What are your top 5 email headlines? Here's mine

by Jreed
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Thought this would make a valuable post if everybody decided to share the wealth.

Basically share your top 5 email headlines that got the highest open rate for you.

Here are mine.

1. You've been lied to (5.7%)
2. I hope the simplicity of this strategy doesn't insult your intelligence (5.1%)
3. You didn't want to pay so here it is(3.7%)
4. I messed up (2.9%)
5. Open your PayPal Acct (2.9%)

And another one on the house.
6. Something's simply amaze me (2.7%)
#copy #email #headlines #mine #swipe #top
  • This might be like throwing a zippo into a box of fireworks...

    But are email subject lines that important?

    I only ask because I always look at who they are from - before I open them. I pay much more attention to that than the SL.

    But I'm prepared for an avalanche of abuse and statistics proving behond a shadow of a doubt that for everyone else it's the subject line that really counts.


    Steve
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  • For me, the results are more about timing (I get a better response for clients when emails are sent in the evenings - even for B2B).

    I'm on a few lists - that I normally read. Regardless of the subject line.

    Unless I'm busy.

    The SL may say "Steve, honest to god, here's $100,000 just click within the hour and we'll send it"

    I may will miss it.


    Steve
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  • Jreed - fair point you wanted headlines - I'll leave this thread to the good people who will hopefully share theirs.

    And here's one I did that got a high open rate and response -

    Did You Really Mean To Do That?


    Steve
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  • Profile picture of the author Don Grace
    Below is an image from my aweber for 4 of my ar emails. Not to shabby of an open rate I'd say. Notice the headlines, no big deal at all...

    So why are my opens so high? Because I agree with Steve about who they are from. I created a bond with this list so they know when I send something it's good content that helps them and it's not just me trying to sell stuff...

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    • Profile picture of the author Jreed
      Originally Posted by Don Grace View Post

      Below is an image from my aweber for 4 of my ar emails. Not to shabby of an open rate I'd say. Notice the headlines, no big deal at all...

      So why are my opens so high? Because I agree with Steve about who they are from. I created a bond with this list so they know when I send something it's good content that helps them and it's not just me trying to sell stuff...

      I agree, they know you, my AR opens are much higher. I was really referring to broadcasts. Yes you are right your relationship plays an important role for you
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  • Profile picture of the author shawnlebrun
    One of my best openers....

    "here's your free gift"

    That one got me over 48% open rate.

    of course, you gotta give them a free gift cause if you don't, your next
    open rate will be closer to zero!
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    • Profile picture of the author Ricky Allen
      Well I love many of my own folks such as this one - It's Time You Stopped Digging In The Dirt For Diamonds, Ricky Allen Is About To Show You A Much Better Way To Make Money......
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    • Profile picture of the author Memetics
      A really good opening headline only needs to include the subjects name to massively increase the chance of the subject clicking on the content if it's known and you're selling a high value service or item.

      For instance; if I was to email "Steve the copywriter"

      My subject line would be the beginning of the content and therefore create compliance momentum to open - the brain dislikes unfinished tasks.

      So I would use the subject line:

      "Hi Steve, I was thinking about what you said about..."

      This works for the following reasons:

      1) Compliance momentum.
      2) Steve's unconscious spam filter is bypassed as it's conversational and includes his name and not mass marketing.
      3) Steve is curious to what he said that made me interested.
      4) He wants to be consistent with his past sayings so needs to know what they are to be consistent with them.
      5) He detects he's created some powerful interest and wants to know what it it is so he can use it again.

      Afterwards you can mention something on their website or perhaps an article they wrote in a trade journal etc then unleash your copy on the new prospect.
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  • Profile picture of the author Don Grace
    A really good opening headline only needs to include the subjects name to massively increase the chance of the subject clicking on the content if it's known and you're selling a high value service or item.

    For instance; if I was to email "Steve the copywriter"

    My subject line would be the beginning of the content and therefore create compliance momentum to open - the brain dislikes unfinished tasks.

    So I would use the subject line:

    "Hi Steve, I was thinking about what you said about..."
    So what is your open rate for this assuming you replace "Steve" with "{firstname_fix}"?

    I disagree with using the name, especially in the IM market because they know it's BS from an autoresponder. Think of it like this, when you email a friend do you put their name in the subj line? No.

    Afterwards you can mention something on their website or perhaps an article they wrote in a trade journal etc then unleash your copy on the new prospect.
    Now that I look deeper into your post it seems like you're talking about sending one email to one person. The OP is talking about open rates for autoresponders mailing thousands of people at one time.
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    • Profile picture of the author Jreed
      Yes I also disagree with the name thing any person remotely savvy knows the sender has no idea who they are.
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    • Profile picture of the author Memetics
      Originally Posted by Don Grace View Post

      Now that I look deeper into your post it seems like you're talking about sending one email to one person. The OP is talking about open rates for autoresponders mailing thousands of people at one time.
      Ah my mistake Don. I come across this method a couple of years ago from a former associate of mine who worked for a recruitment agency specialising in headhunting senior execs in the banking and investment industry.

      We were talking about email recruitment and getting your foot in the door and she mentioned the method as having worked very well for them. By all accounts from 59 mail shots across the UK 58 of these were opened (The 59th was apparently in prison at the time) resulting in 8 new employees for their customer which was an exceptional result.

      I suppose the method could in theory be utilized by the OP if they have software to filter name based addresses and target these only but the content would have to be pretty impressive to not make the prospect feel tricked once they had opened it.

      Perhaps a very exclusive offer available to a very select few in the targets niche and the recipient received it in error and now wants to be "in on the deal"? Not sure of the ethics on this one though...
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  • Hey, Jreed, Steve, Don, Shawn, Ricky, Memetics!


    (it's Ok I was just checking to see if the name thing worked).


    Steve
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    • Profile picture of the author Jreed
      Originally Posted by Steve The Copywriter View Post

      Hey, Jreed, Steve, Don, Shawn, Ricky, Memetics!


      (it's Ok I was just checking to see if the name thing worked).


      Steve
      Lol, I came back hoping to see some cool headlines oh well. Look what it boils down to is intent.

      If I got your lead from tradeshow, or worked for a professional agency hiring professionals. Then yeah maybe I might use the name because I would hopefully talk to these people one day.

      In fact there is nothing wrong with using a name for marketing emails as well, but it's just not necessary.

      I know ebay doesn't know me personally and it doesn't do anything to me when I see them use my name (not sure if they actually use names, just an example)

      I do have 7 years of professional recruiting experience for the Air Force. I recruited young adults for 4 years and recruited Doctors for 3 years.

      The first Doctor I recruited was the result of a letter I mailed him with sales copy I created that no other recruiter was using (they were all using standard Air Force brochures). This was before I was involved in IM.

      My personal online intentions are different, my goal is to get my emails opened, links clicked, and products sold.

      If I were to get into a different lane of IM then I may use the more personal (possibly respectable) approach.

      Until then I just wanted to see some good headlines. Geesh:p
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      • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
        Get on Frank Kern's list. His email subject lines are reputed to work very well.

        Alex
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  • Profile picture of the author expresswriters
    Obama's super-savvy social media marketers and Internet marketing crew (this is how he won, really, back in his first campaign....smart guy) titled fundraising emails with "Hey" That was it. Nothing else. The thing raised him an obscene amount of his total funds, I heard.

    Totally unrelated...
    Obama Is Checking Your Email

    Personal experience: I've usually found 4-10 words is a good length, and my open rates improve with funny, quirky or humorous titles rather than dry, factual ones.
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  • Just reading Alex and Julia's comments.

    Frank's latest email had the subject line "Hey"


    Steve
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    • Profile picture of the author Jreed
      I've actually thought of using that many times before, not sure why I never have. I mean when I send an email to a buddy it's normally a one word heading like that.

      Thanks.
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      • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
        Originally Posted by Jreed View Post

        I've actually thought of using that many times before, not sure why I never have. I mean when I send an email to a buddy it's normally a one word heading like that.

        Thanks.
        These are the emails I've gotten from Frank in the last month and a half or so.

        One thing to keep in mind is, subject lines should be congruent with the persona you're trying to project to your prospects.

        Alex
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        • Profile picture of the author Jreed
          The funny thing is, If I saw all those emails lined up in my inbox like that. The first one I would click would be the one that says hey, and not because it's on top.

          Thanks for the share.
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          • Profile picture of the author RobinInTexas
            Some that I deleted today:

            Something BIG is Coming
            The new iPhone is up for grabs! Don't miss out
            today's live training with me: all the stuff that p***es me off
            New Order Date: 09/19/2013
            Crazy offer, really
            I felt let down
            I've just been testing a new WordPress plugin and I'm blown away!
            Zero to $473.56 in 2 hrs... first time they tried it?
            3 more years of failing?...


            I just wonder where these people come up with some of the stuff they send out.
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        • Profile picture of the author shawnlebrun
          Originally Posted by Alex Cohen View Post

          These are the emails I've gotten from Frank in the last month and a half or so.

          One thing to keep in mind is, subject lines should be congruent with the persona you're trying to project to your prospects.

          Alex
          Like Alex rightfully said... it's about your positioning and WHO you're trying to be online.

          Before he became the "I don't care" surfer dude... Frank was as clean-cut and tidy looking as they come. I'm sure he realized you can get further ahead by standing out and being different... hence the surfer dude persona.

          Subject lines for your emails really have to do with your list knowing you, liking you, being aware of you, etc...

          So, since most of the folks on Frank's list know him and like him, he can get away with email subjects like "Hey"

          I get that all the time from others I don't know and they get deleted instantly. From Frank, I'll open it.

          When I break into a new niche... until I'm known and have my positioning down, I've found that subject lines that tackle the BIG problems in my niche... those work well and get noticed.

          in other words... think of the REALLY big problems in your niche... and address one of the biggies in your subject line.

          People tend to notice problems right away... so if you send them an email that has their particular problem in it, it may catch their attention.
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    • Profile picture of the author expresswriters
      Originally Posted by Steve The Copywriter View Post

      Just reading Alex and Julia's comments.

      Frank's latest email had the subject line "Hey"


      Steve
      Oh my...that's so funny!
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  • Profile picture of the author retsced
    Here's a couple that have worked well for me...

    The lack of motivation and mindset issue...(18.8%)

    Shotguns, Post Offices and the Free Report (12.7%)

    Why I deleted over 1k subscribers today... (15.6%)

    What's the point? (16.7%)

    Why I'm ditching the "traditional" squeeze page format... (18.3%)

    Just to note. I'm constantly deleting subscribers from my email list. These days i actually use "no less" than a 2 page squeeze page to deter freebie seekers and time wasters.
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  • And it had a presidential response (lol).


    Steve
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  • Profile picture of the author nik0
    Banned
    I get a 100% open rate.

    My subject title is: "Order complete"

    You damn bet they open it
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    • Profile picture of the author candymai
      Originally Posted by nik0 View Post

      I get a 100% open rate.

      My subject title is: "Order complete"

      You damn bet they open it
      That's a neat trick, but I admit it will work, at least the owner will try to see what they purchased (unknowingly-they think ).
      The rest is how your contents perform.
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      • Profile picture of the author nik0
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        Originally Posted by candymai View Post

        That's a neat trick, but I admit it will work, at least the owner will try to see what they purchased (unknowingly-they think ).
        The rest is how your contents perform.
        Well it are actual reports send to my customers, hence the 100% open rate

        But I bet it would make a neat trick!

        I'm sure the biggest killer in email deliveries is the fact that they end up in your spam folder 99% of the time so that kills the whole open rate.

        I know cause all those emails end up in my spam folder all the time so perhaps the first email/contact must be that great that they safe list you.
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  • Profile picture of the author JaredRhodenizer
    My emails are very personable. I also get high open rates.
    Best subject lines:

    Why are you overweight?
    Let's eat breakfast
    I believe in you
    Let's go on a walk
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