How is this sales page?

Way too many images.

And too much information for that matter.

It's a freebie, so make it simple...

• Headline
• Graphic
• Bullets
• Opt-in form

Alex

Are you trying out a more image-rich approach like what MindValley is doing lately?

I've had good experience with that before, myself. Actually doubled the conversion rate of a sales page with that approach...

Anyway, I think your headline could be a little stronger to really spell out why someone would want to learn lucid dreaming.

And also, your images seem to require a lot of attention to really "get" them. I didn't look at them that closely, but I imagine, your traffic will also be skimming this page too.

Anyway, I hope this helps...

PS: Off topic, but are you the same Darius that that was behind Seduce Your Ex Back?

I've taken 40mg of Melatonin before. And man, my dreams were off the hook.

Interesting freebie pitch. Are you saying I need to sleep and dream to achieve your bullets?

Hmmm....

Too much stuff. It looks like an old movie poster. Cut about 75% of the page or turn it into a paid offer.

I agree with the to much stuff. I think you need to be more to the point with a stronger head line.

Something like "Did you know you can have everything you want in your Dreams"
Don't get me wrong I like the approach of more graphics but I find it to linger. You might consider just putting another call to action half way through the page for people like me that get board easily. I read your first bullets and then ended up browsing and half the way down the page I scrolled all the way to the bottom to see how much it costs.

I would take the time to do a split test with simply a second call to action in the middle of the page. If you get a better signup on one or the other you will know. I think you are going to find that most people are like me and have a short attention span. We are always surfing so we browse untill something catches our attention. I think that is what the page lacks.

It needs some tantalizing text that will draw us in. I can tell you the pictures don't draw me in.

I don't think you are that far off so please take my critique lightly you just need some small adjustments in my opinion.

I applaud your strength for putting it out for us to critique it is one of the hardest things to do. No one likes to hear what they have done wrong. But that is exactly what it takes to get a good copy that converts well. Bravo for being brave enough to ask for opinions.

At the bottom of the page, there are two different calls to action: one that tells you to enter your name/email, and another that tells you to watch a video.

You should only have one or the other. Having two different calls to action will only confuse your visitors.

I like infographics..yours maybe a little long. IMO, I'd take out the food at the bottom. I would add more spot color to the infographic. Did you do from scratch or use an online generator?

It takes a long time to load

I am working on another header, I am very cuerious why I didn't test it before! Thanks for the advice!

I have changed many things on the page! Anyone interested in leaving a sincere feedback?

I'm new to the game, so you should discount my opinion as an IM genius like some of the people here.

However, as an end-user, the highlights didn't sell me. It seemed a bit Wikipedia-ish. The top headline that caught my eye (as it's supposed to) told me something I've seen in mattress commercials; nothing sensational. It wasn't until I scrolled down, back up, and was about to bounce that I saw "Dream ANYTHING you want". The headlines like "what are dreams?" don't catch me either; I know what dreams are. "I was a winner" didn't catch my eye, and I blew through the whole section because it was so long without anything shiny in between to catch my eye and keep me reading.

Finally - and here's where you really shouldn't trust my opinion as a non-IM guy - but the idea of reading a weak headline, seeing a video that I can't remember 15 seconds after seeing it, and then hitting me with a price... inspired no action. As much as I sometimes wonder who is watching 15-minute Clickbank videos until the price is FINALLY revealed, that does pique my interest more. I was nowhere near ready to buy that high up, and it kind of turned me off.

I do like the flags above the testimonials, though. I like that kind of thing.

Sorry to be harsh; just my opinion as a user. I could surely improve my sales pages, too.

It looks fine.

Just break up your paragraphs and sentences into short ones.. It's kind of boring to read through them when it all looks rather cluttered together.

Other than that, cool! Nice idea also haha