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So I sent some emails...

by KostaKondra
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I sent some emails to my email list and think they could have been much better. Do you think you can offer any actionable insights/suggestions to make my future email campaigns better?

My carefully constructed email campaigns are below:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1...S3f62aJf8/edit

What are your thoughts and which specific sections would you change/improve?
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  • Profile picture of the author ewenmack
    Unfortunately for you and the recipient,
    you've both had your time wasted.

    Here's why...

    A split test was done to see if the readers preferred
    examples or how to's.

    They weren't asked, their actions decided.

    Open rates and click through rates showed
    they wanted examples.

    Like the old saying "Don't tell me, show me" rings true.

    And the best examples are of others in their market achieving
    stellar results in terms of what they did to get money, leads, and time frame.

    An example of this working was a SEO firm showing his results he recently
    got for his LA client.

    He cold emails others in same industry in different locations
    showing undeniable proof of top rankings.

    He gets phone calls, one from the owner of many locations.

    When asked why they contacted him, all say they want what
    the guy in L.A. got.

    Also helped he had a kick butt email written.

    Best,
    Ewen
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    • Profile picture of the author RickDuris
      It's hard for me to comment without what knowing your market is and source of traffic.

      What I can tell you is you would be served by taking a high-quality email copywriting course.

      Your writing is clear. I just don't think you have an effective email copywriting strategy.

      - Rick Duris
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      • Profile picture of the author Freshmorning
        Originally Posted by RickDuris View Post

        It's hard for me to comment without what knowing your market is and source of traffic.

        What I can tell you is you would be served by taking a high-quality email copywriting course.

        Your writing is clear. I just don't think you have an effective email copywriting strategy.

        - Rick Duris
        I agree with this.
        You writing is clear but you need to put it in an effective way.
        Aslo as TheSalesBooster said , every headline is weak and need modification except the first one. Don't know what your market is- but you need to show your customers what they care about.
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  • Profile picture of the author TheSalesBooster
    Are these the first emails you will be sending to your subscribers?

    If so, you need to rewrite them.

    First of all your email headlines are very weak. You want people to open your emails.

    "A little website tweak you need to do right now"

    This headline is the best one out of all of them because it makes your reader curious to know what the tweak is about. But then you ruin it with your email copy. It sucks. It looks like a sales pitch.

    If this is your first email, people are going to unsubscribe immediately. That whole email screams "Thanks for subscribing, Give me more money".

    Give them something of value. Make them believe you are an authority. Get them wanting to read your emails every time you send them. This will increase your open rates and create trust with your subscribers.

    I don't even want to read what your other emails are about because if I was your subscriber I would delete your email after the first one.

    First impressions are everything. Give your subscribers real value and they will be loyal to you forever.
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  • Profile picture of the author ThomasOMalley
    Your emails demonstate too much of a "me" message.

    Your strategy is off.

    Get on the list of excellent email writers, including Ben Settle and Joe Vitale, and study their emails.

    Study Bob Bly's emails as well.
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  • Profile picture of the author wvcopywriter
    You need to focus on one want, need, desire or problem. Offer a solution, it is not about you, its about your list. Focus your writing on them. Make it personal for each subscriber.
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    Don't have the time to write emails that will get opened, read and your reader to take action then leave me a message. I will get back to you within 48 hrs.

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  • Profile picture of the author vick2011
    I read the first line, and closed the tab. You need to be more catchy.
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  • Profile picture of the author colmodwyer
    Originally Posted by KostaKondra View Post

    I sent some emails to my email list and think they could have been much better. Do you think you can offer any actionable insights/suggestions to make my future email campaigns better?

    My carefully constructed email campaigns are below:
    https://docs.google.com/document/d/1...S3f62aJf8/edit

    What are your thoughts and which specific sections would you change/improve?
    You've already sent them... so what does your data tell you?

    They look woefully written from where I'm sitting, but I'm not your prospect.

    Colm
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  • Profile picture of the author misterme
    They're verbose, the grammar's confusing, and frankly, they're not compelling.
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  • Profile picture of the author AlexanderRista
    Thank you for the information ..
    Thank you for share the link ..
    Hopefully useful and I will be careful with e-mail spam that goes to my personal e-mail ..

    Thank you.
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