click play (not words)..

    CENTER the video and the header..

    Remove the red highlighting and use JUST red.. BOLD it.

    Make the arrow a DOWN arrow pointing to the subscribe box.


    Dont take my word for it...test it!
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