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My updated sales page - advice appreciated!

by peteJ
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Hey guys, a few weeks ago I post here for some opinions on my very first page. I was suprised at how much support I received and the great advice everyone had to share! Since then I have been hard at working putting all that advice to good use.

I'm back once again asking for opinions on my new updated page. It's still a work in progress, and probably has a lot of work still to go. But, I would really appreciate it if I could get some feedback on what else I should change. Link is in sig.
#advice #appreciated #page #sales #updated
  • Profile picture of the author Chris Hardee
    The first thing I saw is that the headline font is difficult to read.

    I'm also not a big fan of the centered text, but that may be personal preference.

    What type of traffic are you planning to send to this page?
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    • Profile picture of the author peteJ
      Originally Posted by Chris Hardee View Post

      The first thing I saw is that the headline font is difficult to read.

      I'm also not a big fan of the centered text, but that may be personal preference.

      What type of traffic are you planning to send to this page?

      I agree, I put it there as more of a placeholder and meant to go back and fix it, thank you for reminding me!

      My main plan is to create videos showing off some the items I bought and show how cheap I got them for. I'm hoping this will get people excited at seeing actual items I bought, and get them thinking about buying their own.

      I'm also plannnig to set up a blog and build a list using the blog.
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  • Profile picture of the author Shazadi
    Well, having "treasures" mispelled in the headline isn't a big trust builder. :rolleyes:

    Your bullets aren't too shabby. The intro could use work. I know the video will include some sort of proof, but I, and I imagine most people, don't know much about selling stuff from thrift stores. Can it really be profitable? Name some other famous sellers that have earned a good living.

    Try citing news/more of your personal experiences to draw people in vs assuming they'll immediately believe this is a good business model.

    You also contradict yourself.

    "But these people make it look hard; they know what they're doing and how to find the deals.....right? ABSOLUTELY WRONG."

    Then you'll show them "exactly what to buy and how to separate the trash from the treasure."

    I.e. you do need the right know-how in order to find deals. What you're really trying to say is that discovering good finds doesn't have to be difficult, and you'll show people how simple it can be.
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  • Profile picture of the author BrainCopy
    I'd choose a better font and you also need to format the sales page properly.
    I would also get rid of the graphics at the top of the page.

    Also, your guarantee isn't strong at all.

    If you'd like, you check this out. its a 21 step formula by Perry Belcher. You can check it out here - 21 Step Salesletter Formula | Perry Belcher

    It's an excellent resource.

    Hope this helps.

    Best Regards,
    Anthony La Tour
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