Please Critique My Copy For a 5 Day Hawaiian Business Retreat
Hi Gang,
I'd greatly appreciate if you would take a look at a VERY rough draft of copy I've written for a business retreat I'm doing in Kauai.
In particular...
is this copy worth improving, or should I go back to the drawing board?
I haven't added pictures, or grammar check because I don't know if I'm going to use this copy or not (btw, I outsource final grammar checks because I suck at that).
Also, I'm not in the love with the headline, hook, or theme of this copy.
I can easily see issues in others copy; not so much of my own.
Also, keep in mind this is going out to my current client list, many of whom I've had a 10+ year relationship with. Authority is already established with them by now, or not.
They also get my monthly newsletter and CD. In other words, they are used to my style. Those who like me, read my stuff. Everybody else doesn't.
The target is a married or divorced male, white, 40-65 years old, grossing between 200 to 600 thousand a year, lives in California, owns a house, a rental, kids in high school or college, drives a "nice" car, LOVES business.
Below is the a google doc link to view the copy.
I've also included it as a pdf attachment as well, for those who like the letter format better.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1...JarYOXqq14/pub
Adam
p.s. depending on the rate of sales, I plan of doing a postcard mailing, a 3D "message in a bottle" mailing, and maybe other stuff to sell this puppy out.
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