Rip me a new one please
What I know is that you should have a good headline that really grabs attention. That you should have a good story. Create urgency, which I'm not sure if I accomplished that.
I just need someone to tell me if I'm even going in the wrong direction. And if they're in a good mood, rip right into it and let me know what they think.
I have two different versions, but I guess they're practically the same.
temp2
temp1
They're sorta the same, but I think temp2 is probably the best of the two.
It is greatly appreciated if anyone could take a look at them.
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John_S -
Thanks - 1 reply
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Stallion -
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