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Would love some OTO critiques!

by InfiniteInc
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So this is my OTO that visitors will see right after they sign up for my newsletter, now this page is promoting an AFFILIATE offer just so everyone is aware. And it's not exactly a OTO so much as it is a backend offer. I made this page quick short as I'm hoping for more of an impulse purchase off my recommendation.

So please tear this page apart. What can be changed/improved/fixed?! Any and all critiques are welcome. I would really appreciate any help you would be able to give.

My OTO page: Thank You

Thanks!
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  • Profile picture of the author asha91
    Hi, from a consumer point of view, I'd say you'd need to add in more testimonials since you used the word "others" which signifies plural. Also, adding in a before and after picture of Ben Teal will make it more convincing Just my two cents
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  • Profile picture of the author TheSalesBooster
    This has the potential to blow up in your face. I hope you aren't sending people to this right now. If I saw this pitch after I signed up to a newsletter I would lose all trust in you. To put it lightly... there is no proof here.

    I couldn't even get past the first 3 paragraphs. You know what this pitch says to me? "Hey look at this product I found. It's really good because I said so, buy it please so I can make money".
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    • Profile picture of the author InfiniteInc
      Originally Posted by asha91 View Post

      Hi, from a consumer point of view, I'd say you'd need to add in more testimonials since you used the word "others" which signifies plural. Also, adding in a before and after picture of Ben Teal will make it more convincing Just my two cents
      Originally Posted by TheSalesBooster View Post

      This has the potential to blow up in your face. I hope you aren't sending people to this right now. If I saw this pitch after I signed up to a newsletter I would lose all trust in you. To put it lightly... there is no proof here.

      I couldn't even get past the first 3 paragraphs. You know what this pitch says to me? "Hey look at this product I found. It's really good because I said so, buy it please so I can make money".
      So really what the page is missing is proof factors to increase trust?

      Would adding before and after photos greatly help that?

      Thanks!
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      • Profile picture of the author asha91
        I think adding the photos in would be a good move, but I second thesalesbooster that the pitch is inappropriate. People subscribed to your newsletter for a reason, and it's not so you can sell stuff to them. Perhaps you can put in your pitch somewhere else on your website, instead of when people are clicking to access your newsletter?
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  • Profile picture of the author Antonio J.
    It looks good but it would be better if you put some images or video on that website.
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  • Profile picture of the author RickDuris
    Based upon your optin page, it's a non-starter.

    No affinity. No respect or trust earned. No authority. Not complementary to the original offer.

    Decent copy, but it's a flawed strategy.

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    • Profile picture of the author InfiniteInc
      Originally Posted by RickDuris View Post

      Based upon your optin page, it's a non-starter.

      No affinity. No respect or trust earned. No authority. Not complementary to the original offer.

      Decent copy, but it's a flawed strategy.

      - Rick Duris
      Thanks for the feedback, I am realizing that this affiliate offer strategy is not the best idea.

      However I am wanting to break even when I run my PPC campaign... So would an offer I have personally created work better as a OTO? with a reduced price that they only see once?

      That should inspire more trust and credibility right?

      Thanks for your help!
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  • Profile picture of the author RickDuris
    Honestly, I'd really have to dig into it deeper to really understand the mindset of the prospect prior to hitting this page. Right now, you have a lot of ground to make up for before you can presell them something.

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