Sales video script - NEED an experts opinion

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Hey guys, I have been working on my product launch for a little bit TOO long. Anyway, this is my first product launch and I went all out and NEED it to be perfect.

I paid a copywriter to write the script and the video and everything.
I know the sales video WILL make or break me. I want to get this right the first time.

I NEED A BRILLIANT EXPERT to do a quick once over and give me some final advice.

I have everything done and almost ready to launch (on clicksure)
I am doing a final edit of the video now to make everything FTC compliant so I was hoping to get all the little changes in right now.
This being my very first launch of a killer product that I made (I know its awesome - me and all of my friends made and still are making amazing money using it daily.)

Anyone here who really has experience willing to help a brother out? I am at a really tight budget as the project went wayy over budget a long time ago.. I do not plan on making any major changes to it at this point unless it is crucial...

Anyone here can help?
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  • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
    I NEED A BRILLIANT EXPERT to do a quick once over and give me some final advice.
    This sub forum is frequented by experienced and knowledgeable copywriters. Any one of us could help you, no doubt.

    You're brand-spanking new here and have contributed exactly zero value to the Warrior Forum.

    Two questions: 1) Why do you call us your "brother" 2) Why should we help you?

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    • Profile picture of the author daavid3
      Originally Posted by Alex Cohen View Post

      This sub forum is frequented by experienced and knowledgeable copywriters. Any one of us could help you, no doubt.

      You're brand-spanking new here and have contributed exactly zero value to the Warrior Forum.

      Two questions: 1) Why do you call us your "brother" 2) Why should we help you?

      Alex
      1. I called myself a brother. 2. Just because I am new here doesn't mean I don't deserve help. You were also new here at 1 point I am sure.
      and how do you know I am not willing to financially compensate? and I have a ton of internet marketing experience and in depth knowledge. I have done some big things in this space and am always giving back to those that give to me.. So why shouldn't you help me?
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      • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
        Originally Posted by daavid3 View Post

        1. I called myself a brother. 2. Just because I am new here doesn't mean I don't deserve help. You were also new here at 1 point I am sure.
        and how do you know I am not willing to financially compensate? and I have a ton of internet marketing experience and in depth knowledge. I have done some big things in this space and am always giving back to those that give to me.. So why shouldn't you help me?
        Entitlement mentality never ceases to amaze me.

        Alex
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        • Profile picture of the author Mark Pescetti
          Originally Posted by Alex Cohen View Post

          Entitlement mentality never ceases to amaze me.

          Alex
          I want to see it because I'm curious why he isn't refining the copy with his copywriter. Oops, the jig is up.

          If somebody paid me, didn't test it, then went on the WF to pay (or not pay) other copywriters for advice... well, it wouldn't sit well.

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  • Profile picture of the author ThomasOMalley
    In other words, I expect you to do a brilliant job for free...everyone one jump and help out our brother...lolol.

    Plus, as he says, he still making great money with the product but he has a tight budget...sound familiar anyone?? LOL
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    • Profile picture of the author daavid3
      Originally Posted by ThomasOMalley View Post

      In other words, I expect you to do a brilliant job for free...everyone one jump and help out our brother...lolol.

      Plus, as he says, he still making great money with the product but he has a tight budget...sound familiar anyone?? LOL
      LOL - this project is over budget.. It is a business.. I am willing to put a certain amount in to get more back. Just because I make a $&@^ ton of money doesn't mean every project I do has an unlimited budget. Seriously are you guys children. If you nothing to say keep calm and move on..
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  • Profile picture of the author AnabelleFlorida
    I'm curious to see the video and I would be willing to offer some suggestions (if necessary). But if you paid a competent copywriter, everything should be fine. Please understand that I won't make significant changes without compensation.

    I have to be honest though ...

    I don't like the implication that there are only men in here.
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    • Profile picture of the author daavid3
      Originally Posted by AnabelleFlorida View Post

      I'm curious to see the video and I would be willing to offer some suggestions (if necessary). But if you paid a competent copywriter, everything should be fine. Please understand that I won't make significant changes without compensation.

      I have to be honest though ...

      I don't like the implication that there are only men in here.
      Anabelle! Thank you so much for you valuable input on my VSL and I am really glad that you liked it!
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  • Profile picture of the author max5ty
    Originally Posted by daavid3 View Post


    (I know its awesome - me and all of my friends made and still are making amazing money using it daily.)

    I am at a really tight budget
    Hmmmmm..........
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    • Profile picture of the author Mark Pescetti
      Originally Posted by max5ty View Post

      Hmmmmm..........
      Yup, talk about contradicting yourself.

      If you and your friends make so much money, why are you on a tight budget?

      #makesnosense #bs

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      • Profile picture of the author daavid3
        Originally Posted by Mark Pescetti View Post

        Yup, talk about contradicting yourself.

        If you and your friends make so much money, why are you on a tight budget?

        #makesnosense #bs

        mark
        1. I am over my original budget for this project. Its a business things have budgets.
        2. I don't want a copy writer to ask for ridiculous sums
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    • Profile picture of the author daavid3
      Originally Posted by max5ty View Post

      Hmmmmm..........
      I can show you my stats for today
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  • Profile picture of the author Mark Pescetti
    Fair enough. Wy don't you just post the copy - if you're looking for a critique?

    If the copy really is good... and little tweaks are all that's necessary, should be pretty painless. I'll take a look if you're not willing to put yourself in the line of fire.

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  • Profile picture of the author AnabelleFlorida
    Mark,

    I don't know Daavid3 personally, so I have no idea why he hasn't gone back to his original copywriter, I didn't ask. I will tell you that whoever wrote the copy for his VSL did a really good job. I was impressed. Having said that, let me share a story with you ...

    I wrote copy for an author who was about to launch his non-fiction book. I wrote for his website, I gave him a small campaign for Facebook, Twitter, Email (to be sent out to his list), and a Press Release. I was paid well and we worked on it and worked on it and worked on it.

    I had other other clients to take care of, so after making sure he was okay with everything, I told him I had to move on to other projects. Knowing that he would probably get in touch with me again for more tweaking, I told him I would most likely be available for more changes (if needed) in time for his launch, but I would need more compensation, which was more than fair.

    You know what he did?

    He vanished.

    I noticed later that some of my copy had been tweaked. The changes were inconsequential, so whatever.

    My point is that sometimes a copywriter has to move on, or has to take care of other obligations.

    There's only so much a copywriter can do for some clients.

    I have no idea, but maybe something similar happened here.
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    • Profile picture of the author daavid3
      Originally Posted by AnabelleFlorida View Post

      Mark,

      I don't know Daavid3 personally, so I have no idea why he hasn't gone back to his original copywriter, I didn't ask. I will tell you that whoever wrote the copy for his VSL did a really good job. I was impressed. Having said that, let me share a story with you ...

      I wrote copy for an author who was about to launch his non-fiction book. I wrote for his website, I gave him a small campaign for Facebook, Twitter, Email (to be sent out to his list), and a Press Release. I was paid well and we worked on it and worked on it and worked on it.

      I had other other clients to take care of, so after making sure he was okay with everything, I told him I had to move on to other projects. Knowing that he would probably get in touch with me again for more tweaking, I told him I would most likely be available for more changes (if needed) in time for his launch, but I would need more compensation, which was more than fair.

      You know what he did?

      He vanished.

      I noticed later that some of my copy had been tweaked. The changes were inconsequential, so whatever.

      My point is that sometimes a copywriter has to move on, or has to take care of other obligations.

      There's only so much a copywriter can do for some clients.

      I have no idea, but maybe something similar happened here.
      What happened was I did pay my copy writer very well. (I think) He did exactly what I asked of him however, I as the project was coming to an end I didn't feel he had that much sales letter writing experience or maybe he was losing interest in my project. Either way Thank you Anabelle for helping me out and giving me your priceless opinions and edits. I will be PM'ing you for copywriting work if you are available.
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  • Profile picture of the author Mark Pescetti
    Good job Anabelle!
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