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```$1 Bill Attached At The Top Of The Letter´´´´
Dear Friend,
As you can see I have attached a $1 bill to the top of this letter.
Why have I done this? There are two reasons:
1. I thought a $1 bill would be a good way to get your attention
2. What I am about to tell you could make you a lot of money
Here is what this is all about: I have been renovating the finest homes in Calgary for over 30 years now.
During this time I have discovered numerous ways to make homes more beautiful and valuable for their owners. In fact my renovations have even been featured in Home and Garden magazine.
I have renovated the homes of some of the wealthiest Calgarians. Including the home of the Vice President of Shell Oil Canada, and the owner of a multi-billion dollar oil company in Texas.
The wealthy and powerful settle for nothing less than the absolute best. Neither should you. That´s why I am writing today about my home renovation services.
My services are an investment in your most valuable, your home. A renovated home:
> Is an investment you can cash in on at any time
> Raises your net worth
> Produces a strong ROI
> Gives you something you can be proud of
> Is something you and your family can enjoy everyday
> Will make your children proud to live there
> Demonstrates the success you have achieved in life
Given the advantages of a home renovation there is no reason for any serious home owner shouldn´t renovate. It is a profitable investment that your family will enjoy everyday.
How do you choose the right contractor? Well considering the wealthiest and most powerful Calgarians can choose from anyone - why not go with the one they pick, out of all the choices available? If those with the most demanding tastes trust me with their home renovation, cant you also?
What surprises most people is how competitive my prices are. They would expect that my prices would be much higher than an ordinary contractor... but are pleasantly surprised when they discover my quote is quite competitive with the other options available.
To discover for yourself what my services can do for your home, just call me, Dan, now on my personal cellphone at xxx-xxx-xxxx for a free quote on your project and a discussion about how to make your dreams for your home come true.
```$1 Bill Attached At The Top Of The Letter´´´´
Dear Friend,
As you can see I have attached a $1 bill to the top of this letter.
Why have I done this? There are two reasons:
1. I thought a $1 bill would be a good way to get your attention
2. What I am about to tell you could make you a lot of money
Here is what this is all about: I have been renovating the finest homes in Calgary for over 30 years now.
During this time I have discovered numerous ways to make homes more beautiful and valuable for their owners. In fact my renovations have even been featured in Home and Garden magazine.
I have renovated the homes of some of the wealthiest Calgarians. Including the home of the Vice President of Shell Oil Canada, and the owner of a multi-billion dollar oil company in Texas.
The wealthy and powerful settle for nothing less than the absolute best. Neither should you. That´s why I am writing today about my home renovation services.
My services are an investment in your most valuable, your home. A renovated home:
> Is an investment you can cash in on at any time
> Raises your net worth
> Produces a strong ROI
> Gives you something you can be proud of
> Is something you and your family can enjoy everyday
> Will make your children proud to live there
> Demonstrates the success you have achieved in life
Given the advantages of a home renovation there is no reason for any serious home owner shouldn´t renovate. It is a profitable investment that your family will enjoy everyday.
How do you choose the right contractor? Well considering the wealthiest and most powerful Calgarians can choose from anyone - why not go with the one they pick, out of all the choices available? If those with the most demanding tastes trust me with their home renovation, cant you also?
What surprises most people is how competitive my prices are. They would expect that my prices would be much higher than an ordinary contractor... but are pleasantly surprised when they discover my quote is quite competitive with the other options available.
To discover for yourself what my services can do for your home, just call me, Dan, now on my personal cellphone at xxx-xxx-xxxx for a free quote on your project and a discussion about how to make your dreams for your home come true.
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